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4.2
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I want to read this novel it’s Sound interesting and you clearly put allot of afferd to it but you don’t write any chapter for whole 7 month so are you dropping it or no ? I hope not
This boock his good for his background story and his caractères but, it has some big mistake like the time when the Mother of "Kaito" wanted to meet the MC but we never seen this, or when the Guild Master wanted his employe to make sure White was the MC, the overall story is fine but at some part its slow then to fast and slow again, so for the New reader i have to say go fine someting hels, at the same time its look like the book will be drop at this rate, thanks you for riding this and have a nice day.
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The story is good i still dont like Kaito tho.....................................is this yuri?............please yuri......................
I can't really tell you my opinion on the story as what threw me off more than anything was the writing quality. From the very beginning you get lines like "I'm tired" the girl said tiredly while brushing her teeth, and the like, lines like these and other issues seem to be present throughout the story. Skipping ahead to around chapter 50, I found that the issues at the start were still there and the author's need to tell not show just oozes throughout, characters will be told they are correct by the author or have things they say or feel justified by the author, in the first chapter the author says people told the mc she could play piano and violin like a professional when she was 5 and then confirms it by stating right after that "and the people who said that were correct, she could indeed play the piano and violin like a professional". I'm surprised and sad nobody pointed these issues out to the author at an earlier point because the description of the novel makes it sound like an interesting read, however even if the novel has emotional moments, or really anything of substance that feels like it would be ruined by the writing quality, and just over explained and stated as a fact to an obscene degree. Something which the author does in a later chapter literally just stating two characters have a deep bond and that also one of them can understand every language. If your able to ignore the huge issues with the writing quality and the borderline, Isekai smartphone, if this than that I tell you writing than this could very well be the novel for you. However as someone who translates novels as a hobby I can tell you that the issue here isn't the authors inability to write a coherent sentence but rather their inability to understand how to pull a reader I to their world, this novel reads like an American 5th or 6th graders first argumentative essay. Take that how you will. TLDR: horrible writing quality issue's, but not log in grammar department, read if you are just really good at connecting to lines like " "I love you" the girl said, and she really meant it her love for the person she said it to held no bounds and they share a deep connection, also she had a love skill allowing her to do the truest of love"
It went from kind of decent to some boring school life story. Lets be very honest here, school life is boring and pointless unless you have some good plot reason for it but in this case you have none. I should give it more stars but my personal bias makes me rate this low because have the story so far and maybe more as of the time im writing this is just some boring slice of life-ish school life and there is nothing wrong with that in itself but, that's not what I was here for when reading this story. Lets not forget the "human" friends she is making that I think is holding her back even more.
thanks for the GREAT novel and We hope to see more of this great work thanks Author JUnknownc [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
how did this dope novel go unnoticed? maybe due to the low update rate. but this is a hidden gem. and best fmc novel. loving it. please don't drop author.
Love The Story So Far keep up the good work I hope if there is romance it is Yuri aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
great novel please don't drop [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Great Novel! Looking forward for more chapters. Is there going to be any romance later on in the story and if so what kind of romance? Yuri?
I really liked it, it just left the topic, as a story of revenge ended up becoming a school story
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Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice Nice nice nice nice nice nice. Keep Updating :) and my reaction.
Now this peak my interest a lot more then ever even MC can't get memories back with only one being with her sister not to mention why MC can't create god slayer weapon even seal there power?
Making her go to school was incredibly forced and was just done to slow down her growth and probaly get some easy character development. And then there is the sentient system which is an easy novel wrecker
I want to read this novel it’s Sound interesting and you clearly put allot of afferd to it but you don’t write any chapter for whole 7 month so are you dropping it or no ? I hope not
This boock his good for his background story and his caractères but, it has some big mistake like the time when the Mother of "Kaito" wanted to meet the MC but we never seen this, or when the Guild Master wanted his employe to make sure White was the MC, the overall story is fine but at some part its slow then to fast and slow again, so for the New reader i have to say go fine someting hels, at the same time its look like the book will be drop at this rate, thanks you for riding this and have a nice day.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ The story is good i still dont like Kaito tho.....................................is this yuri?............please yuri......................
I can't really tell you my opinion on the story as what threw me off more than anything was the writing quality. From the very beginning you get lines like "I'm tired" the girl said tiredly while brushing her teeth, and the like, lines like these and other issues seem to be present throughout the story. Skipping ahead to around chapter 50, I found that the issues at the start were still there and the author's need to tell not show just oozes throughout, characters will be told they are correct by the author or have things they say or feel justified by the author, in the first chapter the author says people told the mc she could play piano and violin like a professional when she was 5 and then confirms it by stating right after that "and the people who said that were correct, she could indeed play the piano and violin like a professional". I'm surprised and sad nobody pointed these issues out to the author at an earlier point because the description of the novel makes it sound like an interesting read, however even if the novel has emotional moments, or really anything of substance that feels like it would be ruined by the writing quality, and just over explained and stated as a fact to an obscene degree. Something which the author does in a later chapter literally just stating two characters have a deep bond and that also one of them can understand every language. If your able to ignore the huge issues with the writing quality and the borderline, Isekai smartphone, if this than that I tell you writing than this could very well be the novel for you. However as someone who translates novels as a hobby I can tell you that the issue here isn't the authors inability to write a coherent sentence but rather their inability to understand how to pull a reader I to their world, this novel reads like an American 5th or 6th graders first argumentative essay. Take that how you will. TLDR: horrible writing quality issue's, but not log in grammar department, read if you are just really good at connecting to lines like " "I love you" the girl said, and she really meant it her love for the person she said it to held no bounds and they share a deep connection, also she had a love skill allowing her to do the truest of love"
It went from kind of decent to some boring school life story. Lets be very honest here, school life is boring and pointless unless you have some good plot reason for it but in this case you have none. I should give it more stars but my personal bias makes me rate this low because have the story so far and maybe more as of the time im writing this is just some boring slice of life-ish school life and there is nothing wrong with that in itself but, that's not what I was here for when reading this story. Lets not forget the "human" friends she is making that I think is holding her back even more.
thanks for the GREAT novel and We hope to see more of this great work thanks Author JUnknownc [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
how did this dope novel go unnoticed? maybe due to the low update rate. but this is a hidden gem. and best fmc novel. loving it. please don't drop author.
Love The Story So Far keep up the good work I hope if there is romance it is Yuri aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
great novel please don't drop [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Great Novel! Looking forward for more chapters. Is there going to be any romance later on in the story and if so what kind of romance? Yuri?
I really liked it, it just left the topic, as a story of revenge ended up becoming a school story
NICEEEEE![img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice Nice nice nice nice nice nice. Keep Updating :) and my reaction.
Now this peak my interest a lot more then ever even MC can't get memories back with only one being with her sister not to mention why MC can't create god slayer weapon even seal there power?
Making her go to school was incredibly forced and was just done to slow down her growth and probaly get some easy character development. And then there is the sentient system which is an easy novel wrecker