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4.34
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- กาสร้างตัวละคร
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I'll be honest here author author skip some scenes and directly start new topics like his birthday party you author totally skipped it it would have been interesting to know how mc will react and meet other characters and how he interacts with them and I also like how the author didn't nerf the essence like blank and mage like other ff there are other minor mistakes but I hope you correct them in future
So far so good. I’m only 19 chps in but it’s going well enough for me to finish that in one sitting. Hope this fic makes it all the way!
I like this fanfic but I don't know how to write normal review (P.S. why on web novel chapters more then on fanfiction.net? )
A pretty good one, I've never seen the concept of essences before so they are new for me, and man, they are damn op. The mc is likable, he cares about the other ones, shares some of his powers, and you all may think that this is bad, but it is not, he just shares like 1% of one of his essences to help them get stronger, share some thoughts about his powers etc, basically he is not a selfish bastard like most edgy lords readers that we have here on webnovel who thinks that being cold and don't help your loved ones, etc is incredible, bla bla bla. The world building is good, we are at the childhood arc but the author is pretty much making time skips which is good, since I've read some novels from dxd where the damn authors make a childhood arc of more than 80 chapters, this one has already made two time skips and going good.
This fanfic is good but can make it better. For examples : MC cheat is Essence of Blank, Binders, Archmage. And his clan traits is : Power of mind & Power of life manipulation. Here is a idea from me, since he can created a shadow clones and Magic from fairy tail, can he upgrade his power of mind to do something similar to Adam from Lord of the mysteries? His power are too pervert and Visionary pathway connected to Dream Dragons and DxD has The Great Red
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This is a well made story with a bunch of fun concepts and powers, I don’t have much to say besides that I’m enjoying it a bunch, I have no real complaints so far besides maybe how overpowered the Essence of the Binder is. Sure they all are, but immortality for everyone you bind as long as you stay alive is pretty busted. Still though, I’m enjoying this plenty, keep up the fantastic work!
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cool concept but also awful direction you choose here. i bet it wont complete anyway because you make your mc able to control other people action with magic. how do you even make proper ending if the mc have that power? is human interaction even important for mc with those godly power? imagine person playing family with controllable doll? hod does it end? boredom.
There are 2 kinds of dxd fics, 1st where the mc is a student at kuho,2nd where the mc is born into a rich/influential supernatural family. This story comes in the 2nd category, up until chapter 5 it has been extremely cliche nothing unique his power basically just makes him a gary stu.the whole story is predictable as this same scenario has been used in way too many stories.
Nice story so far. With zero grammatical mistakes. It's been a while since a good DxD fanfic came. I hope you didn't drop this one. Nice work.
Remove this if you want, but the unwillingness to even give people a proper story to read before they get their hands on it is awful. Word count chapters are the bane of ff's, and it's always an automatic bad rating.
nice story and it's hard to find story like this.. and btw did you have account at fanfiction _net?
Seems promising so far, but author should be careful about using such op essences. A lot of fanfics fall apart and turn into “MC grinds an anime power and then practices a different anime power and then shares this power with this waifu and then becomes god etc.” the blank and archmage just synergize too perfectly. Since you are early in the story I recommend planning ahead how powerful you want the character to be at each stage so you don’t need to nerf him later. For instance he probably doesn’t need to be super powerful to defeat riser or the nun guy, so you could lock one of the essences behind his defeat or have a quest to break a bottleneck. Maybe he was able to afford the essences for less points by locking them behind objectives instead of being manipulated by the rob. Just some friendly suggestion, best of luck with the story
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With 10 Chapters of this Fic posted, I am writing this review to better give an idea of what this Fic is about. 1. MC is a fun loving person while being somewhat mischievous and vain. He likes being the centre of attention of a crowd, but won't go out of his way to seek attention. 2. MC chose the Binder Essence because it was one of the Essence available at 500 Points that enabled him an easy way to empower his allies, friends and family. He will not use the loyalty and command function unless absolutely necessary. 3. This Fic is slow paced and I don't know when it will reach the point where Canon starts. So, read at your own risk. 4. There will be a few OCs (2 or 3) who will play major roles in this story. If you don't like this, this isn't for you. 5. By the time of Canon, MC will be OP. Like Super Devils level OP. Maybe more. Do what you will with this info. That's all I wanted to say for now. If you have any questions for me, ask them here. I will answer them to the best of my ability.
I'll be honest here author author skip some scenes and directly start new topics like his birthday party you author totally skipped it it would have been interesting to know how mc will react and meet other characters and how he interacts with them and I also like how the author didn't nerf the essence like blank and mage like other ff there are other minor mistakes but I hope you correct them in future
So far so good. I’m only 19 chps in but it’s going well enough for me to finish that in one sitting. Hope this fic makes it all the way!
I like this fanfic but I don't know how to write normal review (P.S. why on web novel chapters more then on fanfiction.net? )
A pretty good one, I've never seen the concept of essences before so they are new for me, and man, they are damn op. The mc is likable, he cares about the other ones, shares some of his powers, and you all may think that this is bad, but it is not, he just shares like 1% of one of his essences to help them get stronger, share some thoughts about his powers etc, basically he is not a selfish bastard like most edgy lords readers that we have here on webnovel who thinks that being cold and don't help your loved ones, etc is incredible, bla bla bla. The world building is good, we are at the childhood arc but the author is pretty much making time skips which is good, since I've read some novels from dxd where the damn authors make a childhood arc of more than 80 chapters, this one has already made two time skips and going good.
This fanfic is good but can make it better. For examples : MC cheat is Essence of Blank, Binders, Archmage. And his clan traits is : Power of mind & Power of life manipulation. Here is a idea from me, since he can created a shadow clones and Magic from fairy tail, can he upgrade his power of mind to do something similar to Adam from Lord of the mysteries? His power are too pervert and Visionary pathway connected to Dream Dragons and DxD has The Great Red
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This is a well made story with a bunch of fun concepts and powers, I don’t have much to say besides that I’m enjoying it a bunch, I have no real complaints so far besides maybe how overpowered the Essence of the Binder is. Sure they all are, but immortality for everyone you bind as long as you stay alive is pretty busted. Still though, I’m enjoying this plenty, keep up the fantastic work!
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cool concept but also awful direction you choose here. i bet it wont complete anyway because you make your mc able to control other people action with magic. how do you even make proper ending if the mc have that power? is human interaction even important for mc with those godly power? imagine person playing family with controllable doll? hod does it end? boredom.
There are 2 kinds of dxd fics, 1st where the mc is a student at kuho,2nd where the mc is born into a rich/influential supernatural family. This story comes in the 2nd category, up until chapter 5 it has been extremely cliche nothing unique his power basically just makes him a gary stu.the whole story is predictable as this same scenario has been used in way too many stories.
Nice story so far. With zero grammatical mistakes. It's been a while since a good DxD fanfic came. I hope you didn't drop this one. Nice work.
Remove this if you want, but the unwillingness to even give people a proper story to read before they get their hands on it is awful. Word count chapters are the bane of ff's, and it's always an automatic bad rating.
nice story and it's hard to find story like this.. and btw did you have account at fanfiction _net?
Seems promising so far, but author should be careful about using such op essences. A lot of fanfics fall apart and turn into “MC grinds an anime power and then practices a different anime power and then shares this power with this waifu and then becomes god etc.” the blank and archmage just synergize too perfectly. Since you are early in the story I recommend planning ahead how powerful you want the character to be at each stage so you don’t need to nerf him later. For instance he probably doesn’t need to be super powerful to defeat riser or the nun guy, so you could lock one of the essences behind his defeat or have a quest to break a bottleneck. Maybe he was able to afford the essences for less points by locking them behind objectives instead of being manipulated by the rob. Just some friendly suggestion, best of luck with the story
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With 10 Chapters of this Fic posted, I am writing this review to better give an idea of what this Fic is about. 1. MC is a fun loving person while being somewhat mischievous and vain. He likes being the centre of attention of a crowd, but won't go out of his way to seek attention. 2. MC chose the Binder Essence because it was one of the Essence available at 500 Points that enabled him an easy way to empower his allies, friends and family. He will not use the loyalty and command function unless absolutely necessary. 3. This Fic is slow paced and I don't know when it will reach the point where Canon starts. So, read at your own risk. 4. There will be a few OCs (2 or 3) who will play major roles in this story. If you don't like this, this isn't for you. 5. By the time of Canon, MC will be OP. Like Super Devils level OP. Maybe more. Do what you will with this info. That's all I wanted to say for now. If you have any questions for me, ask them here. I will answer them to the best of my ability.