Heaven defying lottery system ; Trapped for 1,00,000 years !

LV 14

NowGoWithTheFlow

Well you have a good idea about the novel but there are many problems with this. First is the info dumps if it was just every once in awhile it be fine but 3 chapters in a row are large info dumps. Second you can read the sentence but the sentences are clearly badly written. Third it is to rushed from the start. Fourth some of your ranks in my opinion are mixed up. Also your MC who is he what's MC name there isn't much character building but I will chalk that up to less than 13 chapters are available to read.

LV 4

Celestial_Chaos24

Why try to have other male characters besides the MC in this story if the enemy isn't right, but this? It's too much male friend interference Try and he's not who he's just his friend's son his father Then the MC also doesn't know him, why did you bring him? I'm Confused That This Novel Is And I'm Lazy To Read What It's Like And also the grammar is a bit messy so lazy to read it bro. Good Luck Brother Because I'm Lazy To Read If There Are Male Characters On The Way Novel Harem Story Don't Be Offended Yes If I Drop This Novel Bye Brother Good Luck Brother Write it And GOD BLESS YOU BROTHER AND KEEP SPIRIT BROTHER

LV 4

OBEYDE_X

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LV 4

Shade08

confusing story where the MC is trapped in his own world and even after so long I do not see any special thing about him. after so many rewards MC is inductively using any and he just changes the world without exploring his previous one. I'll see the author had an imagination but it was a bit exaggerated as multiple system users coming in and out every single day.

LV 13

Azareth_Hades

it's not bad though it would have been nice for u to continue