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This is a wonderful fic with *MANY* great aspects to compliment, but if I praised everything noteworthy then I’d be babbling for ages, instead, let me point out the few flaws it has, the rest, like I said, is great. Flaw #1 Earlier chapters (<50) are kinda drab, the first few are great, but then it falls into a lull as Harry explores potions to an extreme amount of detail and the AI companion begins to get annoying Flaw #2 The AI companion, as mentioned before, can become a little much. Even though he sometimes offers a small respite from the story’s tension with dry wit and sarcasm, a lot of the times it just gets annoying. At a certain point whenever I saw a paragraph about “Nigels quips” I’d just skip and go to the next one. This hasn’t been an issue recently though, for the past 50 or so chapters Nigel has been radio silent. Harry and the AI had a small disagreement but I can’t for the life of me understand why they haven’t even tried to patch things up a bit. Feels too petty for harry. Especially since Nigel helped him so much at the start; literally saved him from the Dursleys. Flaw #3 The banter between friends can be a little much at times as well. The characters being a little too… I don’t know how to explain it properly… plasticy? So many smiles, laughs and quips bouncing off one another and not much emotional depth or complexity. Although I hope this is fixed soon, Harry is growing up and the bonds he has with his friends is deepening, so I can only assume that the depth of their relationship also deepens.
I love it except it got a little tiring at some points but then again I usually read this stories after work and I’m a substitute teacher that mostly works in younger grades like 1 and second graders then come home to finish my masters in education on online school . So I’m pretty exhausted by the end off work and after I finish my assignments.however I’m excited for more keep it up
It's a really good read, full of insight into Harry Potter. The only problem I have found is im on chp 70, and it is only the second day at school. That puts the second year at chapter 400 or more. Each chapter may be a couple of hours for Harry. The first class was 3 chapters.
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Please tell me there is no harem I really don't want to abandon such a wonderful story In the end all great stories are ruined by the presence of harems
I really like this new approach to harry potter. The writing brings out the max version of harry and places the spotlight on Dumbledore's manipulation.
you definitely deserve the name "thefanficgod" from what I've seen not only is this work interesting it also entraps you in it story and world.
The story is really good. this Harry Potter has been added to the favourite au Harry Potter list with Nigel in the AI list. just his quips starting with AH is getting annoying. So I'm going to try to put every AH gifs in the comments when Nigel starts with AH..... Read the novel to find out.
The plot, background changes, and the manipulation element is good, in some part Really good. It's just that harry and his AI interraction feels really bad. Sometime it feels like harry is being coddled by the AI, sometime harry is repeating himself, sometime harry feels like he knows something he shouldnt have(even with the AI's help). I dont know if the development gets better or not, but i'm currently around chapter 40-50 ish "potter's haven". I got tired of reading from the filler chapters about him learning the descriptions of spells.. hopefully it gets better after he goes to hogwarts..
overall, it's good. it's just the pace is too slow for me. 100+ in and we're still at Christmas break of first year. first 50 being pre-hogwarts. while I love me a good HP fanfic, 60-70+ chapters(just guesstimating) for each year feels a bit too much for me.
I would have to say that the story as well written, the characters are multi faceted, and have depth, and the world is growing to be interesting, and makes me look forward to how things will develop. This version of Harry is certainly intelligent, and makes the best of the situation he finds himself in, and the system he gains is incredibly useful, with a very British dry humor system, AI to come along with it. Although it might be slightly slow at times, I will say that I do think the story is definitely worth your time to give a try, and I think most people would enjoy it.
I just read about 30 chapters, and this is my initial review. I don't like the system, or rather Nigel. I don't know who the real protagonist is, Nigel or Harry? Nigel guides him at an exaggerated level. For example, 'Well, Harry, let's manipulate your aunt,' or 'Harry, your aunt is sensitive, you need to say some nice words to deliver the final blow.' That's not guidance; it's manipulation. It could be called 'Reincarnation as the Harry Potter system' since it acts like an independent person with knowledge of HP. Also, why is it called a technological system if it doesn't bring any technology? Finally, the pace is too slow in my opinion. I'm not trying to offend anyone. Have a good day.
I have rarely seen any stories that pull you in just with the description. This is one of them
Slow paced, well written story. I just wish Harry uses the technology system more. He majorly only used it for potions till now.
really like the ff, quality is great, same with updates(1 chap a day i think) development is 'only' 4 stars cause it isn't 'fast enough' but in reality there's just a lack of chapters and I'm used to binge reading books. there's also the fact that i don't want to give 5 stars despite really liking the book and here's why; it hits a pet peeve of repetitiveness that i dislike, if something is stated to be a way, no need to keep saying it over and over, occasional reinforcement is best imo, what i mean is dryness (literally) every time Nigel comments it says "with dryness" "with his usual dryness" "with his usual dry humor" it happens sooo much in the beginning and although decreases in the middle and newer chapters it really annoyed me in the beginning second; Dumbledore using something (legilimancy? Imperio? probably not, it says compelling spell) anyway, i think it gives Dumbledore too much credit especially related to Hermione there was almost no way he knew she was gonna be so great at magic unless he influences her studies too? it feels like a forced plot (ron's fine tho due to order of phoenix stuff, wanting harry to be influenced to join his faction later) third, he matures too fast with bad explanation imo, especially since there are easy ways to make it make sense, like occlumency being the reason, with his mind being more ordered/rational, or the simulation thing, that makes him experience more in a shorter time p.s: I've only read 61 chapters and usually binge 60 -120 chaps at a time so I've come around to read again (don't ask why increments of 60 idk)
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the characters and especially the world background/ design, are superb. the author goes into d͟e͟p͟t͟h͟ on the magic system, so far, especially with potions . eg effect certain actions/ingredients have, which is explained in detail. It's slow burn. which is both positive and (for some) negative. positive since it's world building and showing character design & development, + world building. negative since it takes a little over 50 chaps to get to Hogwarts - but the time spent before that was well written and not repetitive, so for those who like a good long book to read (like me), it's a positive. the only thing that not my cuppa is some of the "jokes/remarks" Nigal says in "humour". that's not to take away from their character since they give good advice,support & emotional support. which I think is good to see. it's just some of the things he says (especially in the early chapters when Harry is still learning), which, for me, is meh. I just dont really like that part of his character (which others might like). Overall it'd a really good book, and I would definitely recommend it.
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The gramer is well done. The auther is doing a good job of making the characters dialoge smothe I am quite happy with the world details in the background. (My First ever review)
Its Slow, but still quite lovely. If you like Aizen, then you'll definitely love this.
I understand that Harry needs basic knowledge to survive in the early stage but the author overdid it by integrating an overly intelligent Ai that seems to manipulate him.. The idea is actually good but if the Ai is more like "great sage" from tensura who analyze the surrounding and then make conclusion to guide the mc it's much better because it gives the reader a better look of how different this harry is,reader can see what type of Harry we can see in this fanfic by seeing how he decides things without too much help from an Ai.. we can also see character development in this like when he make a mistake..the Ai and Harry can develop together
Author the stories is good but, is it technology system? cause I don't see it, and if it is......it's taking forever no???
Suprisingly one of the best HP fanfics out there. I would only encourage readers, to read it for the story and not actually expect a technology system... I thought this would be a story about Harry using modern day science & engineering to change the wizard world and become some kind of Tony Stark character. No it is just HP with a vanilla system. Anyway the story is still very interesting... some small flaws but who cares. Overall I will continue to read this. If you check my profile you will see that I think that 90-95% of the stories here on webnovel suck... so my 5 stars are worth a lot more than the usual "EXP" crowd.
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I like it. It’s a story about Harry that gets a technology system with an ai that guides him. The writing quality is good. I can’t see any grammatical or vocabular errors. The only negative thing I have to say is that I think you are overdoing it with the ai Nigel. Every four paragraphs there is Nigel giving advice with a metaphor or a reference. And I like that but you do it a bit too much. I don’t need half a chapter of the AI saying that the mind is like a puzzle or that manipulation is all about subtlety. So I recommend doing it just a bit less.
it is an amazing story that fills out characters from the original Series such as Harry's aunt or even adding characters that make the story better in its own way reviewed at ch 55
This is a wonderful fic with *MANY* great aspects to compliment, but if I praised everything noteworthy then I’d be babbling for ages, instead, let me point out the few flaws it has, the rest, like I said, is great. Flaw #1 Earlier chapters (<50) are kinda drab, the first few are great, but then it falls into a lull as Harry explores potions to an extreme amount of detail and the AI companion begins to get annoying Flaw #2 The AI companion, as mentioned before, can become a little much. Even though he sometimes offers a small respite from the story’s tension with dry wit and sarcasm, a lot of the times it just gets annoying. At a certain point whenever I saw a paragraph about “Nigels quips” I’d just skip and go to the next one. This hasn’t been an issue recently though, for the past 50 or so chapters Nigel has been radio silent. Harry and the AI had a small disagreement but I can’t for the life of me understand why they haven’t even tried to patch things up a bit. Feels too petty for harry. Especially since Nigel helped him so much at the start; literally saved him from the Dursleys. Flaw #3 The banter between friends can be a little much at times as well. The characters being a little too… I don’t know how to explain it properly… plasticy? So many smiles, laughs and quips bouncing off one another and not much emotional depth or complexity. Although I hope this is fixed soon, Harry is growing up and the bonds he has with his friends is deepening, so I can only assume that the depth of their relationship also deepens.
I love it except it got a little tiring at some points but then again I usually read this stories after work and I’m a substitute teacher that mostly works in younger grades like 1 and second graders then come home to finish my masters in education on online school . So I’m pretty exhausted by the end off work and after I finish my assignments.however I’m excited for more keep it up
It's a really good read, full of insight into Harry Potter. The only problem I have found is im on chp 70, and it is only the second day at school. That puts the second year at chapter 400 or more. Each chapter may be a couple of hours for Harry. The first class was 3 chapters.
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Please tell me there is no harem I really don't want to abandon such a wonderful story In the end all great stories are ruined by the presence of harems
I really like this new approach to harry potter. The writing brings out the max version of harry and places the spotlight on Dumbledore's manipulation.
you definitely deserve the name "thefanficgod" from what I've seen not only is this work interesting it also entraps you in it story and world.
The story is really good. this Harry Potter has been added to the favourite au Harry Potter list with Nigel in the AI list. just his quips starting with AH is getting annoying. So I'm going to try to put every AH gifs in the comments when Nigel starts with AH..... Read the novel to find out.
The plot, background changes, and the manipulation element is good, in some part Really good. It's just that harry and his AI interraction feels really bad. Sometime it feels like harry is being coddled by the AI, sometime harry is repeating himself, sometime harry feels like he knows something he shouldnt have(even with the AI's help). I dont know if the development gets better or not, but i'm currently around chapter 40-50 ish "potter's haven". I got tired of reading from the filler chapters about him learning the descriptions of spells.. hopefully it gets better after he goes to hogwarts..
overall, it's good. it's just the pace is too slow for me. 100+ in and we're still at Christmas break of first year. first 50 being pre-hogwarts. while I love me a good HP fanfic, 60-70+ chapters(just guesstimating) for each year feels a bit too much for me.
I would have to say that the story as well written, the characters are multi faceted, and have depth, and the world is growing to be interesting, and makes me look forward to how things will develop. This version of Harry is certainly intelligent, and makes the best of the situation he finds himself in, and the system he gains is incredibly useful, with a very British dry humor system, AI to come along with it. Although it might be slightly slow at times, I will say that I do think the story is definitely worth your time to give a try, and I think most people would enjoy it.
I just read about 30 chapters, and this is my initial review. I don't like the system, or rather Nigel. I don't know who the real protagonist is, Nigel or Harry? Nigel guides him at an exaggerated level. For example, 'Well, Harry, let's manipulate your aunt,' or 'Harry, your aunt is sensitive, you need to say some nice words to deliver the final blow.' That's not guidance; it's manipulation. It could be called 'Reincarnation as the Harry Potter system' since it acts like an independent person with knowledge of HP. Also, why is it called a technological system if it doesn't bring any technology? Finally, the pace is too slow in my opinion. I'm not trying to offend anyone. Have a good day.
I have rarely seen any stories that pull you in just with the description. This is one of them
Slow paced, well written story. I just wish Harry uses the technology system more. He majorly only used it for potions till now.
really like the ff, quality is great, same with updates(1 chap a day i think) development is 'only' 4 stars cause it isn't 'fast enough' but in reality there's just a lack of chapters and I'm used to binge reading books. there's also the fact that i don't want to give 5 stars despite really liking the book and here's why; it hits a pet peeve of repetitiveness that i dislike, if something is stated to be a way, no need to keep saying it over and over, occasional reinforcement is best imo, what i mean is dryness (literally) every time Nigel comments it says "with dryness" "with his usual dryness" "with his usual dry humor" it happens sooo much in the beginning and although decreases in the middle and newer chapters it really annoyed me in the beginning second; Dumbledore using something (legilimancy? Imperio? probably not, it says compelling spell) anyway, i think it gives Dumbledore too much credit especially related to Hermione there was almost no way he knew she was gonna be so great at magic unless he influences her studies too? it feels like a forced plot (ron's fine tho due to order of phoenix stuff, wanting harry to be influenced to join his faction later) third, he matures too fast with bad explanation imo, especially since there are easy ways to make it make sense, like occlumency being the reason, with his mind being more ordered/rational, or the simulation thing, that makes him experience more in a shorter time p.s: I've only read 61 chapters and usually binge 60 -120 chaps at a time so I've come around to read again (don't ask why increments of 60 idk)
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ the characters and especially the world background/ design, are superb. the author goes into d͟e͟p͟t͟h͟ on the magic system, so far, especially with potions . eg effect certain actions/ingredients have, which is explained in detail. It's slow burn. which is both positive and (for some) negative. positive since it's world building and showing character design & development, + world building. negative since it takes a little over 50 chaps to get to Hogwarts - but the time spent before that was well written and not repetitive, so for those who like a good long book to read (like me), it's a positive. the only thing that not my cuppa is some of the "jokes/remarks" Nigal says in "humour". that's not to take away from their character since they give good advice,support & emotional support. which I think is good to see. it's just some of the things he says (especially in the early chapters when Harry is still learning), which, for me, is meh. I just dont really like that part of his character (which others might like). Overall it'd a really good book, and I would definitely recommend it.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ The gramer is well done. The auther is doing a good job of making the characters dialoge smothe I am quite happy with the world details in the background. (My First ever review)
Its Slow, but still quite lovely. If you like Aizen, then you'll definitely love this.
I understand that Harry needs basic knowledge to survive in the early stage but the author overdid it by integrating an overly intelligent Ai that seems to manipulate him.. The idea is actually good but if the Ai is more like "great sage" from tensura who analyze the surrounding and then make conclusion to guide the mc it's much better because it gives the reader a better look of how different this harry is,reader can see what type of Harry we can see in this fanfic by seeing how he decides things without too much help from an Ai.. we can also see character development in this like when he make a mistake..the Ai and Harry can develop together
Author the stories is good but, is it technology system? cause I don't see it, and if it is......it's taking forever no???
Suprisingly one of the best HP fanfics out there. I would only encourage readers, to read it for the story and not actually expect a technology system... I thought this would be a story about Harry using modern day science & engineering to change the wizard world and become some kind of Tony Stark character. No it is just HP with a vanilla system. Anyway the story is still very interesting... some small flaws but who cares. Overall I will continue to read this. If you check my profile you will see that I think that 90-95% of the stories here on webnovel suck... so my 5 stars are worth a lot more than the usual "EXP" crowd.
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I like it. It’s a story about Harry that gets a technology system with an ai that guides him. The writing quality is good. I can’t see any grammatical or vocabular errors. The only negative thing I have to say is that I think you are overdoing it with the ai Nigel. Every four paragraphs there is Nigel giving advice with a metaphor or a reference. And I like that but you do it a bit too much. I don’t need half a chapter of the AI saying that the mind is like a puzzle or that manipulation is all about subtlety. So I recommend doing it just a bit less.
it is an amazing story that fills out characters from the original Series such as Harry's aunt or even adding characters that make the story better in its own way reviewed at ch 55
I this a bad dumbledore fanfiction pppppppppppp a hejt him