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4.51
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it's a good read to kill time it's not the greatest grammar wise but it's ok you got an interesting novel don't give up on it sometimes hard work will pay off only thing I got to say is you need to edit the first couple chapters
10 reviews from 2 months ago and the novel started 2 months ago, at least mask it better than that. I am so disappointed that I don't know if I should give it a chance or not.
The start was really great. I like the pace of the story. I almost confused myself. after reading the synopsis I knew the story going to fire. Don't drop this or I will kidnap you.
5 stars is too much for just 4 chapters, or so people will think, but I personally liked the premise and the starting so much that I would love to see this journey hence 5 star from me, keep writing.
I'm not familiar with Cultivation novels so it might've worked in favor of yours, but I quite like the concept for now. You've been slowly fleshing out the world while developing the characters in a most interesting way, which is why the score given is high. However, working on the writing itself is a must since it's all over the place. In this case, perhaps finding an editor or someone to proofread might help. Anyhow, it was a great read and I enjoyed most of it. Looking forward to the next chapters!
It is a fine peace since my brother is writing and I think he is working hard on this carrier, so I hope anyone whoever reads this, please support my brother in this carrier, after all, this is his last hope too.
A powerful start with great image created. The plot grows so well throughout the chapters while the picture becomes clearer through those words written. Overall a great read
For me this has been an average start and I still don't know what to expect from the novel since it is so fresh. I like how it has been structured and I hope this slow start will be a foundation for a great novel. I hope the author won't mind my shameless advice. Most dual cultivation novels don't go far as they are stuck in a quagmire of repeated r rated scenes. Please try to avoid this weakness and solidify the strength of your novel with your own colour. keep working hard!
This story is fine I guess, maybe because I am fed up with, dual cultivation type novels, but so far it is readable and something new is brewing inside it, I hope I won't be disappointed in the near future...
This story seems interesting,I had just completed one chapter and It just nice...keep writing..best of luck..[img=recommend].[img=recommend][img=recommend]
it's an great novel. so guy pickup your phone and give it a read and if you like it support the book for competition. that's it from me......
The protagonist sure has a big goal set! He wants to sleep with all of Martial God's women? This is crazy! And exciting at the same time! I would say it has a lot of potential and the story is good. The thing that needs improvement is grammar and punctuation. It confuses me sometimes. Otherwise, it is a good read!
When, Every, sentence is written, like this, it becomes, unreadable, please don't, treat, commas like, they are, spaces. I can not ANYTHING else a proper score due to the fact it is unreadable to me, Grammarly free edition WILL help you with this, please look into it.
it's a good read to kill time it's not the greatest grammar wise but it's ok you got an interesting novel don't give up on it sometimes hard work will pay off only thing I got to say is you need to edit the first couple chapters
10 reviews from 2 months ago and the novel started 2 months ago, at least mask it better than that. I am so disappointed that I don't know if I should give it a chance or not.
The start was really great. I like the pace of the story. I almost confused myself. after reading the synopsis I knew the story going to fire. Don't drop this or I will kidnap you.
5 stars is too much for just 4 chapters, or so people will think, but I personally liked the premise and the starting so much that I would love to see this journey hence 5 star from me, keep writing.
I'm not familiar with Cultivation novels so it might've worked in favor of yours, but I quite like the concept for now. You've been slowly fleshing out the world while developing the characters in a most interesting way, which is why the score given is high. However, working on the writing itself is a must since it's all over the place. In this case, perhaps finding an editor or someone to proofread might help. Anyhow, it was a great read and I enjoyed most of it. Looking forward to the next chapters!
It is a fine peace since my brother is writing and I think he is working hard on this carrier, so I hope anyone whoever reads this, please support my brother in this carrier, after all, this is his last hope too.
A powerful start with great image created. The plot grows so well throughout the chapters while the picture becomes clearer through those words written. Overall a great read
For me this has been an average start and I still don't know what to expect from the novel since it is so fresh. I like how it has been structured and I hope this slow start will be a foundation for a great novel. I hope the author won't mind my shameless advice. Most dual cultivation novels don't go far as they are stuck in a quagmire of repeated r rated scenes. Please try to avoid this weakness and solidify the strength of your novel with your own colour. keep working hard!
This story is fine I guess, maybe because I am fed up with, dual cultivation type novels, but so far it is readable and something new is brewing inside it, I hope I won't be disappointed in the near future...
This story seems interesting,I had just completed one chapter and It just nice...keep writing..best of luck..[img=recommend].[img=recommend][img=recommend]
it's an great novel. so guy pickup your phone and give it a read and if you like it support the book for competition. that's it from me......
The protagonist sure has a big goal set! He wants to sleep with all of Martial God's women? This is crazy! And exciting at the same time! I would say it has a lot of potential and the story is good. The thing that needs improvement is grammar and punctuation. It confuses me sometimes. Otherwise, it is a good read!
When, Every, sentence is written, like this, it becomes, unreadable, please don't, treat, commas like, they are, spaces. I can not ANYTHING else a proper score due to the fact it is unreadable to me, Grammarly free edition WILL help you with this, please look into it.