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Cool concept, but a forgettable story. ........................................................................
I love this fanfiction I wish more chapters will be released thank you @Kvnqwrld 😎😎😎😎😎😒😒😒😒😒🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻
Honestly half of it is just AI the other half is author just repeating words. He wasted half a new chapter on the past chapters words..? like you've already said this why repeat it in the next chapter and waste half of that chapter. Im convinced its fully ai written or the author is a automated idiot
I love this. Can't wait to see what you have happen next or how the Hela situation is going. Totally ship Hela and oc. Have t-shirt already printed.
I liked it quite a lot at the start, but the MC starts to feel more and more like a side character in his own story. Grammar's good, updates are plentiful, the world-building is nice, and the characters (other than the MC) are developing well.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์The story is all right and interesting enough, but the use of AI is heavy on this one. Especially during the first chapters, it's to the point that you could skim more than half of the chapter and lose nothing.
What's killing this story is this excess of side plots. Chapters and chapters where the MC can't even be called a supporting character. And these are plots that aren't even interesting, they barely contribute to anything and only serve to increase the number of words. The plot has to be focused exclusively on the MC, since in addition to the MC being an introduced character, he is a reincarnator and must always be built and improved. The way things are, it seems that sometimes the MC is remembered, and then he quickly grows so many % in strength with the system, and this isn't even developed properly in the story. The system ends up as a boring crutch, used to justify the MC's sudden increase in strength, which is really boring. If it doesn't change, it will be just another story to leave out. I always make the observation that the author can and should write whatever he wants and have fun doing it, since it's a non-profit thing, but what's the point of publishing the story if the readers don't even bother to read it because the story becomes so boring.
Tema história interessante mas escrita e jeito que vai história parece muito estranho e pouco cansada ler parece muito feito i.a com todo respeito
hey there i have been reading your fanfic and it has such a good story so i would like to know if you are interested in publishing this fanfic to my novel group and worry not we will pay you 4 to 5 dollars per thousand views and your bring more views from other platforms and the more views your novel chapters have the more money you have so if you are interested please contact me on instagram My Instagram [yurichi_adrenaline] so please consider my offer one time and maybe this collaboration will change your whole life and if you don't use instagram you can reply here as well thank you
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Ótimo pôr favor continue com seu trabalho achei super legal interessante então não abandone essa FanFiction Não vejo a hora de ver o próximo capítulo
Bro, what would you think about writing a fanfic in which the protagonist is reincarnated in MHA with a quirk based on Nox's abilities from the wakfu series, that is, he can use wakfu and can use his spells to stop time and control his sword? needle with the wakfu, that would be very epic
Muy buena la trama, me preguntó cómo logrará el Mc para evitar que Hela lo quiera matar solo verlo, O ya sea por intervención de Odín o Heindall, ya qué sus Ojos pueden ver bastante lugares del universo?
The only think that I don't like about this fanfic is that the chapters are short and only 3 chapters per week
The SI is subsumed by the OC, but the problem is that there is zero character development. That means that when the main character goes out to do his thing, the motivation is 1 dimensional (revenge). There isn't a puddle of depth to what he's actually trying to accomplish or what he's going to do later on. I'm fairly certain the video game aspect of this story is interchangeable with any other power/system/cheat. It's probably not going to impact the narrative in any meaningful way aside from letting the MC stomp all his enemies.
it's kept me interested and annoyance free up till chap 30 were I'm stuck now waiting for the author's next chap. REALLY the fans need better basement guards. find him and stick him back in.
is author going to drop the novel.author took too long to release chapters. In the beginning author posted at least two chapters a day. so i want to know when will be the next chapter be uploaded.
Hello 👋. I usually don't write comments on works but i really love this book and it's going well so far. I hope Author continue this and don't drop it suddenly. I whole heartedly support this 5 star review from me.
did the author drop the novel. a good marvel novel.powers,mc personality,hela as wife is just right for me. and if author still writing you can use league of legends as next game.It have a loft of characters for templates.
Ehh, it’s not terrible. It feels like it’s AI assisted (I mean this in a negative way, btw). Writing is okay, not many errors, but it is often repeating. The story concept itself is interesting, but I don’t think the author managed to reach the full potential of it. The pacing is quite fast and the MC’s actions would not be smart if not for the author making it the ‘right’ choice to make at the moment. Overall, wouldn’t recommend it if you want a deeper story. You don’t have to(and I don’t recommend) use your brain while reading this.
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Three chapters in and while only reading every third paragraph I got tired of the repetition. I will return later to see if it will get better later on but for now this is comparatively painful.
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Cool concept, but a forgettable story. ........................................................................
I love this fanfiction I wish more chapters will be released thank you @Kvnqwrld 😎😎😎😎😎😒😒😒😒😒🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻🧑🏾💻
Honestly half of it is just AI the other half is author just repeating words. He wasted half a new chapter on the past chapters words..? like you've already said this why repeat it in the next chapter and waste half of that chapter. Im convinced its fully ai written or the author is a automated idiot
I love this. Can't wait to see what you have happen next or how the Hela situation is going. Totally ship Hela and oc. Have t-shirt already printed.
I liked it quite a lot at the start, but the MC starts to feel more and more like a side character in his own story. Grammar's good, updates are plentiful, the world-building is nice, and the characters (other than the MC) are developing well.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์The story is all right and interesting enough, but the use of AI is heavy on this one. Especially during the first chapters, it's to the point that you could skim more than half of the chapter and lose nothing.
What's killing this story is this excess of side plots. Chapters and chapters where the MC can't even be called a supporting character. And these are plots that aren't even interesting, they barely contribute to anything and only serve to increase the number of words. The plot has to be focused exclusively on the MC, since in addition to the MC being an introduced character, he is a reincarnator and must always be built and improved. The way things are, it seems that sometimes the MC is remembered, and then he quickly grows so many % in strength with the system, and this isn't even developed properly in the story. The system ends up as a boring crutch, used to justify the MC's sudden increase in strength, which is really boring. If it doesn't change, it will be just another story to leave out. I always make the observation that the author can and should write whatever he wants and have fun doing it, since it's a non-profit thing, but what's the point of publishing the story if the readers don't even bother to read it because the story becomes so boring.
Tema história interessante mas escrita e jeito que vai história parece muito estranho e pouco cansada ler parece muito feito i.a com todo respeito
hey there i have been reading your fanfic and it has such a good story so i would like to know if you are interested in publishing this fanfic to my novel group and worry not we will pay you 4 to 5 dollars per thousand views and your bring more views from other platforms and the more views your novel chapters have the more money you have so if you are interested please contact me on instagram My Instagram [yurichi_adrenaline] so please consider my offer one time and maybe this collaboration will change your whole life and if you don't use instagram you can reply here as well thank you
I like It!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Ótimo pôr favor continue com seu trabalho achei super legal interessante então não abandone essa FanFiction Não vejo a hora de ver o próximo capítulo
Bro, what would you think about writing a fanfic in which the protagonist is reincarnated in MHA with a quirk based on Nox's abilities from the wakfu series, that is, he can use wakfu and can use his spells to stop time and control his sword? needle with the wakfu, that would be very epic
Muy buena la trama, me preguntó cómo logrará el Mc para evitar que Hela lo quiera matar solo verlo, O ya sea por intervención de Odín o Heindall, ya qué sus Ojos pueden ver bastante lugares del universo?
The only think that I don't like about this fanfic is that the chapters are short and only 3 chapters per week
The SI is subsumed by the OC, but the problem is that there is zero character development. That means that when the main character goes out to do his thing, the motivation is 1 dimensional (revenge). There isn't a puddle of depth to what he's actually trying to accomplish or what he's going to do later on. I'm fairly certain the video game aspect of this story is interchangeable with any other power/system/cheat. It's probably not going to impact the narrative in any meaningful way aside from letting the MC stomp all his enemies.
it's kept me interested and annoyance free up till chap 30 were I'm stuck now waiting for the author's next chap. REALLY the fans need better basement guards. find him and stick him back in.
is author going to drop the novel.author took too long to release chapters. In the beginning author posted at least two chapters a day. so i want to know when will be the next chapter be uploaded.
Hello 👋. I usually don't write comments on works but i really love this book and it's going well so far. I hope Author continue this and don't drop it suddenly. I whole heartedly support this 5 star review from me.
did the author drop the novel. a good marvel novel.powers,mc personality,hela as wife is just right for me. and if author still writing you can use league of legends as next game.It have a loft of characters for templates.
Ehh, it’s not terrible. It feels like it’s AI assisted (I mean this in a negative way, btw). Writing is okay, not many errors, but it is often repeating. The story concept itself is interesting, but I don’t think the author managed to reach the full potential of it. The pacing is quite fast and the MC’s actions would not be smart if not for the author making it the ‘right’ choice to make at the moment. Overall, wouldn’t recommend it if you want a deeper story. You don’t have to(and I don’t recommend) use your brain while reading this.
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Three chapters in and while only reading every third paragraph I got tired of the repetition. I will return later to see if it will get better later on but for now this is comparatively painful.