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stale, stale, stale the mc is non existing, no emotions like a fking statue, avoids fights, doesnt give a shit, monotone, most boring shit ive ever read
The translator is great, like he's the best part of this story. The original author definitely undercooked here, the MC is boring, like cardboard boring, no aspirations, no goals, doesn't interact with anyone (except by coincidence or through a system task, never initiates contact). Come on, your in one piece, do something. It could have huge potential, but man is it boring. I couldn't get past the second island, normally you would get some tease by the author about why his MC is big depressed, but nope, seems to be the MC's standard personality. What sealed the deal for me was, he claims to want to travel and explore, but couldn't be bothered to visit a local festival. Like what's the point of traveling then??? Again no hate to the translator, he's doing stellar work here!
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Overall the story is interesting, the MC is fine I'm used to him but the only thing it lacks is the characters (both in and outer universe) background inconsistency. Like in one part he's the same as Zoro and in the next he's suddenly younger than Conis, it's pretty confusing but I just ignore it. It's a great story and I recommend it.
No character development..literally nothing author is so lazy as fuck that he dosent even let the mc mess with timeline so it can original story, brain dead mc like the author
Simple, Direct, On Track, Very Satisfying. No Overarching Story or Evil Masterminds Behind Puppets Of Puppets. Just A Plain Simple Straightforward OP MC With A Chill Personality. Highly Recommended. It Almost Seem Like A Cartoon Show, Different Islands Same Pathway.
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Best story I have read in about 3 years I would recommend it to anyone online because I am to lazy to care about doing it anywhere else. Overall this story has a 10/10 Mac to follow and I love his personality, style and so on. Keep it up, PLEASE!
It's more than I expected, it's great that it's not from any side, it's just the MC's adventures and that's great, 5 stars from me, GO FOR IT!!
MC personality fkin ruins it. Acts pretty full of himself and the entire plot bends itself for him. Also just wastes time chasing booze, even a brain-dead harem anime is 100x better than this. If you want a rude, stubborn, full of shit MC this is for you.
4.8 This is a good fanfic and one of the better ones within one piece. MC is OP and the adventure and plot progression drives this fanfic. hope this continues until the very end
So awesome I’m loving this story ❤️❤️Takumi is so cool I love how caring he is without him even realising ❤️❤️❤️❤️xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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At first I really like this fanfiction; I read the original version and at one point it becomes terrible. The author introduces a concept that hadn’t appeared before, which I really disliked. However aside from that unfortunate moment it’s pretty cool.
It’s alright I guess. Got some instant gratification but it gets stale pretty quickly. And of course we got the Chinese npc dialogue. I read quite a few chaps and then just got bored
Btw to all those that say mc is depressed and wouldn’t change mc did but its in the later chapters. Thanks author for this wonderful masterpiece.
I like it... The stories of characters are well written... A indept view of one piece... Though I would have preffered the mc to continue his journey as a lone traveller watching various characters and plots from an outsider point of view.. One against the norms as a lone traveller should be but that just my opinion...
Best one piece fanfic I've ever read. Good translation. ..................................................................................................................................
Heres how the story goes: MC gets to new island, signs in, power up, throw in a popular character, popular character gets surprised at his potential, tries to recruit him and gets rejected. Repeat. Same thing at least till chapter 40, repeated like 5 times. MC feels like an edgy teenager.
The character is strong because there is a system, but there is no content describing training at all. There is no goal to become stronger. Just a journey to log in, without a goal. The main character is made to be a child but likes to drink. In his previous life, he was only 17 years old. He did it to make other characters look down on him and then be shocked that he can drink well. It's nonsense. Another thing is that the character's nature of not liking to respond and doing the same as other people is annoying. But that's what's annoying. If there wasn't a strong system, it would have died long ago in the One Piece world. This story can be read continuously, but if it's not fun, it's considered bad. I hope it will be improved to be better.
The story was enjoyable at the beginning however it became very boring very fast and what can completely made me stop reading this novel is Enel join the crew of the protagonist
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I think everything is perfect just not the mc as he is like a machine with really no emotion and if he does something then the author has to take some time to explain why he felt doing that and to be honest without his system he is literally a character not even worth mentioning in the story......like he does not even train or something everything he gets at a plate from the system And the side character i think this translation is only for them not the mc as he does nothing and make his own double standards so yeah the story is pretty perfect without this annoying mc
It's a very great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too... I like the idea about sign in system, then quest to do in that place.. But it still the easy place.. I think it will be interesting to see sign in place like Marineford, Enies Lobby, or Mariejois and what his quest will be.. I don't mind MC/Takumi character.. But why you must make him alcoholic since child?? Love your story author san.. Keep up the great job 😁👍😍😍😍
It's a very good fanfic, but what I don't like about it is that the main character lacks personality, very cold and insensitive, as if nothing matters, which makes the story feel bland.
to be honest i really hate this fanfiction due to 3 reasons, somehow getting naruto abilities in the first 3 chapters with him basically being a slave to a system which is honestly just boring and overused for plot at this point. I also did not like how he was pretty much just some depressed teenager with everybody else trying to get him out of depression or some shit, the story is also pretty crazy with a 10-year-old drinking alcohol at the age of 10, learning all 3 types of haki, and etc.
I loved this book. finally something else then a pirat/marine/government/antigovernment. The MC is nonchalant and only cares about traveling the seas to check into new locations. The storyline is so good. Really recommend reading this book
The greatest problem here is that mc lacks any kind of emotion. While reading these you want to feel something (even if that feeling is not good) but here its just bland. In a rundown version of mc character , mc sems like chinese "young master" with his nose above the clouds in onepiece verse. He just moves because system said so and while meeting other characters there isn't any kind of feel to it. It's like a documentary by old history teacher , reciting whatever is there.
I read the story and I have to say I really liked it, especially the character. I hope he continues like this and never gives up.
Feel free to ask me anything, and I'll do my best to answer with what I know about this book. If you notice anything lacking in the quality of the novel, please let me know. I've tried to translate as free of Chinese elements as possible and have changed the Chinese names to fit One Piece characters. I'm always looking to improve, so if you spot any issues with the translation, I'd appreciate your feedback to help me enhance my skills. For this whole week, you'll receive chapters every two hours. I hope you'll support me so I can continue releasing two chapters every two hours next week as well.
stale, stale, stale the mc is non existing, no emotions like a fking statue, avoids fights, doesnt give a shit, monotone, most boring shit ive ever read
The translator is great, like he's the best part of this story. The original author definitely undercooked here, the MC is boring, like cardboard boring, no aspirations, no goals, doesn't interact with anyone (except by coincidence or through a system task, never initiates contact). Come on, your in one piece, do something. It could have huge potential, but man is it boring. I couldn't get past the second island, normally you would get some tease by the author about why his MC is big depressed, but nope, seems to be the MC's standard personality. What sealed the deal for me was, he claims to want to travel and explore, but couldn't be bothered to visit a local festival. Like what's the point of traveling then??? Again no hate to the translator, he's doing stellar work here!
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Overall the story is interesting, the MC is fine I'm used to him but the only thing it lacks is the characters (both in and outer universe) background inconsistency. Like in one part he's the same as Zoro and in the next he's suddenly younger than Conis, it's pretty confusing but I just ignore it. It's a great story and I recommend it.
No character development..literally nothing author is so lazy as fuck that he dosent even let the mc mess with timeline so it can original story, brain dead mc like the author
Simple, Direct, On Track, Very Satisfying. No Overarching Story or Evil Masterminds Behind Puppets Of Puppets. Just A Plain Simple Straightforward OP MC With A Chill Personality. Highly Recommended. It Almost Seem Like A Cartoon Show, Different Islands Same Pathway.
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Best story I have read in about 3 years I would recommend it to anyone online because I am to lazy to care about doing it anywhere else. Overall this story has a 10/10 Mac to follow and I love his personality, style and so on. Keep it up, PLEASE!
It's more than I expected, it's great that it's not from any side, it's just the MC's adventures and that's great, 5 stars from me, GO FOR IT!!
MC personality fkin ruins it. Acts pretty full of himself and the entire plot bends itself for him. Also just wastes time chasing booze, even a brain-dead harem anime is 100x better than this. If you want a rude, stubborn, full of shit MC this is for you.
4.8 This is a good fanfic and one of the better ones within one piece. MC is OP and the adventure and plot progression drives this fanfic. hope this continues until the very end
So awesome I’m loving this story ❤️❤️Takumi is so cool I love how caring he is without him even realising ❤️❤️❤️❤️xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ At first I really like this fanfiction; I read the original version and at one point it becomes terrible. The author introduces a concept that hadn’t appeared before, which I really disliked. However aside from that unfortunate moment it’s pretty cool.
It’s alright I guess. Got some instant gratification but it gets stale pretty quickly. And of course we got the Chinese npc dialogue. I read quite a few chaps and then just got bored
Btw to all those that say mc is depressed and wouldn’t change mc did but its in the later chapters. Thanks author for this wonderful masterpiece.
I like it... The stories of characters are well written... A indept view of one piece... Though I would have preffered the mc to continue his journey as a lone traveller watching various characters and plots from an outsider point of view.. One against the norms as a lone traveller should be but that just my opinion...
Best one piece fanfic I've ever read. Good translation. ..................................................................................................................................
Heres how the story goes: MC gets to new island, signs in, power up, throw in a popular character, popular character gets surprised at his potential, tries to recruit him and gets rejected. Repeat. Same thing at least till chapter 40, repeated like 5 times. MC feels like an edgy teenager.
The character is strong because there is a system, but there is no content describing training at all. There is no goal to become stronger. Just a journey to log in, without a goal. The main character is made to be a child but likes to drink. In his previous life, he was only 17 years old. He did it to make other characters look down on him and then be shocked that he can drink well. It's nonsense. Another thing is that the character's nature of not liking to respond and doing the same as other people is annoying. But that's what's annoying. If there wasn't a strong system, it would have died long ago in the One Piece world. This story can be read continuously, but if it's not fun, it's considered bad. I hope it will be improved to be better.
The story was enjoyable at the beginning however it became very boring very fast and what can completely made me stop reading this novel is Enel join the crew of the protagonist
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ I think everything is perfect just not the mc as he is like a machine with really no emotion and if he does something then the author has to take some time to explain why he felt doing that and to be honest without his system he is literally a character not even worth mentioning in the story......like he does not even train or something everything he gets at a plate from the system And the side character i think this translation is only for them not the mc as he does nothing and make his own double standards so yeah the story is pretty perfect without this annoying mc
It's a very great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 It have a great plot/storyline and great english/translation.. The grammar is good too... I like the idea about sign in system, then quest to do in that place.. But it still the easy place.. I think it will be interesting to see sign in place like Marineford, Enies Lobby, or Mariejois and what his quest will be.. I don't mind MC/Takumi character.. But why you must make him alcoholic since child?? Love your story author san.. Keep up the great job 😁👍😍😍😍
It's a very good fanfic, but what I don't like about it is that the main character lacks personality, very cold and insensitive, as if nothing matters, which makes the story feel bland.
to be honest i really hate this fanfiction due to 3 reasons, somehow getting naruto abilities in the first 3 chapters with him basically being a slave to a system which is honestly just boring and overused for plot at this point. I also did not like how he was pretty much just some depressed teenager with everybody else trying to get him out of depression or some shit, the story is also pretty crazy with a 10-year-old drinking alcohol at the age of 10, learning all 3 types of haki, and etc.
I loved this book. finally something else then a pirat/marine/government/antigovernment. The MC is nonchalant and only cares about traveling the seas to check into new locations. The storyline is so good. Really recommend reading this book
The greatest problem here is that mc lacks any kind of emotion. While reading these you want to feel something (even if that feeling is not good) but here its just bland. In a rundown version of mc character , mc sems like chinese "young master" with his nose above the clouds in onepiece verse. He just moves because system said so and while meeting other characters there isn't any kind of feel to it. It's like a documentary by old history teacher , reciting whatever is there.
I read the story and I have to say I really liked it, especially the character. I hope he continues like this and never gives up.
Feel free to ask me anything, and I'll do my best to answer with what I know about this book. If you notice anything lacking in the quality of the novel, please let me know. I've tried to translate as free of Chinese elements as possible and have changed the Chinese names to fit One Piece characters. I'm always looking to improve, so if you spot any issues with the translation, I'd appreciate your feedback to help me enhance my skills. For this whole week, you'll receive chapters every two hours. I hope you'll support me so I can continue releasing two chapters every two hours next week as well.