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Droplah, mc naif dan goblok ga ketulungan. Gak bisa memanfaatkan sistem dengan baik dan benar. Cara author membuat percakapan kek anak smp buat cerpen. Alay anjing
Author kenapa tidak dilanjutkan lagi? padahal novelmu cuma hasil copy paste doang?yaah Walaupun novelmu cuma hasil copy dan cuma menggantikan MC doang tpi ketika waktu di arc cerita Arifureta disana sudah mulai bagus
gk jauh beda sama alur cerita di aslinya kecuali mc nya aja yg diganti sama zen. asuna akhirnya masih terjebak di game. sistemnya bisa hack game sao masa gk bisa langsung nyelamatin asuna kn gk masuk akal
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Bagus sekali cerita nya. saya tidak sabar dengan kelanjutan cerita nya................ .. ......... Tambah kan harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem yang banyak penulis
Reaksi cewe2 dalem cerita kurang realistis aja sih. imo, harusnya mereka ga cuman tertunduk dan merona aja abis dibuai. kurang karakter kalo cuman itu reaksinya... overal bagus. 5/5 ntap👍
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Ini semua baik-baik saja sampai dia mentransfer semua skillnya ke semua wanitanya........................................................................................ ...
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The story is boring, the same story as the anime, without changing, just switching Kirito into Zen 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
bullshit, if it was a real person with a real personality then he wouldn't have saved his childhood friend who stayed awayed from him. if his childhood friend didn't scorn him or hate him that he can see then it would have been fine and understandable. But if it is just based on speculation that his childhood friend didn't actually hate him or dislike him then it is definitely bullshit. Everything about how he acts is bullshit. this is practically bullshit written all over it. i mean, if he is a normal person then he wouldn't act anyway he did in the first chapter. for example, imagine you are in his place, your childhood friend stayed away from you and you think that he/she hates or dislikes you, well you probably won't think much of it, probably just mark him/her as someone that doesn't deserve to be seen as a friend or such(actually childhood friends doesn't mean a thing, it just means that it is your friend when you were a child) But then one day, you found your childhood friend(ex-childhood friend) about to fall(or die) but then you went to save him/her, that would be the part where i would call bullshit, that is one of my least favorite event in the story. the author probably didn't know how an ordinary person thinks in a situation, he should at least think what he would feel if he is in that situation. probably going with a cliche reason like the childhood friend doesn't hate mc or dislikes him, he/she can't interact or can't say goodbye to him cuz its urgent business. i just can't read these kinds of things, at first i thought this novel would be good because the starting is quite good, typical mc getting bullied then doesn't hate or dislikes the bullies. I dropped it after reading the first chapter, so if i missed anything then i blame the chapter.
MC jepang lainnya yang ingin memiliki kekuatan yang untuk melindungi haremnnya...membosankan.......ini sama saja dengan Beta MC dengan Mcyang tidak mau menerimanya
the story is good but the relationship with the girls feels forced and lacks originality and his relationship with Rinko was not at all necessary other than that the story was very entertaining and good . thank you for your work
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Ini menyenangkan sekali, fanfic yang seperti keinginan penonton. Gw bingung sama haters yang bilang ini cuma penganti plot nama, sisanya copy paste. Mereka pikir buat novel itu mudah, 1 bab (1000 kata) untuk ketik dan berfikir itu lama,pegal dan pusing. Jadi kecuali ada kesalahan fatal dalam novel tolong jangan di hina. Saat kalian di fase sangat menyukai sebuah anime, kalian akan memposisikan diri sebagai MC, terus kalau kalian hebat dan mau, buatlah cerita sendiri dengan latar yang sudah ada, tanpa perlu berfikir rangka sebuah cerita. Itulah tujuan fanfic 'mencari hal baru, mirip dari konsep/latar yang sama.'
Droplah, mc naif dan goblok ga ketulungan. Gak bisa memanfaatkan sistem dengan baik dan benar. Cara author membuat percakapan kek anak smp buat cerpen. Alay anjing
Author kenapa tidak dilanjutkan lagi? padahal novelmu cuma hasil copy paste doang?yaah Walaupun novelmu cuma hasil copy dan cuma menggantikan MC doang tpi ketika waktu di arc cerita Arifureta disana sudah mulai bagus
gk jauh beda sama alur cerita di aslinya kecuali mc nya aja yg diganti sama zen. asuna akhirnya masih terjebak di game. sistemnya bisa hack game sao masa gk bisa langsung nyelamatin asuna kn gk masuk akal
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah baiklah
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Bagus sekali cerita nya. saya tidak sabar dengan kelanjutan cerita nya................ .. ......... Tambah kan harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem harem yang banyak penulis
Reaksi cewe2 dalem cerita kurang realistis aja sih. imo, harusnya mereka ga cuman tertunduk dan merona aja abis dibuai. kurang karakter kalo cuman itu reaksinya... overal bagus. 5/5 ntap👍
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Ini semua baik-baik saja sampai dia mentransfer semua skillnya ke semua wanitanya........................................................................................ ...
Bagus bagus bagus bagus lanjutkannnnnnnnnnñnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnmmmmmmmmmmm
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ The story is boring, the same story as the anime, without changing, just switching Kirito into Zen 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
bullshit, if it was a real person with a real personality then he wouldn't have saved his childhood friend who stayed awayed from him. if his childhood friend didn't scorn him or hate him that he can see then it would have been fine and understandable. But if it is just based on speculation that his childhood friend didn't actually hate him or dislike him then it is definitely bullshit. Everything about how he acts is bullshit. this is practically bullshit written all over it. i mean, if he is a normal person then he wouldn't act anyway he did in the first chapter. for example, imagine you are in his place, your childhood friend stayed away from you and you think that he/she hates or dislikes you, well you probably won't think much of it, probably just mark him/her as someone that doesn't deserve to be seen as a friend or such(actually childhood friends doesn't mean a thing, it just means that it is your friend when you were a child) But then one day, you found your childhood friend(ex-childhood friend) about to fall(or die) but then you went to save him/her, that would be the part where i would call bullshit, that is one of my least favorite event in the story. the author probably didn't know how an ordinary person thinks in a situation, he should at least think what he would feel if he is in that situation. probably going with a cliche reason like the childhood friend doesn't hate mc or dislikes him, he/she can't interact or can't say goodbye to him cuz its urgent business. i just can't read these kinds of things, at first i thought this novel would be good because the starting is quite good, typical mc getting bullied then doesn't hate or dislikes the bullies. I dropped it after reading the first chapter, so if i missed anything then i blame the chapter.
MC jepang lainnya yang ingin memiliki kekuatan yang untuk melindungi haremnnya...membosankan.......ini sama saja dengan Beta MC dengan Mcyang tidak mau menerimanya
the story is good but the relationship with the girls feels forced and lacks originality and his relationship with Rinko was not at all necessary other than that the story was very entertaining and good . thank you for your work
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Second World Black Clover kayanya bagus masih nyambung tema magic. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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Ini menyenangkan sekali, fanfic yang seperti keinginan penonton. Gw bingung sama haters yang bilang ini cuma penganti plot nama, sisanya copy paste. Mereka pikir buat novel itu mudah, 1 bab (1000 kata) untuk ketik dan berfikir itu lama,pegal dan pusing. Jadi kecuali ada kesalahan fatal dalam novel tolong jangan di hina. Saat kalian di fase sangat menyukai sebuah anime, kalian akan memposisikan diri sebagai MC, terus kalau kalian hebat dan mau, buatlah cerita sendiri dengan latar yang sudah ada, tanpa perlu berfikir rangka sebuah cerita. Itulah tujuan fanfic 'mencari hal baru, mirip dari konsep/latar yang sama.'