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A nice fanfic, the grammar is good with very few mistakes. The MC is not an idi*t and there aren't major plot holes that I could find. The flow was good and logical. But I only read till chapter 14 and dropped it cuz I found myself a little bored with no plot happening as the MC was only planning and training for the future without actually fighting anyone. Maybe at the later chapters this changes but I'm too impatient to wait.
it was good until you started introducing the othe soul parts and you really did not need to do that because there is so much stuff in dragonball so why introduce other animes
i tried reading this but to be honest the idea is good but the novel became a drama. the synopsis is not close to what this is. the time skips are every where and relationships are kind just there. I found myself skipping loads of text because of monologue questions about direction. pretty much fluff to pad character count. Author don't get me wrong I don't knock your effort but when you're side characters become more interesting than your MC their is a problem
Author, I think it's best that you finish your already released stories before you start posting new stories because some haven't been released for months.
The novel would have been much better if the author had not included the other versions of the MC from other universes (DC, Invincible, etc.), I literally skipped paragraphs every time Connor appeared.
it was good right up to chp30...then it was like thar in the blue.hell.is going on?!
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Then the omnitrix wielder will launch when.................................................,..................................................................?
Wow just wow... This Fanfiction has blown my socks of. Seriously read it. The MC is competent. The story is enticing. And The Authors taste in a women is impeccable. Please give this book a chance, I promise you will not regret it.
It is a very good story but I would like to see the stories of all the other 6 fragments of his sole......DC one has good potential for lemon wish fulfilment OP Mc......so I hope the author writes about it......also more frequent updates are appreciated.
Very good, it's very rare to see a good Dragon Ball fanfic nowadays, this one is at least in the top 5.Very good, it's very rare to see a good Dragon Ball fanfic nowadays, this one is at least in the top 5.
So why not merge the Super Saiyan 4 and Super Saiyan God transformations ? ............................................................................................
When will the Saiyan journey to power and lonely Kryptonian be released again? It's been a while without releasing chapters ? .................................
I genuinely adore this novel; it is truly the epitome of excellence. However, I am inclined to express a heartfelt disappointment regarding its brevity.
It doesn’t make sense to me ,this just feels forced . If he’s the strongest just go namik For the dragon balls
Not gonna lie I was enjoying it at the start but then the whole multiverse thing came in and after that some of the chapters just got dark for no reason and some of it just seem a bit forced.
A nice fanfic, the grammar is good with very few mistakes. The MC is not an idi*t and there aren't major plot holes that I could find. The flow was good and logical. But I only read till chapter 14 and dropped it cuz I found myself a little bored with no plot happening as the MC was only planning and training for the future without actually fighting anyone. Maybe at the later chapters this changes but I'm too impatient to wait.
it was good until you started introducing the othe soul parts and you really did not need to do that because there is so much stuff in dragonball so why introduce other animes
i tried reading this but to be honest the idea is good but the novel became a drama. the synopsis is not close to what this is. the time skips are every where and relationships are kind just there. I found myself skipping loads of text because of monologue questions about direction. pretty much fluff to pad character count. Author don't get me wrong I don't knock your effort but when you're side characters become more interesting than your MC their is a problem
Author, I think it's best that you finish your already released stories before you start posting new stories because some haven't been released for months.
The novel would have been much better if the author had not included the other versions of the MC from other universes (DC, Invincible, etc.), I literally skipped paragraphs every time Connor appeared.
it was good right up to chp30...then it was like thar in the blue.hell.is going on?!
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Then the omnitrix wielder will launch when.................................................,..................................................................?
Wow just wow... This Fanfiction has blown my socks of. Seriously read it. The MC is competent. The story is enticing. And The Authors taste in a women is impeccable. Please give this book a chance, I promise you will not regret it.
It is a very good story but I would like to see the stories of all the other 6 fragments of his sole......DC one has good potential for lemon wish fulfilment OP Mc......so I hope the author writes about it......also more frequent updates are appreciated.
Very good, it's very rare to see a good Dragon Ball fanfic nowadays, this one is at least in the top 5.Very good, it's very rare to see a good Dragon Ball fanfic nowadays, this one is at least in the top 5.
So why not merge the Super Saiyan 4 and Super Saiyan God transformations ? ............................................................................................
When will the Saiyan journey to power and lonely Kryptonian be released again? It's been a while without releasing chapters ? .................................
I genuinely adore this novel; it is truly the epitome of excellence. However, I am inclined to express a heartfelt disappointment regarding its brevity.
It doesn’t make sense to me ,this just feels forced . If he’s the strongest just go namik For the dragon balls
Not gonna lie I was enjoying it at the start but then the whole multiverse thing came in and after that some of the chapters just got dark for no reason and some of it just seem a bit forced.