One Piece : Kingdom Building System

LV 14

NowGoWithTheFlow

I stopped at chapter 56 because it made no sense when compared to the rest of the novel. First an foremost when a King, Queen of another nation visits your nation to talk it will be between the two Leaders or at the very minimum the host nation king would at least welcome the guest king. If not done it can be consider insult to the visiting king. Next is when she brought up why the ars isn't there it is not a insult, an very valid reason to bring up. Third for the Rep to call the visiting king insulting is stupid in two ways, first they have no reason to do so, second it just escalates the situation which no train professional would do for no gain. Other wise very good book with few grammar mistakes, with good updates interesting story development.

LV 2

Nicolas_Bahamondes

the main character is boring basically the story deals with slaves from another dimension making a kingdom for mc the story simply does not go with the world of one piece which is more about adventures and battles between pirates if the main character is going to play rise of kingdom it would be better another anime

LV 2

PacificIslander

(go to end if too lazy to read lel) Sorry this is my opinion based off of reading the first two chapters but. There's not really much information about this story in general, it doesn't really beat around the bush and just goes into the story without any real preparations for the main character. A few things at the start already don't make sense, there's a system which is alright I guess. My only complaint here is that everything is just convinient at the start, the only sort of *work* that the main character puts into it at the start is literally just dividing territories for the future. Also it seems that the system has a conscious and is also named a feminine name. The main character literally has immortality ( and his summons as well, ) along with being able to summon Hashirama Senju at full power at the age of 18 being empowered by haki. Plus he gets instant loyalty. Also somehow 9 million people INSTANTLY hear of his kingdom in 4 seconds because apparently a woman who can see into the future tells everyone. (yes, 9 million no joke) along with that he has a fog that protects his land for 2 years TLDR; bunch of plot holes, immortal MC+his summons, 9 million people, fog that protects his land for 2 years at the begining, his first summon being Hashirama Senju from Naruto whos 18(immortal) and strong cuz haki. I'll read more and change my review if it becomes any better

LV 3

Alex3DxD

a basic story of broken characters who do nothing. the country is completely protected the main character already summoned as two yonko level characters and so there is nothing that can face him not to mention that it is the secondary characters who move everything the story does not go anywhere is the typical one of receiving a power that breaks the whole world

LV 14

Fuckyall

(Sorry for Rating) Before Reading this fanfic I wanted to know, If this Fanfic is your? and you wanted to post a on new account ?? Because I saw 3 other people posting it

LV 3

Mr_mysterio

the story at most average is more a story of secondary characters moving from here to there the kingdom simply does not paint anything in the world of one piece without mentioning the deception of its military force and the main character does not contribute anything apart from invoking the people

LV 3

LowPriorityCitizen

Lets be honest, any fanfic with Kingdom Building but author cant make his own story is bad, especially when fanfic start about the same timeline as canon manga/comic/movie (anyway the source)

LV 1

Size_name

Hello !! How many floors should a bag of rice have, how many floors should a bag of rice have, how much should you pay for a bag of rice, how much should you wash a bag of rice, each grain is muddy, to whom you gave a bag of rice! Spicy Tiansai! ! ! Jiraiya swimming in the sea of ​​dragons and angelica, popsicles melting under the street lamp

LV 13

UwuCreyo

Only one word full of fillers. idk what to say just waste of time.

LV 4

Jerome_Esperanza

This is getting really boring. I know World Building is important to a story but it starts to annoy me starting from the meeting. How many chapters does it take to finish that the meeting? I know we've been reading this for free but man too many wasted chapters with unimportant rambling.... Sorry if it hurts the author, it's just my honest review... I'm really sorry

LV 6

ujda

There is definitely a problem with the perception of time in this novel. As if everyone is not even 1 day away from everywhere. But the general flow of the story is good and there is a main character who does not abuse his power. Frankly, I was incredibly tired of constantly reading the main character with a disgusting personality. I hate all chinese novels that pass this disgusting character typing off as normal. That's why I enjoyed seeing characters in this story who are normal but have saintly morals compared to Chinese novels. I'm on episode 26 right now. The main character is still on the good side. I hope it goes like this. He does not revert to the main character model in Chinese novels whom the author addresses as good people, but who is r.cist, rap.st, and often an empowered idiot.

LV 4

almond_tofu66

I've read this before and I like it, but the author decided to move to P@tre0n before so I'm kinda heartbroken, and this story is come back here again??? idk I'm not sure

LV 1

JojoVanish

Could you upload the story to another page?, More than anything for PC readers, WebNovel does not let you read the chapters :( I would recommend Scribble Hub as a good page besides WebNovel.

LV 11

UnjayV

The writing can be improved but the story is good and the development is improving I would like to see a another character beside Hasirama, like Madara, Aizen , Escanor and other

LV 13

Diluc_Gunnhildr

Boring..... Building kingdom hah ?! This chapter more like the record of daily activity mc for doing something. 1 activity took the whole chapter.

LV 1

hidayat_pratama

Saya paling suka dengan tema kerajaan di one piece, daripada jadi bajak laut dan angkatan laut atau pemburu bounty selebihnya says suka dengan detailnya.

LV 4

Celestial_Kaiser

Although not the best OP fanfic, still it can be ranked above average, grammar is okay if we ignore small typos here n there. The other thing is that MC's character development is almost negligible in first 40-50 chaps(approx.) as he focuses more on building his kingdom n summoning anime characters n not his own personal strength.

LV 1

Muhammad_ilh

good broo................................................. ................................................................................................................................... .....................................................

LV 15

Firelord

the author has a big problem with he/she, him/her ,himself/herself. the author is trying to make the Mc look smart, but instead, he made the rest of the world brain dead. The Mc is bragging about how he has spies everywhere but has no. He braggs about having an army of op anime characters but has only hashirama as slave. Hashirama this ,hashirama that , hashirama go bring grass, hashirama go deliver some tree here and the there ,hashirama is just a slave for the Mc getting so tired of all the hashirama spamming. A lot of potholes. I love kingdom building ff, but this ff just spams hashirama too much. 140 chapter later, and he has only hashirama as a fighting character. And the Mc have the world government under his feet after 10 chapters