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we all thought he was the mohglester, turns out he was miquellested. Justice for my boy mohg, bro did no wrong #JusticeforOmens #JusticeforMohg
ive reas this several times, but now i gotta ask, will there be a part two for the dlc?
I read this novel the moment it came out in FF, I didn't know it was also here. For me, this is the best example of a smut fic with a good plot and good pace, I would recommend it to everyone who likes this type of novel, it's a masterpiece
the beginning and middle are very good, but the netorare at the end ruined everything, it was painful to read those chapters
This story is unique in that it makes use of the emotiveness behind unspoken communication to make it so the MC isn't cringe inducing. The story skillfully navigates the challenges of having a harem very well keeping the characters consistent with their game representation and adding spice to create an intriguing dynamic that keeps readers engaged.
Incredible story the plot is very good, I really liked the personality of the protagonist he did very well throughout the whole story I thought it was amazing even not speaking he manages to convey just by the o Eyes, these heroines are incredible their stories their personality I really liked their development and their stories and the happy ending for all is very good I liked it a lot mainly because They really deserve a happy and good ending, I have no complaints about the story the author did it very well and managed to portray the personality and story the same in the game
excellent imagery excellent writing and I love the ending chosen for you have turned an amazing game with a sad ending for many lovable characters into a work of art where everyone lives and what suffering that happened was cured thank you for writing this story it's amazing and by far one of my favorites now
Perfect in everything, story, writing, characters. Also the type of story I’m looking for yet I can no longer find.
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Really good Elden Ring fanfic. It does make me wonder how long the story would've been if it was started at the very beginning for the Tarnished. Instead of just the beginning of his perfect run. As well as if those general Radahn bonus chapters could make a good spin off.
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One of the best fanfics I have ever read anyone who is thinking of reading this. NEEDS to read this.
Disliked the yuri towards the end, almost ruined it for me but it's fiction and I can delete it from my own head cannon of the fic. If I do so 9/10
First off the grammer is excellent in this novel. The update stability was good when releasing or at least I seen from other review’s. Charcter design not bad at all good description’s. The Backgroud of the lore for Elden Ring is superbly done. Now for the story which for me had it’s up’s and down’s overall. I’ll get the negative’s out of the way the women of the novel make conparison’s with their former spouses with the MC. Even one’s pressence being hinted to be affecting one of the harem girl’s. Giving those Cuck me vibes for the MC. He doesn’t save every girl in Elden Ring. Well those that are mentioned but never show up or do but die. Also some yuri vibes yeah take that what you will. Even personally wasn’t a fan every stinking time I’m thinking author really? At least have the MC present but no it’s at the end but two women go off and do their own thing. Hard Cuck vibes once again. If your expecting any tension in the story the MC is OP so enough said. His charcter can be a bit one dimensional being the silent MC. He’s not whiney like other MC’s so that’s a plus. His charcterization come’s from’s his expression’s which is either smile, shake’s head, and stare lol. The method’s he use’s to save the girl’s seem’s legit some at the same time I’m not so sure. The thing that really bugged me was the wedding and the dividing the women based off status. Not having them married all at once really ticked me off. Given it was a clear divide on who the MC was showing favoritism toward’s at least in my view. I felt each girl could have been fleshed out more and had more interaction’s with the MC. It felt rushed at times the romance and contrived. With some girl’s falling in love way too soon for my taste. Overall these my raw and honest thought’s on the novel. The postive is the aformentioned grammer,worldbuilding,and charcter design. Hope this helped anyone peace.
I want to say a lot, but in short, thank you. Let's just exclude the fact that ff on this topic is like unicorns in real life. So we still have: A good pen, a small but existing humor, and a lemon and syrup in a dark world. Most importantly, the number of annoying things here is close to zero. The only drawback that could be is the lack of action scenes, but if you read this, you will understand that such scenes are not really needed here.
you know when I first added this story to my library, it was because I thought it was like your other ones. But while I go looking for gold I found Diamonds instead. This is the most wholesome story(Porn with plot)I have every read
Came for the Plot, and stayed for the actual plot, who would've thought? I've been following Cam's great works through different platforms for a little while, so imagine my surprise when I was reading the summary and only out of the corner of my eye, see his name and found out he also had an account here? Honestly... now that I think about it while writing this review, it probably shouldn't have surprised me at all... Anyway, back to reviewing the actual work: Amazing, really. Solid and just consistent quality all over. Also, as someone who loves Elden Ring (well, DS games in general), the effort that he's put into it in terms of lore, and even making the more nonsensical or, as he likes to call them, "fill-in-the-blanks" things feel real and fitting... Is rather mind-blowing. I ate through the story in a day and a half, expecting it to be something for me to read on the side to just read something, but my word did it hook me. I can safely say that you have given me my Perfect Ending now, Cam. Exactly what I wished was possible for me to do in all those runs I've had and hundreds of hours looking for alternatives that even the mighty wikis don't know of, so for that, Thank you.
the story was good the writing was good the only problem is the yuri towards the end kinda ruined it for me but everything else up to that was a good read
naaa bastatnte entretenido mi hermano mi comi todos los capitulos en 1 dia assssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
the novel and writing is good but for safety measures of my heart i stop reading and wanted ask, there's NTR? (Sorry For My Bad English) ╮(＾▽＾)╭
Good fan fiction, really enjoyed it on QQ. Your first first fic that I read, now I'll be happy to look at the rest. I recommend reading, in our time there are not so many Elden Ring fanfictions, and this one is also quite well written [img=recommend]
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I see lots of text by you... which makes you maidenless. doh hohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohoho. but legit, good work on Maidenless No More.
The Kenobi show sucks and you know it now Bwahahahahahahahahavagahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahavagahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
Love all your other stories and this one is just as amazing. literally instantly read the chapters when they came out. after the end instantly binged it again in one sitting.
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we all thought he was the mohglester, turns out he was miquellested. Justice for my boy mohg, bro did no wrong #JusticeforOmens #JusticeforMohg
ive reas this several times, but now i gotta ask, will there be a part two for the dlc?
I read this novel the moment it came out in FF, I didn't know it was also here. For me, this is the best example of a smut fic with a good plot and good pace, I would recommend it to everyone who likes this type of novel, it's a masterpiece
the beginning and middle are very good, but the netorare at the end ruined everything, it was painful to read those chapters
This story is unique in that it makes use of the emotiveness behind unspoken communication to make it so the MC isn't cringe inducing. The story skillfully navigates the challenges of having a harem very well keeping the characters consistent with their game representation and adding spice to create an intriguing dynamic that keeps readers engaged.
Incredible story the plot is very good, I really liked the personality of the protagonist he did very well throughout the whole story I thought it was amazing even not speaking he manages to convey just by the o Eyes, these heroines are incredible their stories their personality I really liked their development and their stories and the happy ending for all is very good I liked it a lot mainly because They really deserve a happy and good ending, I have no complaints about the story the author did it very well and managed to portray the personality and story the same in the game
excellent imagery excellent writing and I love the ending chosen for you have turned an amazing game with a sad ending for many lovable characters into a work of art where everyone lives and what suffering that happened was cured thank you for writing this story it's amazing and by far one of my favorites now
Perfect in everything, story, writing, characters. Also the type of story I’m looking for yet I can no longer find.
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Really good Elden Ring fanfic. It does make me wonder how long the story would've been if it was started at the very beginning for the Tarnished. Instead of just the beginning of his perfect run. As well as if those general Radahn bonus chapters could make a good spin off.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ One of the best fanfics I have ever read anyone who is thinking of reading this. NEEDS to read this.
Disliked the yuri towards the end, almost ruined it for me but it's fiction and I can delete it from my own head cannon of the fic. If I do so 9/10
First off the grammer is excellent in this novel. The update stability was good when releasing or at least I seen from other review’s. Charcter design not bad at all good description’s. The Backgroud of the lore for Elden Ring is superbly done. Now for the story which for me had it’s up’s and down’s overall. I’ll get the negative’s out of the way the women of the novel make conparison’s with their former spouses with the MC. Even one’s pressence being hinted to be affecting one of the harem girl’s. Giving those Cuck me vibes for the MC. He doesn’t save every girl in Elden Ring. Well those that are mentioned but never show up or do but die. Also some yuri vibes yeah take that what you will. Even personally wasn’t a fan every stinking time I’m thinking author really? At least have the MC present but no it’s at the end but two women go off and do their own thing. Hard Cuck vibes once again. If your expecting any tension in the story the MC is OP so enough said. His charcter can be a bit one dimensional being the silent MC. He’s not whiney like other MC’s so that’s a plus. His charcterization come’s from’s his expression’s which is either smile, shake’s head, and stare lol. The method’s he use’s to save the girl’s seem’s legit some at the same time I’m not so sure. The thing that really bugged me was the wedding and the dividing the women based off status. Not having them married all at once really ticked me off. Given it was a clear divide on who the MC was showing favoritism toward’s at least in my view. I felt each girl could have been fleshed out more and had more interaction’s with the MC. It felt rushed at times the romance and contrived. With some girl’s falling in love way too soon for my taste. Overall these my raw and honest thought’s on the novel. The postive is the aformentioned grammer,worldbuilding,and charcter design. Hope this helped anyone peace.
I want to say a lot, but in short, thank you. Let's just exclude the fact that ff on this topic is like unicorns in real life. So we still have: A good pen, a small but existing humor, and a lemon and syrup in a dark world. Most importantly, the number of annoying things here is close to zero. The only drawback that could be is the lack of action scenes, but if you read this, you will understand that such scenes are not really needed here.
you know when I first added this story to my library, it was because I thought it was like your other ones. But while I go looking for gold I found Diamonds instead. This is the most wholesome story(Porn with plot)I have every read
Came for the Plot, and stayed for the actual plot, who would've thought? I've been following Cam's great works through different platforms for a little while, so imagine my surprise when I was reading the summary and only out of the corner of my eye, see his name and found out he also had an account here? Honestly... now that I think about it while writing this review, it probably shouldn't have surprised me at all... Anyway, back to reviewing the actual work: Amazing, really. Solid and just consistent quality all over. Also, as someone who loves Elden Ring (well, DS games in general), the effort that he's put into it in terms of lore, and even making the more nonsensical or, as he likes to call them, "fill-in-the-blanks" things feel real and fitting... Is rather mind-blowing. I ate through the story in a day and a half, expecting it to be something for me to read on the side to just read something, but my word did it hook me. I can safely say that you have given me my Perfect Ending now, Cam. Exactly what I wished was possible for me to do in all those runs I've had and hundreds of hours looking for alternatives that even the mighty wikis don't know of, so for that, Thank you.
the story was good the writing was good the only problem is the yuri towards the end kinda ruined it for me but everything else up to that was a good read
naaa bastatnte entretenido mi hermano mi comi todos los capitulos en 1 dia assssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss
the novel and writing is good but for safety measures of my heart i stop reading and wanted ask, there's NTR? (Sorry For My Bad English) ╮(＾▽＾)╭
Good fan fiction, really enjoyed it on QQ. Your first first fic that I read, now I'll be happy to look at the rest. I recommend reading, in our time there are not so many Elden Ring fanfictions, and this one is also quite well written [img=recommend]
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I see lots of text by you... which makes you maidenless. doh hohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohohoho. but legit, good work on Maidenless No More.
The Kenobi show sucks and you know it now Bwahahahahahahahahavagahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahavagahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha
Love all your other stories and this one is just as amazing. literally instantly read the chapters when they came out. after the end instantly binged it again in one sitting.
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