the idea is good and the writing is good and overall I think it has good potential and I hope you keep on going with the story and don't let the haters get to you.
Its just to i consistent is my only complaint yals the rest is so it will flipping send Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee Eeeeeeeeee
the idea is good and the writing is good and overall I think it has good potential and I hope you keep on going with the story and don't let the haters get to you.