Certainly! Here's a revised version with improved readability, internal thoughts in italics, and faithful to the Genshin Impact story:
With the enthusiastic help of the Knights of Favonius, Tsumugi Kujo completed the side quest, though it cost her life in the simulation.
[Due to the death of the protagonist, this simulation ends.]
[The host can choose two rewards from the following list to bring back to the real world.]
[Festival Swordsmanship? Royal Family: A branch of the West Wind Swordsmanship that enhances the visual appeal of swordplay at the expense of attack power. It's often used for performances at banquets and is favored by Mondstadt nobles.]
[Mastery of Mondstadt Noble Etiquette: You have mastered all the etiquette of Mondstadt nobles and have fully integrated them.]
[Special Talent "Honor of the Nobles": The common people of Mondstadt view you with "Disgust," while the nobles regard you as "Friendly."]
[Ritual Dance: This dance was created by Mondstadt's nobles and is now preserved only by the Lawrence family. Only the heirs of the Lawrence main family are qualified to learn it.]
[Noble Sword: An elegant, gorgeous sword beloved by nobles for its exquisite appearance. The Lawrence family crest is engraved on the hilt.]
Since Tsumugi Kujo completed the side quest, she could choose one more reward to take back to the real world. However, she found the rewards disappointing.
The rewards are rather useless.
Kujo Tsumugi frowned at the options. The Kujo family's swordsmanship was far superior to the Festival Swordsmanship. Learning Mondstadt's noble etiquette seemed pointless for an Inazuman like her. The "Honor of the Nobles" talent would only make things worse. She had no interest in the Ritual Dance and the Noble Sword felt unnecessary.
As she hesitated, another message appeared in the simulation system:
[The host can forfeit all rewards to increase the impact of this simulation on the real world.]
Well, that's a better option.
The message quickly resolved Tsumugi Kujo's indecision. She chose to forgo all the rewards, hoping that the increased impact on the real world would prove more beneficial than the rewards themselves.
As she made her choice, a name slowly emerged on a previously blank tombstone in the cemetery behind Mondstadt's West Wind Cathedral: "Tsumugi Lawrence."
Simultaneously, some memories of Mondstadt's people began to shift subtly...
Inside the West Wind Cathedral, Barbara, who had just finished treating a wounded soldier, wiped the sweat from her forehead and smiled warmly at the recovering patient.
"Your illness has been treated. Just take a few days to rest."
"Thank you, Miss Barbara!"
"Be careful on your way home."
After the patient left, Barbara picked up a magic book that detailed using water elements for more effective treatment, including removing residual elemental power from the body—an aspect that filled most of the book.
"Ms. Barbara, you don't have to work so hard."
Some priests tried to persuade Barbara to take a break, but she remained focused on her books.
"I'm just taking a short break. Don't worry, I'm confident and won't overexert myself."
Barbara's intense focus on her work left the other priests unable to find words of consolation. They sighed and left, shaking their heads.
Five years ago, Eula Lawrence brought a young girl to the West Wind Cathedral for treatment. Barbara, newly blessed with the Vision of the Water Archon and still an apprentice priest, was responsible for the girl's care.
However, Barbara's efforts were in vain. The girl had died long before, and even experienced priests knew that no amount of healing could bring her back. Barbara blamed herself for the failure, leading her to dedicate herself to healing knowledge, nearly abandoning her pastoral duties. Now, she was more like a doctor than a priest.
Outside Mondstadt, the wind howled.
"Drink!"
With a powerful cry and a sharp crack, the West Wind Greatsword smashed into a Hilliard Thug. Even the towering thug staggered but steadied himself, only to be struck again by the West Wind Greatsword, cleaving him in half.
Eula Lawrence, with her ice-blue hair and mature demeanor, had changed significantly over the past five years. She now exuded stability but carried a persistent sadness.
This year marked Eula's fifth year with the Knights of Favonius. She had left the Lawrence family amidst suspicion and scorn to join the Knights, eventually becoming the captain of the guerrilla team. Her efforts against Hilichurls and the Abyss Cult had earned her a reputation and some respect, though many still held hostility.
If the contract's executor is dead, the contract loses its meaning.
Eula stood on a rock, gazing south towards the Seven Statues of the Gods.
Five years ago, she had awakened her Vision there and experienced the pain of loss. Sometimes, she wondered if she would have survived had she not fled or if she had stayed closer to Mondstadt.
No use dwelling on what-ifs.
Eula's disdain for the people of Mondstadt had turned into indifference. Her only remaining ties to Mondstadt were her friend and her lack of better options.
In the cemetery behind the West Wind Cathedral, Eula stood before her sister's tombstone, cleaning off the dust with a handkerchief. A priest was supposed to handle the maintenance, but even they avoided the Lawrence family's tombstone.
Even in death, the Lawrence family was denied equal treatment.