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i finally finished volume one and now volume two is starting, I want to say that the writing and grammar of volume 1 were not good I just want to give a heads up for the people that wants to read it, if you and tuff it out to reach volume 2 I would really like that but if you don't want to force yourself to read it then don't again thank you for reading this novel, I have other novels that are coming out soon you just gotta wait and see
Good story the world is filled of mysteries and manu plots finding and figuring out what was happening was fun I recommend this to anyone that likes mysteries
Good book, I really enjoyed reading it. Will be looking forward to more chapters. Do your best, author! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This story may come off as a bit chaotic in the beginning, but after following the story for a little bit, things start to sort themselves out. The narration had me hooked from the start, and the plot is so interesting that I have to keep reading.
This is a really good concept, right off the bat it gives and air of mystery but i recommend reviewing your chapters a little more. I noticed a number of punctuation and formatting errors for example, everything a character says something (dialogue) you should have it start on a new line. same goes for thoughts they should be on their own new line. If you want further help/guidance I can gladly give pointers just let me know! (Part of a review swap)
story is interesting 🤔 I like the background, as well as enjoyable plot. This novel really has potential. overall it's good 💯😊
An intriguing blend of steampunk and mysticism, this story explores a hidden realm of wonder and peril. Elijah's journey is captivating, filled with transformation and suspense. A fascinating read.
The starting is really good which got me hooked however, I think one thing the author could improve on is separating dialogues from the main paragraphs to make it easier to read. Aside from that, the narrating is really good and the plot too. I even voted and added it to my collection. Over all, a solid 4.6 stars.
The story has an interesting premise. The unnatural seemed to be mixed with the modern and historical world. However, narrative is a bit confusing. I think separating the perspectives, and conversations of the characters in different paragraphs would help.
The author stages their world building in segments, allowing the reader to put it together while moving the plot forward. While the formatting can be a bit disorienting at first it is consistent. The pacing of the story reflects the manic state of the character's mind, turning from one topic to the next as the main character works through not only the danger of the moment but also the realities of the world he finds himself in.
The story had an intriguing concept with a blend of the real world and a hidden, mysterious one. The main character's predicament added an element of suspense. However, some parts felt a bit rushed, and more details about the hidden world and its inhabitants would have been interesting. Adding depth to the characters and their relationships could enhance the story's emotional impact. Overall, it's a promising premise with room for further development and exploration.
This story may seem kind of jumbled but read it a little bit and I guarantee you will get hooked plainly due to the narration, the plot and the mystery which overcomes all the faults. I want more
The premise of the story isn't really clear for the first few sections, but the narrative clues were engaging enough to grab attention. Also when voicing the MC's inner thoughts, try spacing them out so they don't get jumbled in with other paragraphs. Like this: (Where am I?") Instead of: There was no one there.(Where am I?) He slowly rose from the bed.
another shameless author review i have made a tik tok if you guys want updates on the series follow @gravebrone my series is heavily inspired by lotm so some concepts from that series will be browwed don't worry I will change it to make it seem more original to my story the mc wont get an oath until chapter 25 or 30 I'm trying to decide on which one for now I wanna build up the world more and build up the character arcs so please be patient also I wanna keep this upload shecdle but for my mental health ima just change it to thursdays and fridays we get new chapters also remember as of now I'm still in high school so when ever i have a test i wont upload on that day it took me like 2 weeks to think of this story i was gonna rush it but i slowed it down and i really like the pace of the story rn i will change up the paceing once Elijah earns an oath so look out for that i also will be creating a discord once i get 3k followers on tiktok
This story actually kept me on the hook. Though some parts in the starting were a bit blurry, but I enjoyed the story very much. I want to read more nowwww. Btw I added this to my collection
i finally finished volume one and now volume two is starting, I want to say that the writing and grammar of volume 1 were not good I just want to give a heads up for the people that wants to read it, if you and tuff it out to reach volume 2 I would really like that but if you don't want to force yourself to read it then don't again thank you for reading this novel, I have other novels that are coming out soon you just gotta wait and see
Good story the world is filled of mysteries and manu plots finding and figuring out what was happening was fun I recommend this to anyone that likes mysteries
Good book, I really enjoyed reading it. Will be looking forward to more chapters. Do your best, author! [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
This story may come off as a bit chaotic in the beginning, but after following the story for a little bit, things start to sort themselves out. The narration had me hooked from the start, and the plot is so interesting that I have to keep reading.
This is a really good concept, right off the bat it gives and air of mystery but i recommend reviewing your chapters a little more. I noticed a number of punctuation and formatting errors for example, everything a character says something (dialogue) you should have it start on a new line. same goes for thoughts they should be on their own new line. If you want further help/guidance I can gladly give pointers just let me know! (Part of a review swap)
story is interesting 🤔 I like the background, as well as enjoyable plot. This novel really has potential. overall it's good 💯😊
An intriguing blend of steampunk and mysticism, this story explores a hidden realm of wonder and peril. Elijah's journey is captivating, filled with transformation and suspense. A fascinating read.
The starting is really good which got me hooked however, I think one thing the author could improve on is separating dialogues from the main paragraphs to make it easier to read. Aside from that, the narrating is really good and the plot too. I even voted and added it to my collection. Over all, a solid 4.6 stars.
The story has an interesting premise. The unnatural seemed to be mixed with the modern and historical world. However, narrative is a bit confusing. I think separating the perspectives, and conversations of the characters in different paragraphs would help.
The author stages their world building in segments, allowing the reader to put it together while moving the plot forward. While the formatting can be a bit disorienting at first it is consistent. The pacing of the story reflects the manic state of the character's mind, turning from one topic to the next as the main character works through not only the danger of the moment but also the realities of the world he finds himself in.
The story had an intriguing concept with a blend of the real world and a hidden, mysterious one. The main character's predicament added an element of suspense. However, some parts felt a bit rushed, and more details about the hidden world and its inhabitants would have been interesting. Adding depth to the characters and their relationships could enhance the story's emotional impact. Overall, it's a promising premise with room for further development and exploration.
This story may seem kind of jumbled but read it a little bit and I guarantee you will get hooked plainly due to the narration, the plot and the mystery which overcomes all the faults. I want more
The premise of the story isn't really clear for the first few sections, but the narrative clues were engaging enough to grab attention. Also when voicing the MC's inner thoughts, try spacing them out so they don't get jumbled in with other paragraphs. Like this: (Where am I?") Instead of: There was no one there.(Where am I?) He slowly rose from the bed.
another shameless author review i have made a tik tok if you guys want updates on the series follow @gravebrone my series is heavily inspired by lotm so some concepts from that series will be browwed don't worry I will change it to make it seem more original to my story the mc wont get an oath until chapter 25 or 30 I'm trying to decide on which one for now I wanna build up the world more and build up the character arcs so please be patient also I wanna keep this upload shecdle but for my mental health ima just change it to thursdays and fridays we get new chapters also remember as of now I'm still in high school so when ever i have a test i wont upload on that day it took me like 2 weeks to think of this story i was gonna rush it but i slowed it down and i really like the pace of the story rn i will change up the paceing once Elijah earns an oath so look out for that i also will be creating a discord once i get 3k followers on tiktok
This story actually kept me on the hook. Though some parts in the starting were a bit blurry, but I enjoyed the story very much. I want to read more nowwww. Btw I added this to my collection