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Where's the rewrite? Please just post a few chapters so we know you're actually rewriting and not lying....
This is a great story I love it! I wish it was updated more frequently but I Understand life is busy
Honestly, the first chapters of this story weren't that good, but as the story progresses, you can see that the author becomes more and more confident in his writing. It really doesn't seem like the first ten chapters were written by the same author. Usually, when someone from the West tries to write an Eastern 'fantasy' story, the end result is a strange caricature of what it should be, which is not the case here. I don't know if the author did his homework very well or something, but it feels like I'm reading a story written by a Chinese writer. The world is vivid, the characters are memorable, and they act like REAL people (as real as psychotic cultivators can be). Of course, the story also has its brainless Young Master A and Young Master B, but come on, guys, what's a cultivation story without them? Not to mention, it's one of the rare well-written GL (Girls' Love) cultivation stories. However, speaking of the GL, I feel like the progress of the relationship between the MC and FL is a little fast, Yes, given the background to FL, it may even make a certain sense, but in my opinion, their relationship still develops in a romantic direction very quickly. Other than that good work author please continue!
As much as I like this, with this new cover, i'm considering removing it from my library, everytime i see this cover in my library i'm wondering why I have some korean drama novel (who is a c*m sock to some CEO) in my library.
Very good, it's hard to find a good cultivation story with a female protagonist, especially one that is Lesbian~ ....................................................................................
Came for the Yuri, but remained hooked despite the minimal progress there. Comedic elements are very enjoyable. Xianxia elements aren't too annoying to follow. System info checking doesn't clutter beyond story need. Truly looking forward to more beyond this point. Great work, author~
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Bagus tapi kenapa udah gak update lama, lagi istirahat kah penulis nya? Moga cepet cepet up, gak sabar sama lanjutan nya, thanks thor sehat selalu
I thoroughly enjoyed what you have given so far as I've caught up to the current chapter, I just have one request of mines, where is the rest of the chapters as I need moar
To be honest, this novel deserves 4 stars instead of 5 due to two negative points. The reason is that the cultivation system is very strange, the 5th to 8th levels are actually one very large group and it is necessary to reach level 8 before the age of 30 to be accepted as an internal disciple of the sect, which makes sense since it is one of the most powerful, but in subsequent chapters it was added that if you do not reach level 8 before the age of 30, the cultivator will be unable to go beyond level 11. The problem here is that this does not make sense since cultivators live for centuries and 30 years is just a cultivator's childhood. Except for the strongest powers in the world, it seems impossible for anyone to reach level 8 before the age of 30. Another negative point is how physical and soul cultivation seem to be almost useless, being nothing more than secondary skills as they do not even increase the protagonist's lifespan. Around chapter 40 the author seems to have realized this too and started to correct it, explaining that the reason physical cultivation is ignored is because of the lack of versatility and some other reasons mentioned before that really make sense, but that doesn't change the point. the fact that physical and soul cultivation didn't really even increase the protagonist's lifespan and were relegated as secondary skills. The system also does not give slots when advancing unless it is in essence cultivation. Now, although a bad power system is quite frustrating at times, everything else is actually pretty good. I loved the plot of Jade Beauty and although the protagonist suffers because of it, it is also a great motivator that helped her a lot in trying to become strong to protect herself. It's also worth mentioning that although two young people want to use their status to sleep with her, the sect is very safe for those who show even the slightest potential (in the case of the protagonist being an alchemist) and as long as she becomes an internal disciple she won't no longer need to worry about young masters in the sect. This puts the protagonist in a difficult situation where she always needs to move forward, but she is not in immediate danger of being abused in the sect. Another interesting point is that only two male characters chasing the protagonist are villains, there are several male characters who are actually decent people who get along well with the protagonist. It is also interesting to see a young master trying to win over the jade beauty from the jade beauty's point of view. The novel Yuri is developing at a good pace in terms of number of chapters and is very well written, perhaps a little slow if we remember that the development took a few years, but it is excusable because they are cultivators. Conclusion: The cultivation system needed to be better worked on, but the story, plots, characters and developments in general are very interesting.
a 10/10 book it's the perfect mix of cringe and not cringe plus it's a really good gender bender that is consistent with it
just a Mary sue who is smart strong and of course beautiful who has never faced any challenge
It's great. The quality and everything is high. Has a lot of character development too. The only negative thing is the long explanations of stuff, then that gets compared to other stuff etc etc. Some chapters have 0 progression but are just explaining how that item does that in relation to that while being that. It's a must read, especially as it gets more chapters.
Just look for @EmpathicWan's comment. He wrote a better review of this book than whatever I could have said
Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good.
The start is a bit rough and felt like reading a textbook mixed with a spreadsheet. However, once the author actually gets into the story they wanted to tell after rushing though the setup that they clearly didn't want to do, the plot becomes easy to follow and fresh. While I do think that the author messed up by not elaborating on all of the oddities of reincarnation and initial world exploration, they do eventually delve into the world exploration at a pace that feels reasonable for a neet MC. I would say, that this is more focused on the female perspective aspect of the story than presenting a unique tale of cultivation. The gender bender aspect is really only an mild undertone, since most of the early issues that would take place are in that early part of the story that gets glazed over. I'm probably being overly critical, but that's just because--as of the 32 chapter--I'm enjoying the story more than anything else I've found on this platform. The plot draws me in and the writing feels professional. Message to the author: I'd love to read single/double sentence descriptions of the MC summerizing/reflecting on what she notices about her Stat screen, rather than presenting the spreadsheet itself. E.G. "She glanced at her stats, only to notice the sudden spike in her strength since the last time she'd checked. What had she done in the last couple of days to warrent that?!"
This story is a bit maddening to review, but... well... I thought maybe it was important to put something honest and not just spam blind praise. First, the novel is a cultivation novel, with mind-numbing amounts of "realm" this and "dao" that. So much time talking about power levels, realms, dantians, Qi, blah, blah, blah. That comes with the genre, and it's not fair to criticize this particular novel for staying true to that genre. However it is fair to say that this novel deviates from all the other cultivation novels with it's levels. Most of them can't decide on what power, or level, or cultivation technique is more powerful than another, so there's always some changes. This one however is all over the place with unique names and new categories. Things that were once staples of beginning cultivation, suddenly find themselves in the center of power. It's the author's choice, but it's a little disorienting. It's also a system novel, and that comes with a deluge of "character info" dumped on the reader, treating them like children who need reminders about the power of the MC. The system would be fine... but it's always wrong. The MC is constantly stepped on by people who *should* be at the same strength or weaker than her. To top it off, she is constantly put in situations where she can literally do nothing but bat her eyelashes and accept the advances of nearly every male character (except for Chen Yu, he's cool). I'm not a fan of Mary Sue characters, but having the MC be constantly stepped on isn't exactly fun to read. Because of this, the yuri feels more like the "Tragic Yuri" novels of old where you're just waiting for the MC to become the plaything of a man, or for them to never realize their love because it's forbidden. The story has a lot of promise, but it's dragged down by genre cliches and trouble with power scaling the MC. It's a curse of Cultivation and System novels, and this one is both in spades.
Everything about this novel is great. From consistent upload, writing quality, etc. The one thing I really hate though is the absolutely busted power scale. An insignificant outer disciple is supposed to be able to fly around and flatten an entire city? An inner disciple is already someone that looks like a divine being? Bruh, tone it down.
As is customary for a writer, I have to give my own work a 5-star rating! Although, I do write this review after a few others - so I can say with some confidence that my story ain't bad~! Right then, review! Writing Quality: I do try my best to ensure that I haven't let any mistakes through. But I'm only human, so expect some small errors. Stability of Updates: I can't guarantee anything, but I will try my best to post 3 to 4 chapters a week - with each chapter being around 3K words. Comment on this review if you want, say, double the amount of chapters but half the length. Story Development: It has reached only 10 chapters so don't expect much in terms of this just yet. In my projected view of the story, it will take a while to pick up. Character Design: I don't really know how to evaluate this, but I will try my best to give my character depth World Background: It's a Xianxia... or is it? Read to know more *wink wink*
Where's the rewrite? Please just post a few chapters so we know you're actually rewriting and not lying....
This is a great story I love it! I wish it was updated more frequently but I Understand life is busy
Honestly, the first chapters of this story weren't that good, but as the story progresses, you can see that the author becomes more and more confident in his writing. It really doesn't seem like the first ten chapters were written by the same author. Usually, when someone from the West tries to write an Eastern 'fantasy' story, the end result is a strange caricature of what it should be, which is not the case here. I don't know if the author did his homework very well or something, but it feels like I'm reading a story written by a Chinese writer. The world is vivid, the characters are memorable, and they act like REAL people (as real as psychotic cultivators can be). Of course, the story also has its brainless Young Master A and Young Master B, but come on, guys, what's a cultivation story without them? Not to mention, it's one of the rare well-written GL (Girls' Love) cultivation stories. However, speaking of the GL, I feel like the progress of the relationship between the MC and FL is a little fast, Yes, given the background to FL, it may even make a certain sense, but in my opinion, their relationship still develops in a romantic direction very quickly. Other than that good work author please continue!
As much as I like this, with this new cover, i'm considering removing it from my library, everytime i see this cover in my library i'm wondering why I have some korean drama novel (who is a c*m sock to some CEO) in my library.
Very good, it's hard to find a good cultivation story with a female protagonist, especially one that is Lesbian~ ....................................................................................
Came for the Yuri, but remained hooked despite the minimal progress there. Comedic elements are very enjoyable. Xianxia elements aren't too annoying to follow. System info checking doesn't clutter beyond story need. Truly looking forward to more beyond this point. Great work, author~
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Bagus tapi kenapa udah gak update lama, lagi istirahat kah penulis nya? Moga cepet cepet up, gak sabar sama lanjutan nya, thanks thor sehat selalu
I thoroughly enjoyed what you have given so far as I've caught up to the current chapter, I just have one request of mines, where is the rest of the chapters as I need moar
To be honest, this novel deserves 4 stars instead of 5 due to two negative points. The reason is that the cultivation system is very strange, the 5th to 8th levels are actually one very large group and it is necessary to reach level 8 before the age of 30 to be accepted as an internal disciple of the sect, which makes sense since it is one of the most powerful, but in subsequent chapters it was added that if you do not reach level 8 before the age of 30, the cultivator will be unable to go beyond level 11. The problem here is that this does not make sense since cultivators live for centuries and 30 years is just a cultivator's childhood. Except for the strongest powers in the world, it seems impossible for anyone to reach level 8 before the age of 30. Another negative point is how physical and soul cultivation seem to be almost useless, being nothing more than secondary skills as they do not even increase the protagonist's lifespan. Around chapter 40 the author seems to have realized this too and started to correct it, explaining that the reason physical cultivation is ignored is because of the lack of versatility and some other reasons mentioned before that really make sense, but that doesn't change the point. the fact that physical and soul cultivation didn't really even increase the protagonist's lifespan and were relegated as secondary skills. The system also does not give slots when advancing unless it is in essence cultivation. Now, although a bad power system is quite frustrating at times, everything else is actually pretty good. I loved the plot of Jade Beauty and although the protagonist suffers because of it, it is also a great motivator that helped her a lot in trying to become strong to protect herself. It's also worth mentioning that although two young people want to use their status to sleep with her, the sect is very safe for those who show even the slightest potential (in the case of the protagonist being an alchemist) and as long as she becomes an internal disciple she won't no longer need to worry about young masters in the sect. This puts the protagonist in a difficult situation where she always needs to move forward, but she is not in immediate danger of being abused in the sect. Another interesting point is that only two male characters chasing the protagonist are villains, there are several male characters who are actually decent people who get along well with the protagonist. It is also interesting to see a young master trying to win over the jade beauty from the jade beauty's point of view. The novel Yuri is developing at a good pace in terms of number of chapters and is very well written, perhaps a little slow if we remember that the development took a few years, but it is excusable because they are cultivators. Conclusion: The cultivation system needed to be better worked on, but the story, plots, characters and developments in general are very interesting.
a 10/10 book it's the perfect mix of cringe and not cringe plus it's a really good gender bender that is consistent with it
just a Mary sue who is smart strong and of course beautiful who has never faced any challenge
It's great. The quality and everything is high. Has a lot of character development too. The only negative thing is the long explanations of stuff, then that gets compared to other stuff etc etc. Some chapters have 0 progression but are just explaining how that item does that in relation to that while being that. It's a must read, especially as it gets more chapters.
Just look for @EmpathicWan's comment. He wrote a better review of this book than whatever I could have said
Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good. Very good.
The start is a bit rough and felt like reading a textbook mixed with a spreadsheet. However, once the author actually gets into the story they wanted to tell after rushing though the setup that they clearly didn't want to do, the plot becomes easy to follow and fresh. While I do think that the author messed up by not elaborating on all of the oddities of reincarnation and initial world exploration, they do eventually delve into the world exploration at a pace that feels reasonable for a neet MC. I would say, that this is more focused on the female perspective aspect of the story than presenting a unique tale of cultivation. The gender bender aspect is really only an mild undertone, since most of the early issues that would take place are in that early part of the story that gets glazed over. I'm probably being overly critical, but that's just because--as of the 32 chapter--I'm enjoying the story more than anything else I've found on this platform. The plot draws me in and the writing feels professional. Message to the author: I'd love to read single/double sentence descriptions of the MC summerizing/reflecting on what she notices about her Stat screen, rather than presenting the spreadsheet itself. E.G. "She glanced at her stats, only to notice the sudden spike in her strength since the last time she'd checked. What had she done in the last couple of days to warrent that?!"
This story is a bit maddening to review, but... well... I thought maybe it was important to put something honest and not just spam blind praise. First, the novel is a cultivation novel, with mind-numbing amounts of "realm" this and "dao" that. So much time talking about power levels, realms, dantians, Qi, blah, blah, blah. That comes with the genre, and it's not fair to criticize this particular novel for staying true to that genre. However it is fair to say that this novel deviates from all the other cultivation novels with it's levels. Most of them can't decide on what power, or level, or cultivation technique is more powerful than another, so there's always some changes. This one however is all over the place with unique names and new categories. Things that were once staples of beginning cultivation, suddenly find themselves in the center of power. It's the author's choice, but it's a little disorienting. It's also a system novel, and that comes with a deluge of "character info" dumped on the reader, treating them like children who need reminders about the power of the MC. The system would be fine... but it's always wrong. The MC is constantly stepped on by people who *should* be at the same strength or weaker than her. To top it off, she is constantly put in situations where she can literally do nothing but bat her eyelashes and accept the advances of nearly every male character (except for Chen Yu, he's cool). I'm not a fan of Mary Sue characters, but having the MC be constantly stepped on isn't exactly fun to read. Because of this, the yuri feels more like the "Tragic Yuri" novels of old where you're just waiting for the MC to become the plaything of a man, or for them to never realize their love because it's forbidden. The story has a lot of promise, but it's dragged down by genre cliches and trouble with power scaling the MC. It's a curse of Cultivation and System novels, and this one is both in spades.
Everything about this novel is great. From consistent upload, writing quality, etc. The one thing I really hate though is the absolutely busted power scale. An insignificant outer disciple is supposed to be able to fly around and flatten an entire city? An inner disciple is already someone that looks like a divine being? Bruh, tone it down.
As is customary for a writer, I have to give my own work a 5-star rating! Although, I do write this review after a few others - so I can say with some confidence that my story ain't bad~! Right then, review! Writing Quality: I do try my best to ensure that I haven't let any mistakes through. But I'm only human, so expect some small errors. Stability of Updates: I can't guarantee anything, but I will try my best to post 3 to 4 chapters a week - with each chapter being around 3K words. Comment on this review if you want, say, double the amount of chapters but half the length. Story Development: It has reached only 10 chapters so don't expect much in terms of this just yet. In my projected view of the story, it will take a while to pick up. Character Design: I don't really know how to evaluate this, but I will try my best to give my character depth World Background: It's a Xianxia... or is it? Read to know more *wink wink*