Humanity Unchained

LV 12

Zetsway

A very dry travel log. It's not really a story, as there are no characters or action/drama. The whole thing is the MC went there and then he left but then he went there. There is no dialogue and no characterization of people or places. If you read a story set in 300 or so BC, I think almost everyone will be interested to see how people were living in that era. How villages discover different ways to use their limited technology and magic to make life easier for themselves. And their reaction to the MC. A man that should look alien in any community due to his modern upbringing. Just the fact that the Mc can take a bath, with soap, every day and stay clean should seem weird to the natives... Sadly, this is not the story for that. The Mc run around in some forest and gathers flowers and critters and then switches forest. Oh, and he shows that he can list all the spells in Harry Potter....

LV 14

Cedric_7512

Potential Emperor of Mankind-type character making his way across the Omniverse ….? This is an amaazing idea. I wish I had that idea. The story is good. There is not just 3rd Person POV but also a character who is alive. I love it.

LV 1

Vincent_0580

I am not a professional writer, so the character design and writing quality are not top-notch. But, I have to give myself some credit since I always use Grammarly (the free version) to check for mistakes. I am going for a character that takes pride in his humanity. He is immortal now, so he will have to deal with that. In the beginning, he is trying to learn and grow more powerful, so that takes time. (Warning spoiler for ch. 8) To give an example here. If the MC sees things that are custom or just part of a tribe's culture he won't care. But if for example, he sees humans sacrificing humans because they want to appease a beast like a dragon, he will intervene and get rather angry.

LV 5

_leonid_

Travel log, meh.. . ... .. . . ... . .

LV 1

_DEKIM_

Meh😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒😒

LV 6

ONE_ABOVE_ALL

yo author you dead? if you are my condolences

LV 6

ONE_ABOVE_ALL

haha guess we got new HP fanfiction thats got potential........my taste for HP fiction is ruin after reading some good fanfic.

LV 1

Jackleell

why did you stop updating this novel it was so good _____________________________________________________________________________________

LV 1

Jackleell

good >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

LV 1

LazyBlanketCat

Only on chapter 7 atm so this is subject to change. However, the story so far is great and I am eagerly looking forward to more. [img=update]

LV 4

Reftous_Warships

Good stuff man

LV 1

JakeKing_11

___________________________________________________________________ one of masterpiece story, i like world building and the plot especially, keep up author

LV 11

Asta_4626

good novel __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

LV 4

Freaxx101

one of masterpiece story, i like world building and the plot especially, keep up author

LV 2

Mr_Mavers

Interesting, updated frequently, but the story itself moves slowly. I would also like to indicate the date of the events, otherwise I’m lost when the school chapters began.

LV 2

N1CK999

Interesting, hope he "officially" conquers the world fast................................. ..................................................................................... .................................................................................................................

LV 1

byovevald

I haven't decided on the stability of the updates yet. But I can say that the story is amazing and well thought out. Of course, I'm a little embarrassed by the small presence of the MC and the long approach to the canon, but I can bear with it.

LV 4

Dao_To_Bull_Hit

Interesting story if you say.The story is not complicated to read and more to journey in first 1-11 chapters maybe some of readers don't like the way he try to record all knowledge he try can get in his journey even for me atleast we can see what a legendary future he make after that atleast he give his knowledge to his students with care for their developments and talents in magical and non magical workd also maybe he without known that his second essence try to unlock😁😁😁love the story

LV 4

KIKOwoods_gaming

i absolutely love this story and i hope you continue making it.

LV 4

Piotr_Uklejewski

A very good story, it has its problems but there is always something to improve, but in my opinion, it's always worth listening to the opinions and ideas of others, but don't let them destroy what you want to create.