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I love this story, but it hasn’t been updated in a long time. I had to stop reading for a few years, due to my job, but as I left that job now I could read it. The trouble is only a few chapters have been added. Hope he continues it soon.
Hello, got hooked to this novel and was wondering if it got dropped or will resume in November of 2023?
You somehow took the most interesting VR novel premise that I've ever seen and immediately turn it into a hybrid of a relationship melodrama and generic power fantasy. The ex-girlfriend stuff is forced and unbearable. The MC's motivation for saving his family member is so cliché that I want to die. The MC is very OP; the writing and story development is so blatantly convenient for him that it actually annoyed me to read. The VR subplot that seemed to be developing is also unoriginal and borrows many elements from other series. I could go on, but those were my biggest gripes and caused me to drop the novel. But I wish the best of luck with what the author is doing though. IMO they have the writing talent, it's just about refining that properly.
An interesting story. I like how the bending and game elements mesh. I'm looking forward to seeing where the story goes. My only real complaint is that all the women seem to exist solely to fall in love with the MC instantly. I get that may be a draw for some people, but it's just profoundly boring for me. There's just no depth to the characters. Whenever a new one shows up all I end up thinking is, "Ah, another lady who is going to be compelled to go out of her way to help the MC for no reason."
This story is amazing so far but new chapters come out too slow to keep the interest of some of those who get to the newest chapters and are waiting for new ones to come out. While I understand that is important to take your time writing to make sure that new chapters are of good quality, the fast release of new chapters is also really important even if you have to shorten the chapter to achieve this. More but smaller chapters of the same quality will help you keep the attention of those readers that are less patient or invested in the story because they will notice a notification for a new chapter more often and keep it at the top of their library each time they open it to read the new chapter. It may also help you Increase your writing quality because you will be focusing on a smaller amount of work at a time.
Overall the story is great i like the concept of the story its just in video games genre "Little Sister" is so overused i get it you know its just that its too cringe xD iam not here to criticize just wanted to review xD
I love this so much so far I’m in the early stages and notice that his sister might be a brocon ish is that going to go anywhere in the future or no?
Great story so far probably one of the best Avatar story's out there but I do wish for the chapters to come out faster. And that's my review.
The story is great, the grammar and characters are also very good, There is romance and comedy but nothing exagerated so everything is on point. Is the novel on break or something? I have been waiting for updates but nothing yet
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I don't know about everyone else but personaly I like a game novel to be just that, a game novel. Not a conspiracy about your parents death or otherwise. And come on, do you really expect anyone in their right mind to think of the sister as a 19yr old university student, the personality is of a 6yr old. just a young sis cliche.
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Prety good book from what I've read so far. There are little to no grammar mistakes. The stroy is interesting so far and the plot seems to be progressing at a moderate pace, the author also has an excellent writing style. I remember I partially read one of his first books, Spirit Cultivation, and I feel he has improved a lot as a writer since then. Keep up the great work Piokilek!
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Wow, all reviews are 5 stars. Hard to believe it so I'll gonna add this story to my library for now then wait for the chapters to grow into hundreds then read. I really hate when I'm have been left hanging when I'm already so into the story just because there are only few chapters. :D
So far this novel is great. The video game part is enjoyable for me, i like how MC acts. I like the mysteries involving around the MC, his Family, the Game and the whole world. Its really interesting story.
It's the best novel i have read since ..... I'm french and my english est à ses débuts... Mais franchement ce roman est juste waou !!! J'adore et j'espère que vous continuerez l'histoire jusqu'au bout. Parce que si jamais vous deviez arrêter ce serait une grande, grande déception !! Merci beaucoup de continuer et bonne journée!!! 💕
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Seriously great story and writing. Good quality story line and the main characters background is well done. Only problem is, is the updates. Only one chapter a day, need moooore!
Love this book! Different from the usual game genres with warrior, magician, archer and many more classes. love the new concept. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I'm really enjoying the story so far thanks Piokilek only complaint is there is not enough chapters --------------------------------------------
Everything is good. Just the cover ain't yours. Remove it. Unless you get sued and lose your good work. It would be a real pity, don't you agree?
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I wish remaining days of july can convert to August so daily updates can start. Most of the readers desired characteristic of the novel the generaly like, they might find here. I can say that i like all of this novel till now. Its like there are some novel that you like but there might be 1 or 2 things that get to you but not this one[img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I think this is the best novel I have written so far and I'm inviting everyone to read it. You will not regret and I promise you will get hooked right from the start <3
I love this story, but it hasn’t been updated in a long time. I had to stop reading for a few years, due to my job, but as I left that job now I could read it. The trouble is only a few chapters have been added. Hope he continues it soon.
Hello, got hooked to this novel and was wondering if it got dropped or will resume in November of 2023?
You somehow took the most interesting VR novel premise that I've ever seen and immediately turn it into a hybrid of a relationship melodrama and generic power fantasy. The ex-girlfriend stuff is forced and unbearable. The MC's motivation for saving his family member is so cliché that I want to die. The MC is very OP; the writing and story development is so blatantly convenient for him that it actually annoyed me to read. The VR subplot that seemed to be developing is also unoriginal and borrows many elements from other series. I could go on, but those were my biggest gripes and caused me to drop the novel. But I wish the best of luck with what the author is doing though. IMO they have the writing talent, it's just about refining that properly.
An interesting story. I like how the bending and game elements mesh. I'm looking forward to seeing where the story goes. My only real complaint is that all the women seem to exist solely to fall in love with the MC instantly. I get that may be a draw for some people, but it's just profoundly boring for me. There's just no depth to the characters. Whenever a new one shows up all I end up thinking is, "Ah, another lady who is going to be compelled to go out of her way to help the MC for no reason."
This story is amazing so far but new chapters come out too slow to keep the interest of some of those who get to the newest chapters and are waiting for new ones to come out. While I understand that is important to take your time writing to make sure that new chapters are of good quality, the fast release of new chapters is also really important even if you have to shorten the chapter to achieve this. More but smaller chapters of the same quality will help you keep the attention of those readers that are less patient or invested in the story because they will notice a notification for a new chapter more often and keep it at the top of their library each time they open it to read the new chapter. It may also help you Increase your writing quality because you will be focusing on a smaller amount of work at a time.
Overall the story is great i like the concept of the story its just in video games genre "Little Sister" is so overused i get it you know its just that its too cringe xD iam not here to criticize just wanted to review xD
I love this so much so far I’m in the early stages and notice that his sister might be a brocon ish is that going to go anywhere in the future or no?
Great story so far probably one of the best Avatar story's out there but I do wish for the chapters to come out faster. And that's my review.
The story is great, the grammar and characters are also very good, There is romance and comedy but nothing exagerated so everything is on point. Is the novel on break or something? I have been waiting for updates but nothing yet
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I don't know about everyone else but personaly I like a game novel to be just that, a game novel. Not a conspiracy about your parents death or otherwise. And come on, do you really expect anyone in their right mind to think of the sister as a 19yr old university student, the personality is of a 6yr old. just a young sis cliche.
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Prety good book from what I've read so far. There are little to no grammar mistakes. The stroy is interesting so far and the plot seems to be progressing at a moderate pace, the author also has an excellent writing style. I remember I partially read one of his first books, Spirit Cultivation, and I feel he has improved a lot as a writer since then. Keep up the great work Piokilek!
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Wow, all reviews are 5 stars. Hard to believe it so I'll gonna add this story to my library for now then wait for the chapters to grow into hundreds then read. I really hate when I'm have been left hanging when I'm already so into the story just because there are only few chapters. :D
So far this novel is great. The video game part is enjoyable for me, i like how MC acts. I like the mysteries involving around the MC, his Family, the Game and the whole world. Its really interesting story.
It's the best novel i have read since ..... I'm french and my english est à ses débuts... Mais franchement ce roman est juste waou !!! J'adore et j'espère que vous continuerez l'histoire jusqu'au bout. Parce que si jamais vous deviez arrêter ce serait une grande, grande déception !! Merci beaucoup de continuer et bonne journée!!! 💕
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Seriously great story and writing. Good quality story line and the main characters background is well done. Only problem is, is the updates. Only one chapter a day, need moooore!
Love this book! Different from the usual game genres with warrior, magician, archer and many more classes. love the new concept. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I'm really enjoying the story so far thanks Piokilek only complaint is there is not enough chapters --------------------------------------------
Everything is good. Just the cover ain't yours. Remove it. Unless you get sued and lose your good work. It would be a real pity, don't you agree?
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I wish remaining days of july can convert to August so daily updates can start. Most of the readers desired characteristic of the novel the generaly like, they might find here. I can say that i like all of this novel till now. Its like there are some novel that you like but there might be 1 or 2 things that get to you but not this one[img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update]
I think this is the best novel I have written so far and I'm inviting everyone to read it. You will not regret and I promise you will get hooked right from the start <3