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He was bleeding. A hand through his chest. He looked back and said with a hoarse voice.
"Why? You were my Beta."
His own right hand smiled.
"Because I know that I can become the alpha if I kill you myself."
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This is my first novel in this particular format, with werewolves and vampires. I am new at this, so I will be adding my own rules, and won't completely follow canon. Please support me, and do give me suggestions as I want to improve.
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Support me in writing this novel at patreon.com/jdbeue

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    jdbeue

    Author Here. This novel is a new take on the classic werewolf genre. Do consider trying this out. If you have any suggestions, please do voice them, as they help me improve my writing style.

    3yr
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    silent_walker

    From what I have read, it did not look puppy-love werewolf story. It seemed to be an action-packed, revenge story. so far it's been good, and I would recommend raising the word count in the first dozens or so chapters. Other than that you need to tune the dialogues, it looked too dumb out for the readers and there are a few repetitive words. Good Job, jd.

    3yr
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    Daoista7TnOd

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    3yr
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    kulces

    GOLD!!! Non harem werewolf story. Just action, and no stupid filler romance. Let's gooooo

    3yr
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    WarriorWolf

    Now I have only read the first segment of the book so I have not seen how your skills have progressed but for the whole werewolf thing (like descriptions or actions like instead of ‘furry hand in his chest’ something like ‘clawed fist thrusted through his chest’ ect) i would suggest you used more violent, beast like description and maybe look at some books of the genre. I would suggest looking at the book on this site beast: reborn and although your books may lack the same themes (like how in that book werewolves are more ‘beast than man’ and yours seem to be more human) it is a godo source of inspiration and werewolf-y, I would also suggest looking at the latter chapters since once apon a time that author was also unskilled. And finally thank you for all of your hard work and I might have said too much (if you haven’t guessed) i’m very passionate when it comes to wolves (especially books about werewolves).

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    3yr
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    Sky_Li

    Werewolf's I see😊 It's really an amazing book and the plot devices are 👌 I can see great potential's and I wish you the best on winning the WPC💯

    3yr
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    Kemoyin_Warlock

    Book is pretty good. The main character has no personality tho. And his moms a fat pig. But his dad ate her and then buried her bones in Egypt.

    2yr
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    Apostle_of_Noice

    ⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛ 🟥🟥⬛⬛🟥🟥🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥🟥⬛🟥🟥 🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛⬛⬛🟥⬛⬛🟥⬛ 🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛⬛🟥🟥 🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥⬛⬛🟥⬛ 🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥🟥🟥⬛🟥⬛🟥🟥⬛🟥🟥 ⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛⬛ Also that cover art looks really kool.

    2yr
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    mirxkewl

    This is a great novel which I can see myself getting hooked on! I've honestly gotten tired of seeing so many books of the Werewolf genre being filled with unnecessary and badly-executed romance. The first line does well in reeling the readers into the protagonist's situation. On that note, I feel that the paragraphs from the second chapter onwards could be cut shorter and that with typos being adjusted, this book would do well. All the best with this and good work, author! [img=recommend]

    3yr
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    WhiteVest

    It's a great story, I live the dynamic between characters. The worldbuiding is already there since it's set in the real world. I'm excited to see what happens next and how the story plays out. P.s great writing and decent editing not too many obvious errors.

    3yr
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    Sierra_Caitlyn

    The book immediately starts with action that draws you in. It’s fascinating and will be interesting to see where it goes from the first few chapters.

    3yr
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    HaoShu
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    Hmm, I see some new story development here. A Werewolf one. It's really an amazing plot. I don't know much about the western though. The writing style is pretty good. The introduction of the story is nice.

    3yr
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    Praneeth_Kukunuru

    Awesome premise... hope it wins the WPC, it deserves it.

    3yr
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    kingsjj

    I have been a good fan of the author for quite a while now, and I am glad he is back with another book. It is different from his usual genres, but... why the heck not, lets try it out.

    3yr
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      First Enemy 3 years ago
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      Center of the Maze 3 years ago
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      In an instant 3 years ago
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