26รีวิว
4.19
- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
แบ่งปันความคิดของคุณกับผู้อื่น
เขียนรีวิว
While the story starts off fine, and progresses semi fast semi slow, it has a good breath of development. The only issue is how he is somehow always at the right place and right time to pick up everyone and anything. Then the whole riser power boost spit shining was beyond stupid, as he should've just cubed and killed riser with the shrine. The fact it evolved to riser gaining powers with god tier comprehension made little to no sense. While an ambitious take on the pieces given, they're assembled like a broken jigsaw puzzle.
there are multiple mistakes in each freakin para of the chapter,but the disappointing thing is that they are recurring mistakes
Do you know the feeling of something that makes sense and sometimes it doesn't. Well for me this is Schrodinger's book - you will if wether it makes sense or not until you read the book. The OC's interaction with the characters are very fun. And I like the mashed up of different universes that are present in this. Was just hoping for the author not to rush the chapter and just update it at his rate since some words are misspelled and there are grammatical error here and there. Overall its still readable, readers just need a little understanding. And he does cook well.
Looking forward for the next Chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Saya suka dengan perkembangan ceritanya Saya juga suka karakter karakter yang ada sampai sekarang terutama MCnya Saya menantikan lanjutannya
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์
hey author please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺 I love this fanfic.Can you please update chapters more frequently. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
I've never played honkai impact.So I was thinking I won't understand anything but I was wrong it's good.thats's it just wanted to say don't drop it
great idea. but the plot is progressing abruptly, and grammar needs some work. 🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧
This is not to insult or offend anyone, this is my opinion. I honestly don't know what I was expecting when I started reading this, but I must say that I ended up disappointed. many totally unnecessary time jumps, the "plot" advances very quickly, the power levels are a disaster, more than anything the powers of the characters, the clear example is in the rating game chapters, the MC having difficulties with someone who He only attacks with fire, one of his powers being the embodiment of the concept of fire... Another thing is the severe nerf that both the MC and his friends have, who are herrschers, incarnations of concepts, beings capable of destroying countries - continents from birth... according to the power level of dxd they would be seredñs from maximum Satan to super demons or god kings like Zeus, amatersu
Não vou mentir dizendo que é muito ruim, por que não é. A novel estava boa "pelo menos para mim" por volta do capitulo 53, quando começa a luta depois disso foi simplesmente pura besteira. Não me importei muito porque o Ator(a) disse que escreve só por diversão então não espere nada sério daqui. Inimigos tendo UP de poder super aleatória foi oque mais me chateou. Dito isso desejo uma boa sorte para o autor(a), e desejo que leve sua novel para onde você deseja, até mais. Qualidade de escrita (5) Estabilidade de atualizações(5) Desenvolvimento de histórias(3) Design de personagem(2) Fundo Mundia(3)
This fanfic is very good, unfortunately the grammar is still not good, but I still like it.......................... ...........................😁
i like your two project, everything is good, just keep working for the better grammar [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I think it's pretty good, I hope it doesn't fall off and continues. [img=önerilen][img=önerilen][img=önerilen][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme]
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I have come to greatly enjoyed this 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Honkai Story, well Honkai Element i mean in DXD. Here 5 Star, but for now let read it and see how it goes. ................................................
Not the best, but one of the enjoyable fics I've read. You just need to add rita, dudu, sirin hov, kiana, mei, and bronya, and that would be perfect
...................................,...........................................................................................................................................................................,.....................................
👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍it good. grammar need some work at the start but it really good.
Esta historia tiene potencial, sigue con el buen trabajo. Tocará ver cómo se desarrolla en futuros capítulos, gracias por el trabajo,.......
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Я всё понимаю, но чтобы настолько тупо писать фанфик(((Моя сестра в 11 написала про 大兄弟покруче
While the story starts off fine, and progresses semi fast semi slow, it has a good breath of development. The only issue is how he is somehow always at the right place and right time to pick up everyone and anything. Then the whole riser power boost spit shining was beyond stupid, as he should've just cubed and killed riser with the shrine. The fact it evolved to riser gaining powers with god tier comprehension made little to no sense. While an ambitious take on the pieces given, they're assembled like a broken jigsaw puzzle.
there are multiple mistakes in each freakin para of the chapter,but the disappointing thing is that they are recurring mistakes
Do you know the feeling of something that makes sense and sometimes it doesn't. Well for me this is Schrodinger's book - you will if wether it makes sense or not until you read the book. The OC's interaction with the characters are very fun. And I like the mashed up of different universes that are present in this. Was just hoping for the author not to rush the chapter and just update it at his rate since some words are misspelled and there are grammatical error here and there. Overall its still readable, readers just need a little understanding. And he does cook well.
Looking forward for the next Chapter!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Saya suka dengan perkembangan ceritanya Saya juga suka karakter karakter yang ada sampai sekarang terutama MCnya Saya menantikan lanjutannya
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ hey author please 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺 I love this fanfic.Can you please update chapters more frequently. ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
I've never played honkai impact.So I was thinking I won't understand anything but I was wrong it's good.thats's it just wanted to say don't drop it
great idea. but the plot is progressing abruptly, and grammar needs some work. 🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧🐧
This is not to insult or offend anyone, this is my opinion. I honestly don't know what I was expecting when I started reading this, but I must say that I ended up disappointed. many totally unnecessary time jumps, the "plot" advances very quickly, the power levels are a disaster, more than anything the powers of the characters, the clear example is in the rating game chapters, the MC having difficulties with someone who He only attacks with fire, one of his powers being the embodiment of the concept of fire... Another thing is the severe nerf that both the MC and his friends have, who are herrschers, incarnations of concepts, beings capable of destroying countries - continents from birth... according to the power level of dxd they would be seredñs from maximum Satan to super demons or god kings like Zeus, amatersu
Não vou mentir dizendo que é muito ruim, por que não é. A novel estava boa "pelo menos para mim" por volta do capitulo 53, quando começa a luta depois disso foi simplesmente pura besteira. Não me importei muito porque o Ator(a) disse que escreve só por diversão então não espere nada sério daqui. Inimigos tendo UP de poder super aleatória foi oque mais me chateou. Dito isso desejo uma boa sorte para o autor(a), e desejo que leve sua novel para onde você deseja, até mais. Qualidade de escrita (5) Estabilidade de atualizações(5) Desenvolvimento de histórias(3) Design de personagem(2) Fundo Mundia(3)
This fanfic is very good, unfortunately the grammar is still not good, but I still like it.......................... ...........................😁
i like your two project, everything is good, just keep working for the better grammar [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I think it's pretty good, I hope it doesn't fall off and continues. [img=önerilen][img=önerilen][img=önerilen][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme][img=güncelleme]
[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I have come to greatly enjoyed this 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Honkai Story, well Honkai Element i mean in DXD. Here 5 Star, but for now let read it and see how it goes. ................................................
Not the best, but one of the enjoyable fics I've read. You just need to add rita, dudu, sirin hov, kiana, mei, and bronya, and that would be perfect
...................................,...........................................................................................................................................................................,.....................................
👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍it good. grammar need some work at the start but it really good.
Esta historia tiene potencial, sigue con el buen trabajo. Tocará ver cómo se desarrolla en futuros capítulos, gracias por el trabajo,.......
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Я всё понимаю, но чтобы настолько тупо писать фанфик(((Моя сестра в 11 написала про 大兄弟покруче