4.53
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เขียนรีวิวHarem stories in dragon ball are rare, so I'm looking forward to more, if I'm ever displeased I'll change this review as a warning.................
Many of the 2-star voters did not read the story until chapter 20 or 10. The problems have already been solved in general, so enjoy it~~ I started doing translations and corrections using chatgpt, so most if not all of the problems are likely already resolved. Enjoy~~
This fanfic has an interesting concept but poor execution. As of chapter 5, the flow was too rigid and it wasn't easy to read, the grammar had plenty of mistakes, and the conversations felt like reading a diary. I'm not writing this to off put the author, I really appreciate his hard work. I'm just pointing out what I noticed in this fanfic in hope to encourage improvement.
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The story itself is very good, there are fan fics that start and I don't understand anything that's happening, it's already here to understand because it explains
Though you have what could be a solid FF there is a few teething issues, mainly the flow of the story is a little off putting. PS. Bio-kinetic is about the manipulation of energy and not biology, either you have misunderstood the abilities or your title is wrong. If you need to know what Bio-kinetic is, search about Gambit from Marvel or Hisoka Morow from Hunter x Hunter. All the best.
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The story is interesting, some people complain about the writing, but this story is readable, with an understandable story, I'll see how it develops in the future.
Está muy bien espero que puedas continuar con la historia si es posible Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias
Harem stories in dragon ball are rare, so I'm looking forward to more, if I'm ever displeased I'll change this review as a warning.................
Many of the 2-star voters did not read the story until chapter 20 or 10. The problems have already been solved in general, so enjoy it~~ I started doing translations and corrections using chatgpt, so most if not all of the problems are likely already resolved. Enjoy~~
This fanfic has an interesting concept but poor execution. As of chapter 5, the flow was too rigid and it wasn't easy to read, the grammar had plenty of mistakes, and the conversations felt like reading a diary. I'm not writing this to off put the author, I really appreciate his hard work. I'm just pointing out what I noticed in this fanfic in hope to encourage improvement.
Story development: 1 star. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
The story itself is very good, there are fan fics that start and I don't understand anything that's happening, it's already here to understand because it explains
Though you have what could be a solid FF there is a few teething issues, mainly the flow of the story is a little off putting. PS. Bio-kinetic is about the manipulation of energy and not biology, either you have misunderstood the abilities or your title is wrong. If you need to know what Bio-kinetic is, search about Gambit from Marvel or Hisoka Morow from Hunter x Hunter. All the best.
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The story is interesting, some people complain about the writing, but this story is readable, with an understandable story, I'll see how it develops in the future.
Está muy bien espero que puedas continuar con la historia si es posible Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias Gracias