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its dropped so it dosent matter. mc dosent even meet his partner it was dropped so fast. this is not to say it wasnt written well or anything theres just no point reading.
jujur saya membaca ini agak membingungka, awalnya menarik, tapi lama kelamaan jadi aneh dan bingung
Story is a mesh of ideas thats all over the place. needs a well thought out outline to Get things in order.
its good and I was enjoying it alot but don't bother starting this, the author up and dropped it. unfortunately this seems to happen way to often.
author doesnt understand concept of time, logic ...?.?.?.?.?.?.?..?..?.?.?..?.?.?.?m.?.?.?.?mm?m?m??mm..dkdjjejejdidislalapdcuucisoks8c7fisis
the story is all over the place and makes no sense. its seems very rushed and you jump around too much. you go from the king vamp letting charlile go to forks decades later there is no transition.
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Good so far with lots of potential keep it up author-San ..................................................................................................
Little grammar mistakes other than that its very good first i have seen with a diffrent persective such as this. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Its unique and one of a kind, easy to understand probably my fav Twilight fic so far. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
not going to even bother reading. I saw that there is a chapter made just for word count. that tells me all I need to know about this story
its dropped so it dosent matter. mc dosent even meet his partner it was dropped so fast. this is not to say it wasnt written well or anything theres just no point reading.
jujur saya membaca ini agak membingungka, awalnya menarik, tapi lama kelamaan jadi aneh dan bingung
Story is a mesh of ideas thats all over the place. needs a well thought out outline to Get things in order.
its good and I was enjoying it alot but don't bother starting this, the author up and dropped it. unfortunately this seems to happen way to often.
author doesnt understand concept of time, logic ...?.?.?.?.?.?.?..?..?.?.?..?.?.?.?m.?.?.?.?mm?m?m??mm..dkdjjejejdidislalapdcuucisoks8c7fisis
the story is all over the place and makes no sense. its seems very rushed and you jump around too much. you go from the king vamp letting charlile go to forks decades later there is no transition.
🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Good so far with lots of potential keep it up author-San ..................................................................................................
Little grammar mistakes other than that its very good first i have seen with a diffrent persective such as this. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeemoreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee33eeee
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Its unique and one of a kind, easy to understand probably my fav Twilight fic so far. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
not going to even bother reading. I saw that there is a chapter made just for word count. that tells me all I need to know about this story