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Bruh, the narrating is boring, sorry but I am just gonna state facts here not some BStery. There is no to a little story development, most of it is just information about curse energy and other s"it and the mc is still weak af I mean cmon you have what? Curse Energy, Senjutsu and Magic. MAGIC! the thing the so called dumb gods from rwby remove and "he has" magic but still extremely weak and no im not complaining about him being scared thats a fact no matter what. Anyone who gets summoned to another world will lead people to be scared for their life.
Can you post this on scribblehub, now computer users can't read any fanfiction on webnovel it seems.........................................
this one story is quite messy, hey writers, why don't you continue the Fanfiction chat group, I think it's better and it's a shame the story fell suddenly due to your obsession with RBWB
This story is good not the best and some moments can be boring but I like world building. The story don't concetrate on almighty MC that is everywhere and beat all enemies with his great power with much affords. Not it's about changing world using information about power sources and systems. It's interesting to read because of this. It's interesting not for those who wants to find action and battles but politics and world changing.[img=recommend]
Honestly, To much freaking details and explanations. like seriously. I'm glad you know your stuff and all but making entire chapters basically info dump kills the story fast. it's fine to give a brief explanation but don't use the entire freaking chapter. The story had an interesting concept and was looking forward to reading it but not so much anymore. only like 5 chaps at most and I'm already dropping it because I hate info dumps. If you don't mind that kind of thing then this might be a good story for you. Heck I don't even mind slow building stories as long as it's entertaining and doesn't have mile long explanations. That's why I'm giving a lot a 3 because I neither like nor hate this story other than the fact I'm dropping it. My suggestion to you author is to not put to much information and explanations in the chapters. If we are curious about something, then we can look it up to find out ourselves. Not hating on ya but just giving some advice. I'm a writer to though I don't post stories online because I don't want to have to get a schedule to upload chaps. Anyways, good luck and enjoy.
First 10 chapters mostly consists of: Stolen/Rewritten pages from anime abilities pages, MC who is in complete different and dangerous enviroment acting like he knows what he's doing and amount of John Sue that nobody thought could be achieved. The Whole fanfiction description can be dumped as right from the start MC just unleashes the power of Anime(which is not even a spoiler tbh as I myself would have wished I knew it) which contradicts with the whole idea of using wisdom and shrewdness to adapt. Oh and Author steals ability designs from succesful manga series/anime series not bothering to even make it semi original
Absolutly horrenderous, The entire novel feels like cheap copy-paste of wiki pages that are in „top 10 best anime powers”. The description is plain lie, introduction of powers feels like „it works because I refuse to acknowledge logic and lore behind it”. Characters besides MC (who feels like a cheap formula of„typical shounen protagonist traits” combined) are very plain and one sided. The shameless „lore writing” cannot be even called one as Author took concepts from other works and mismashed them together without even trying to keep some sort of originality. The Main Protagnist as I have stated before is just typical bland and uninteresting shonen protagonist, his entire thought process and self awarness can put those typical Young masters to shame! Protagonist makes decisions not based on his experience or backstory but because „he can”, I doubt the Author meant for the Protagonist to be ”your typical rightous sect leader who will sacrifice everything for greater good” but honestly that’s how Hero feels like especialy during first 9~10 chapters. In summary, this sort of quality is just an insult to readers and the amount of cringe and Shame it has brought to my soul by the „ability theft” will require prolonged therapy
Okay so, I devoured the available chapters in 2 days. Firstly, the narration is kinda slow. Like the MC thinks of something, has two paragraphs arguing with himself for and against, then another paragraph reacting to his idea and then shelving the idea 'for later'. Basically the MC spends a lot of time in his headspace which slows pacing. Behind the narrative and the MC is an interesting new plot of a character going around Remnant before the begining of the series bringing Magic to the world. Between the MC praising himself in his head for how clever he is and then getting whoomped because he never focused on a single training and just kept inventing new stuff the story actually is a fun read.
The way you put different powers into this is amazing but at the beginning it's boring and hard to read and between this one and the other Rwby you made I like the gamer one better.
Pesima historia, sus otros FF estan mucho mejor desarrolados que este, y el sistema de energias es ridiculo aprendio 5 tipos de energias diferentes de Mundos/Realidades diferentes solo por que si, honestamente para ser una reescritura de su otro FF RWBY isekai es muy lamentable
honestly it not a bad read but I'm having problems with people coming from a different revenant future and the random pov change so far I've read to 65 and it seems like the authers is just throwing random nonsense in so here is what I don't like the story 20% of it is plot another 40% pov change and 10% is random secret enemy that you won't hear about after one chapter 30%is the most stupid of them all is rwby character coming from the future and are all over the place id like the novel more if the author just sticks with the story without the dumb random pov
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you saying that he went to rwby with nothing was a lie. He obviously went with a body that can use tons of different animes energies with the power of bulls#it. The way he unlocked mana was just circulating it though his body or to the 'gate', how does he even know it really exists and how to do it, all he had was a theory, that doesn't mean it should work.
Want a writing tip? Choose ONE anime power system, choose an environment conducive to first arc development, focus on plot development. Your first Gamer story is a thousand times better than this one. Doing this was a huge waste of time and energy, no one likes to read about someone capable of doing anything just by imagining it. Be happy.
it's a nice read everyone should try a bit boring at first but its become interesting after passing through 20chap....................................
Ya tetap semangat dan saya harap ceritanya akan semakin menarik untuk kedepannya... Saya dukung karya anda author... Yah saya harap yang lainnya tolong di update juga,,,, soalnya cerita yang anda buat memang bagus, dan saya menantikan
It's entertaining. Don't care about powers or anything, because it's entertaining to read.... Look too far into it, and you're just looking for a reason to criticize. Anywho-, the writing quality is pretty good, with only a few grammar errors across a few chapters. The updates seem pretty good, especially with how hectic these past few months have been across the globe. Story development has been reasonably paced, and I easily spent three hours reading. The character design seems to match with how I remember some of the characters and their brief flashback scenes, and our protagonist is entertaining to follow along in the story. And the world background is pretty good with mentions of the cities, countries, and where he's going, alongside the environment.
Es una gran historia tienen un gran flujo que muestra el idealismo que tienen los cazadores y muestra lo ciegos que son las personas al ver solo blanco y negro y no en tonos grises y no entienden que matar a algunos por la supervivencia de los demás algunas veces es la única opción.
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Personally I love it so far not much else to say really Yea yea yup yea yea I yea yea yup yup yea yea yup yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea
I mean it’s good in the sense that it has no grammar issues, updates regularly, and stuff. 2 Main issues is that most of it is actually just the thoughts of the mc and the rest is him getting broken power like cursed energy in the 2nd chapter, makes the synopsis misleading
I like how creative the Main character gets and how many uses he comes with for the powers he used his eye to gain all the knowledge from Echidna and ow he is now making himself a stable foothold and good allies in this world
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It's alright I like the original more but this is also good to wish they're a description of how the mc look. While he does get a slight nerf I believe the knowledge of alchemy and the ability to do it without a circle make up the exchange for his curse energy as he can always either use water magic or aura to heal himself. The only thing I don't really like is how young the character is being 14 but most of the time I ignore it and can be easily be fixed by a time skip(not a huge one as that might make his power development confusing depending on how the author does it)—another good read one of the better rwby fanfic that is alive.
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Я очень не доволен. Прочитал до момента попытки Алхимии... УДАЧНОЙ попытки алхимии! И на этом моменте я решил сдаться. Это явно не моя чашка чая. Не хочу читать про героя, который по ПАМЯТИ нарисовал круг и который работал... почему-то! Очень странно. Я был в порядке с проклятой энергией... и попытками героя почувствовать магию. Просто потому что магия в этом аниме есть из канона. Как и проклятая энергия у гримм. Но алхимия... и работает!? Не понятно что с аурой... в общем много странностей и плюс к плохому написанию и сумбурности я ставлю плохие баллы и гневный комментарий.
Have to say, this is one the best ff's that i read so far and i rlly like the concept of mixing the powers of diffrent anime and mangas but not making it op.
I don’t have proper words for how boring and bad this is, 90% of it is just describing things, 8% of MC’s thoughts, and 2% of uninteresting dialogue. An example of what not to do.
honestly im not one to do reviews let alone rate badly but this has to be the worst title ive ever seen ................................................
All I got to say, the narration is boring. although the concept was fine, and the plot is bland, no character introduction, but self development. don't know it is because I like fast pace. so not for people like me. keep up the good work and improve. all the best.
After 22 chapters it gets a bit boring at least for me but you have 5 stars because I will probably read when there are more chapters (Google translator)
Sinceramente lo dejo no pude leer más del capítulo 4 porque sinceramente dice la etiqueta de " Débil a Fuerte " y sinceramente en los 4 capítulos que leí ya tiene como mínimo 3 energía diferentes y eso sin desbloquear aura siendo la magia la más difícil de conseguir en RWBY pero la consigue en menos de una hora con el supuesto método de magia en el aire..... Cuando RWBY no tiene nada de eso sinceramente no puedo leer algo con tan poco sentido
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Bruh, the narrating is boring, sorry but I am just gonna state facts here not some BStery. There is no to a little story development, most of it is just information about curse energy and other s"it and the mc is still weak af I mean cmon you have what? Curse Energy, Senjutsu and Magic. MAGIC! the thing the so called dumb gods from rwby remove and "he has" magic but still extremely weak and no im not complaining about him being scared thats a fact no matter what. Anyone who gets summoned to another world will lead people to be scared for their life.
Can you post this on scribblehub, now computer users can't read any fanfiction on webnovel it seems.........................................
this one story is quite messy, hey writers, why don't you continue the Fanfiction chat group, I think it's better and it's a shame the story fell suddenly due to your obsession with RBWB
This story is good not the best and some moments can be boring but I like world building. The story don't concetrate on almighty MC that is everywhere and beat all enemies with his great power with much affords. Not it's about changing world using information about power sources and systems. It's interesting to read because of this. It's interesting not for those who wants to find action and battles but politics and world changing.[img=recommend]
Honestly, To much freaking details and explanations. like seriously. I'm glad you know your stuff and all but making entire chapters basically info dump kills the story fast. it's fine to give a brief explanation but don't use the entire freaking chapter. The story had an interesting concept and was looking forward to reading it but not so much anymore. only like 5 chaps at most and I'm already dropping it because I hate info dumps. If you don't mind that kind of thing then this might be a good story for you. Heck I don't even mind slow building stories as long as it's entertaining and doesn't have mile long explanations. That's why I'm giving a lot a 3 because I neither like nor hate this story other than the fact I'm dropping it. My suggestion to you author is to not put to much information and explanations in the chapters. If we are curious about something, then we can look it up to find out ourselves. Not hating on ya but just giving some advice. I'm a writer to though I don't post stories online because I don't want to have to get a schedule to upload chaps. Anyways, good luck and enjoy.
First 10 chapters mostly consists of: Stolen/Rewritten pages from anime abilities pages, MC who is in complete different and dangerous enviroment acting like he knows what he's doing and amount of John Sue that nobody thought could be achieved. The Whole fanfiction description can be dumped as right from the start MC just unleashes the power of Anime(which is not even a spoiler tbh as I myself would have wished I knew it) which contradicts with the whole idea of using wisdom and shrewdness to adapt. Oh and Author steals ability designs from succesful manga series/anime series not bothering to even make it semi original
Absolutly horrenderous, The entire novel feels like cheap copy-paste of wiki pages that are in „top 10 best anime powers”. The description is plain lie, introduction of powers feels like „it works because I refuse to acknowledge logic and lore behind it”. Characters besides MC (who feels like a cheap formula of„typical shounen protagonist traits” combined) are very plain and one sided. The shameless „lore writing” cannot be even called one as Author took concepts from other works and mismashed them together without even trying to keep some sort of originality. The Main Protagnist as I have stated before is just typical bland and uninteresting shonen protagonist, his entire thought process and self awarness can put those typical Young masters to shame! Protagonist makes decisions not based on his experience or backstory but because „he can”, I doubt the Author meant for the Protagonist to be ”your typical rightous sect leader who will sacrifice everything for greater good” but honestly that’s how Hero feels like especialy during first 9~10 chapters. In summary, this sort of quality is just an insult to readers and the amount of cringe and Shame it has brought to my soul by the „ability theft” will require prolonged therapy
Okay so, I devoured the available chapters in 2 days. Firstly, the narration is kinda slow. Like the MC thinks of something, has two paragraphs arguing with himself for and against, then another paragraph reacting to his idea and then shelving the idea 'for later'. Basically the MC spends a lot of time in his headspace which slows pacing. Behind the narrative and the MC is an interesting new plot of a character going around Remnant before the begining of the series bringing Magic to the world. Between the MC praising himself in his head for how clever he is and then getting whoomped because he never focused on a single training and just kept inventing new stuff the story actually is a fun read.
The way you put different powers into this is amazing but at the beginning it's boring and hard to read and between this one and the other Rwby you made I like the gamer one better.
Pesima historia, sus otros FF estan mucho mejor desarrolados que este, y el sistema de energias es ridiculo aprendio 5 tipos de energias diferentes de Mundos/Realidades diferentes solo por que si, honestamente para ser una reescritura de su otro FF RWBY isekai es muy lamentable
honestly it not a bad read but I'm having problems with people coming from a different revenant future and the random pov change so far I've read to 65 and it seems like the authers is just throwing random nonsense in so here is what I don't like the story 20% of it is plot another 40% pov change and 10% is random secret enemy that you won't hear about after one chapter 30%is the most stupid of them all is rwby character coming from the future and are all over the place id like the novel more if the author just sticks with the story without the dumb random pov
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ you saying that he went to rwby with nothing was a lie. He obviously went with a body that can use tons of different animes energies with the power of bulls#it. The way he unlocked mana was just circulating it though his body or to the 'gate', how does he even know it really exists and how to do it, all he had was a theory, that doesn't mean it should work.
Want a writing tip? Choose ONE anime power system, choose an environment conducive to first arc development, focus on plot development. Your first Gamer story is a thousand times better than this one. Doing this was a huge waste of time and energy, no one likes to read about someone capable of doing anything just by imagining it. Be happy.
it's a nice read everyone should try a bit boring at first but its become interesting after passing through 20chap....................................
Ya tetap semangat dan saya harap ceritanya akan semakin menarik untuk kedepannya... Saya dukung karya anda author... Yah saya harap yang lainnya tolong di update juga,,,, soalnya cerita yang anda buat memang bagus, dan saya menantikan
It's entertaining. Don't care about powers or anything, because it's entertaining to read.... Look too far into it, and you're just looking for a reason to criticize. Anywho-, the writing quality is pretty good, with only a few grammar errors across a few chapters. The updates seem pretty good, especially with how hectic these past few months have been across the globe. Story development has been reasonably paced, and I easily spent three hours reading. The character design seems to match with how I remember some of the characters and their brief flashback scenes, and our protagonist is entertaining to follow along in the story. And the world background is pretty good with mentions of the cities, countries, and where he's going, alongside the environment.
Es una gran historia tienen un gran flujo que muestra el idealismo que tienen los cazadores y muestra lo ciegos que son las personas al ver solo blanco y negro y no en tonos grises y no entienden que matar a algunos por la supervivencia de los demás algunas veces es la única opción.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Personally I love it so far not much else to say really Yea yea yup yea yea I yea yea yup yup yea yea yup yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea yup yea yea I agree yea yea
I mean it’s good in the sense that it has no grammar issues, updates regularly, and stuff. 2 Main issues is that most of it is actually just the thoughts of the mc and the rest is him getting broken power like cursed energy in the 2nd chapter, makes the synopsis misleading
I like how creative the Main character gets and how many uses he comes with for the powers he used his eye to gain all the knowledge from Echidna and ow he is now making himself a stable foothold and good allies in this world
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ It's alright I like the original more but this is also good to wish they're a description of how the mc look. While he does get a slight nerf I believe the knowledge of alchemy and the ability to do it without a circle make up the exchange for his curse energy as he can always either use water magic or aura to heal himself. The only thing I don't really like is how young the character is being 14 but most of the time I ignore it and can be easily be fixed by a time skip(not a huge one as that might make his power development confusing depending on how the author does it)—another good read one of the better rwby fanfic that is alive.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Я очень не доволен. Прочитал до момента попытки Алхимии... УДАЧНОЙ попытки алхимии! И на этом моменте я решил сдаться. Это явно не моя чашка чая. Не хочу читать про героя, который по ПАМЯТИ нарисовал круг и который работал... почему-то! Очень странно. Я был в порядке с проклятой энергией... и попытками героя почувствовать магию. Просто потому что магия в этом аниме есть из канона. Как и проклятая энергия у гримм. Но алхимия... и работает!? Не понятно что с аурой... в общем много странностей и плюс к плохому написанию и сумбурности я ставлю плохие баллы и гневный комментарий.
Have to say, this is one the best ff's that i read so far and i rlly like the concept of mixing the powers of diffrent anime and mangas but not making it op.
I don’t have proper words for how boring and bad this is, 90% of it is just describing things, 8% of MC’s thoughts, and 2% of uninteresting dialogue. An example of what not to do.
honestly im not one to do reviews let alone rate badly but this has to be the worst title ive ever seen ................................................
All I got to say, the narration is boring. although the concept was fine, and the plot is bland, no character introduction, but self development. don't know it is because I like fast pace. so not for people like me. keep up the good work and improve. all the best.
After 22 chapters it gets a bit boring at least for me but you have 5 stars because I will probably read when there are more chapters (Google translator)
Sinceramente lo dejo no pude leer más del capítulo 4 porque sinceramente dice la etiqueta de " Débil a Fuerte " y sinceramente en los 4 capítulos que leí ya tiene como mínimo 3 energía diferentes y eso sin desbloquear aura siendo la magia la más difícil de conseguir en RWBY pero la consigue en menos de una hora con el supuesto método de magia en el aire..... Cuando RWBY no tiene nada de eso sinceramente no puedo leer algo con tan poco sentido
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