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4.28
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The MC babysits the original protagonist. That's all I have to say about this novel for you. Such a waste of time.
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It would be alright if this FF didn't like the canon, something like constantly underestimated in every situation. It's too boring for me. please change that aspect for me. At least, something that makes other characters ain't stupid and offending every people.
Good Story, There really isn't much PMG fanfics around and this one is pretty good in my opinion even though translation isn't that great. I hope you continue this fanfic and don't drop it. :)
Gotta show some support man especially writing a fanfic on a big story like this with a lot of background details. I just wanna show some support and hope you continue updating it its a great story so far.
You ruined your own novel. I really liked the first 3 chapter and even had high expectations for the fanfiction but it ruined everything for me when he let Liu Fei go after trying to kill him. I mean why should he let someone go after having towards himself. Saying that he let her go because she is his future wife is complete nonsense. He isnt the real Lin Feng after all.
The "" are misused egregiously. The paragraphs also need to be broken up a lot. Too many words in one giant clump detracts from the reading experience. Your grammar(words) seemed fine for the most part. Download Grammarly, it will help you immensely.
Ух, нихуя себе, знакомая работа, не знал что автор еще и на иглише ее выкладывает, прикольно. Ну тут сто процентов 5 звезд хотя бы за то, что автор русский.
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I dropped it because I can't bear with the writing style of the author ...if he writes the story in his own language and then he uses Google translator to translate it in English , he would have way better results .. the story is pretty much a copy paste of the original with the difference being the MC having a sharingan so no character development, no world building outside of what you can find in the original novel
This fanfic is "Ok", it feels very rushed like the author is trying to skip the start of the novel. i can see why it gets so many good reviews seeing as it's one of the few fanfics that's not anime or harry potter but i just cant give it a review based on that alone.
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Lucifer, a demon, returns from hell to reside in Los Angeles and runs a club. He soon gets involved with the local police and assists them in solving tricky criminal cases.
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Hey Author, Great stuff writing a PMG fanfic! Nice long chaps, update is okay... BUT! The dialouge, the way its structured. example: (This is apart of it lol the dash) - talking...... “ lin feng said determinedly or something - “talking again.....!? Lin feng said and then carry on more words... “wordsssssss” (used it correctly after doing this mess of a dialouge... this is how author writes it continuously “.....!? Some reason this means you dont need to put quotation mark... author..?) It should always be “ “ quotation in the beginning and at the end of speech, quotation. No dash at the beginning or ending with exclamation mark(!) or question mark(?) “Talking!” Lin Fend shouted or said determinedly. Also in chapter 16 their was a her his for lin hong when it said her sister, it should be his sister. I was confused and thought lin hong was girl, just dont make these mistakes please as I dont remember much of PMG, especially side characters. Dont wanna read and mistake for girl when the whole time they were guys or same thing in reverse ya know? Author thanks if you listened and decided to change the dialouge as its sometimes confusing. Eat well and you’ll live longer! Thank you for writing PMG fanfic and is Lin Qian in the harem, slave, maid or she courting death?
i don't think this novel will last long. It will surely dropped.Don't comment me early. i might be wrong but this novel will not last.if the novel will continue to the end above chapter 60 i will apologise in a reply
Geez, this story doesn't even try to change the MC character. Basically, it's just an mc with a cheat that is stronger than the original. I've hated the original MC and now it doesn't offer anything new. And seriously do people just ignore his changing eyes? I am very disappointed!!
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I like the ff but the grammar is very bad, most of the times I can't understand anything, I hope the Author edits the chapters. Even the dialogue speaking us very confusing.
Am a picky person when reading fan fics,as you can see from my history but reading this fan fic.. its absolutely amazing. keep up the good work and keep writing.
it's the best but it's sentences editing have to improve and Don't stop keep going I like it very much atleast complet it properly and thanks for the chapter author san more chapter please [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
what's the difference between this lin feng and the previous lin feng... Why MC going on about get rid dirt of world is he cleaner of world... Do something about MC ppersonality He becoming more like a cultivating world most righteous man is alive And not everything black and white...
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The MC babysits the original protagonist. That's all I have to say about this novel for you. Such a waste of time.
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It would be alright if this FF didn't like the canon, something like constantly underestimated in every situation. It's too boring for me. please change that aspect for me. At least, something that makes other characters ain't stupid and offending every people.
Good Story, There really isn't much PMG fanfics around and this one is pretty good in my opinion even though translation isn't that great. I hope you continue this fanfic and don't drop it. :)
Gotta show some support man especially writing a fanfic on a big story like this with a lot of background details. I just wanna show some support and hope you continue updating it its a great story so far.
You ruined your own novel. I really liked the first 3 chapter and even had high expectations for the fanfiction but it ruined everything for me when he let Liu Fei go after trying to kill him. I mean why should he let someone go after having towards himself. Saying that he let her go because she is his future wife is complete nonsense. He isnt the real Lin Feng after all.
The "" are misused egregiously. The paragraphs also need to be broken up a lot. Too many words in one giant clump detracts from the reading experience. Your grammar(words) seemed fine for the most part. Download Grammarly, it will help you immensely.
Ух, нихуя себе, знакомая работа, не знал что автор еще и на иглише ее выкладывает, прикольно. Ну тут сто процентов 5 звезд хотя бы за то, что автор русский.
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ I dropped it because I can't bear with the writing style of the author ...if he writes the story in his own language and then he uses Google translator to translate it in English , he would have way better results .. the story is pretty much a copy paste of the original with the difference being the MC having a sharingan so no character development, no world building outside of what you can find in the original novel
This fanfic is "Ok", it feels very rushed like the author is trying to skip the start of the novel. i can see why it gets so many good reviews seeing as it's one of the few fanfics that's not anime or harry potter but i just cant give it a review based on that alone.
[img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] . love it
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Lucifer, a demon, returns from hell to reside in Los Angeles and runs a club. He soon gets involved with the local police and assists them in solving tricky criminal cases.
Interesting Interesting interesting interesting Interesting interesting interesting Interesting interesting interesting Interesting interesting interesting Interesting
thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
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Hey Author, Great stuff writing a PMG fanfic! Nice long chaps, update is okay... BUT! The dialouge, the way its structured. example: (This is apart of it lol the dash) - talking...... “ lin feng said determinedly or something - “talking again.....!? Lin feng said and then carry on more words... “wordsssssss” (used it correctly after doing this mess of a dialouge... this is how author writes it continuously “.....!? Some reason this means you dont need to put quotation mark... author..?) It should always be “ “ quotation in the beginning and at the end of speech, quotation. No dash at the beginning or ending with exclamation mark(!) or question mark(?) “Talking!” Lin Fend shouted or said determinedly. Also in chapter 16 their was a her his for lin hong when it said her sister, it should be his sister. I was confused and thought lin hong was girl, just dont make these mistakes please as I dont remember much of PMG, especially side characters. Dont wanna read and mistake for girl when the whole time they were guys or same thing in reverse ya know? Author thanks if you listened and decided to change the dialouge as its sometimes confusing. Eat well and you’ll live longer! Thank you for writing PMG fanfic and is Lin Qian in the harem, slave, maid or she courting death?
i don't think this novel will last long. It will surely dropped.Don't comment me early. i might be wrong but this novel will not last.if the novel will continue to the end above chapter 60 i will apologise in a reply
Geez, this story doesn't even try to change the MC character. Basically, it's just an mc with a cheat that is stronger than the original. I've hated the original MC and now it doesn't offer anything new. And seriously do people just ignore his changing eyes? I am very disappointed!!
More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.Harem.
I like the ff but the grammar is very bad, most of the times I can't understand anything, I hope the Author edits the chapters. Even the dialogue speaking us very confusing.
Am a picky person when reading fan fics,as you can see from my history but reading this fan fic.. its absolutely amazing. keep up the good work and keep writing.
it's the best but it's sentences editing have to improve and Don't stop keep going I like it very much atleast complet it properly and thanks for the chapter author san more chapter please [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
what's the difference between this lin feng and the previous lin feng... Why MC going on about get rid dirt of world is he cleaner of world... Do something about MC ppersonality He becoming more like a cultivating world most righteous man is alive And not everything black and white...
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