A Problem Shinobi

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Movezbatch

Oh my God just read the first chapter, what the **** is this shit, I'm about to die from second-had embarrassment, what were you thinking while writing this? This is like dream of a 13 year old, So edgy, so cool, so amazing ''normal'' guy First of all ''typical guy'' is apparently a world class genius who can invent shit but also dumb as **** that he can't see or understand that his girlfriend and ''best friend'' (how is he your best friend if he acts that way anyway, how could a normal person not a problem with him if he was good friends with him so much that he calls him best friend lol, what a dumbass) cheating on him. Loan sharks who are ready to kill and can casually give 1 MILLION DOLARS to a worthless nobody are so easy to trick when they see him cry about how he doesn't have any money they live him alone and don't ask for money... Bro they are loan sharks. They WERE ready to kill him, how are they suddenly such angels that their entire personalities change with a fucking grown ass man crying ? I couldn't even make it past that, holy shit this is such a garbage. Grammar is meh.

LV 4

Dudee_really

I don't know where this story will go but the chapters I've read now at this moment we're seriously impressive. The character ain't a pussy. No useless information like 'the sun was shining bright, the birds were chirping, and everyone were farting from their asses, yada yada' , there is no useless information . And I know that he's going to be a op mc in the future but the system you've given him now is the best, I mean like if you would've given him like a broken system, the missions will be like, humiliate the hokage and boom! you've got yourselves a pair of rinnegan. Sorry if I bored you, just needed to get it out of my system!!

LV 4

Grass_Cutter

A very good book i hope you dont drop it I personally cant wait for more you have produced many fanfics that have brought immense joy into my dull life and so far from what ive read its a great book with room for chacter developments and much more.