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This is an extremely good fan fic author-san, and I only have one question for you. WHY ARE YOU NOT CONTINUING WITH SUCH A GOOD FIC, ITS BEEN A YEAR WITHOUT WORD FROM YOU😭😭😭😭😭😭
No está mal… Lo encuentro entretenido y me gustó el detalle de las chicas. Dicho sea de paso, lo apruebo pues dentro de DBZ son las que uno podría considerar como las waifu.
Up to date chap 43 im liking this very much the overall story is fun and well structured the only nitpick for me would be the update stability is a bit random sometimes Besides that 10/10 would recomend
I'm liking how the story goes, keep going so you're doing well. I always hope a new chapter comes out and that you upload this story more often 10/10 super recommended to read
fun fact, one of the easiest ways to loose readers is to ignore basic rules for writing, such as don't write conversations in a fic like you would in a screenplay. don't identify who's speaking by just writing their name. if you must specify who said what, use descriptors.
Terrible grammar, terrible sentence structure, bad character design, bad story telling and an excuse of English isnt my first language. Don't release a public story if you haven't got an english speaking editor or your english isn't even as good as a 7th graders.
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El mejor fanfic de dragon ball que he leido[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=golden ticket]
I love your fic, really I do Just two issues for me really 1 the harem: I personally don't like harems, ever, they always ruin the flow of stories. Time that could have been spent on development is instead spent on the MC's girls. Then again it's a personal thing 2: The ease at which Vegeta allows said girls to join him on the battle field. It makes zero sense why he'd allow Bulma come so close to Frieza or Tights come so close to the cooler squadron, super Saiyan or not. It's just pointlessly careless fo me. Non-fighters have no business on the battlefield, just as he has no business in a laboratory Oh, and Bulma's mum? really? that's messed up dude
Good work. Coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
I hate the harem in dragon ball, it's the only flaw for me, but the story is good.............................................................................................................................................
l like it so, have a meme.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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five stars just because you put vegeta as the mc even if it is a transmigration.
I love that the story and the fact that u didn't started with a child vegeta[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Super Sayan 4 Royal BLUE.!!!! This would put Ichigo close to Grand Priest power.~
Nice story.~ PS for you. Im glad your Vegeta will not treat Bulma like OG did. Lets be honest OG Vegeta treated Bulma terrible.
Please be consistent and update regularly. The story has great potential. I believe that if you keep up the work, you'll be able to overtake the highest rated DBZ fanfics.
so far the things are ok here (good grammar, good plot and the world building is going well) i recommend it……………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. ………………….
This is an extremely good fan fic author-san, and I only have one question for you. WHY ARE YOU NOT CONTINUING WITH SUCH A GOOD FIC, ITS BEEN A YEAR WITHOUT WORD FROM YOU😭😭😭😭😭😭
No está mal… Lo encuentro entretenido y me gustó el detalle de las chicas. Dicho sea de paso, lo apruebo pues dentro de DBZ son las que uno podría considerar como las waifu.
Up to date chap 43 im liking this very much the overall story is fun and well structured the only nitpick for me would be the update stability is a bit random sometimes Besides that 10/10 would recomend
I'm liking how the story goes, keep going so you're doing well. I always hope a new chapter comes out and that you upload this story more often 10/10 super recommended to read
fun fact, one of the easiest ways to loose readers is to ignore basic rules for writing, such as don't write conversations in a fic like you would in a screenplay. don't identify who's speaking by just writing their name. if you must specify who said what, use descriptors.
Terrible grammar, terrible sentence structure, bad character design, bad story telling and an excuse of English isnt my first language. Don't release a public story if you haven't got an english speaking editor or your english isn't even as good as a 7th graders.
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I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this I like this
El desarrollo de la personalidad del personaje es muy decepcionante[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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El mejor fanfic de dragon ball que he leido[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=golden ticket]
I love your fic, really I do Just two issues for me really 1 the harem: I personally don't like harems, ever, they always ruin the flow of stories. Time that could have been spent on development is instead spent on the MC's girls. Then again it's a personal thing 2: The ease at which Vegeta allows said girls to join him on the battle field. It makes zero sense why he'd allow Bulma come so close to Frieza or Tights come so close to the cooler squadron, super Saiyan or not. It's just pointlessly careless fo me. Non-fighters have no business on the battlefield, just as he has no business in a laboratory Oh, and Bulma's mum? really? that's messed up dude
Good work. Coooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
I hate the harem in dragon ball, it's the only flaw for me, but the story is good.............................................................................................................................................
l like it so, have a meme.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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five stars just because you put vegeta as the mc even if it is a transmigration.
I love that the story and the fact that u didn't started with a child vegeta[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Super Sayan 4 Royal BLUE.!!!! This would put Ichigo close to Grand Priest power.~
Nice story.~ PS for you. Im glad your Vegeta will not treat Bulma like OG did. Lets be honest OG Vegeta treated Bulma terrible.
Please be consistent and update regularly. The story has great potential. I believe that if you keep up the work, you'll be able to overtake the highest rated DBZ fanfics.
so far the things are ok here (good grammar, good plot and the world building is going well) i recommend it……………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. …………………. ………………….
Genuinely one of the best stories I’ve read. I hope for more updates.