Lost on The Path of Life

LV 14

ReinAndHalos

I’m giving my all on this one from start to finish, I’m open to criticism but please don’t bash it you don’t like the direction of the story. I’m currently practicing my writing before I work on an original story. Hope you enjoy it!!! Also shameless author review cause gotta be positive.

LV 6

OllieZ

Review with slight spoilers, but should be TAGS in my opinion so... - Good grammar (just this makes it worthy of reading it, as a lot of Top Fanfictions here doesn't even have this LOL) - Lucky protagonist: obvious as he literary spent a wish so his eyes can look for luck. - Good pacing: even if I would like for him to spend time and train more his Pokemons. - Good characters: specially humans. Needs a bit of work with his Pokemons personality though - System that gives quests with generous rewards. - Wish fulfillment, DUH: some people don't like this, but I do. Shiny Pokemon galore (though I hope you tone it down, to make shinies more special) - Author post Images and Drawings! I love these kind of details hehe Dislikes: - That the start was with wishes, when 3/4 wishes could have been explained with his Noble family and a good bloodline (that goes well with his Noble family too). The last wish, the Eyes, could be his special ability too, without a need of a wish - Edgy start with proper tragedy backstory (that was avoidable btw). Once you read one, you read them all. My Wishes/Wants - Don't have companions until much later. Focus first on MC's Pokemons training, bonding, and his own journey. Whenever you feel he has already his team completed, you can go ahead. - You don't have to updates us all the time about what the side characters are doing. I appreciate it, but I like MC's journey more. - More training montages. I don't know why, but I love them lol Even though it's not perfect, it is a solid Pokemon fic. I recommend!

LV 4

ravhage

love the story so far and i hope that you will stick with it

LV 4

Aeon_Twilight

Excellent story so far. Nice little quality of life changes. Story is going strong and pokemon... You better introduce the Hisuian pokemon to the modern people or something of that sort for research. My boy Kleavor deserves love.

LV 4

dragon_slayer749

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