51รีวิว
4.35
- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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This story has the potential to be one of the best on the site, but it's been all put ruined. The author has fallen into the trap that most gamer/system stories do. That is to say, they have zero restraint when it comes to the system. To the point that thing are just ridiculous. It hits all the boxes of poorly designed system fictions. Given a Devil Fruit right off the bat, despite doing nothing to earn it. The system also (apparently) makes random changes to reality to make his life easier. The system applies to his Devil Fruit, so no experimenting, creativity or training. Just adding XP to the Devil Fruit tab. Also hinted he will get another Devil Fruit. One of the worst OP tropes. The system store that has no limits, including weapons from other anime and devil fruits. Gets a "mind palace". AKA a grinding system that lets the MC become even more OP by simply sitting in a corner while they sail around. Caps on learning skills are super low. He's able to learn Rokushiki before he even gets into the Grand Line. Super specific hidden quests that the MC just so happen to do anyway. What are the chances! And so on. There's a lot to enjoy, but it's mired in constant upgrades and BS rewards that take any suspense or tension out of the story. If you want to turn your brain off and read power fantasy wanking than you'll probably enjoy it. Otherwise, meh.
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is this playing ine piece fan fiction?lol lololololololololo lilooliloollooolooooolklklklkkofnfjxhzbdhshshdhfhfifofosjwbhwhwkdkgnvjfjfjfjfjfj
2 stars instead of 1 because he's not directly luffy's dog but instead a guard dog, the mc's goal is only the yonko and became the allied dog of luffy, also the mc is still doesn't have a crew so he temporary became luffy's dog
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thanks for the chap it's a good start I'll be tuning for the upcoming updates as well and I like the setting of this novel can't wait though is just probably not gonna take long
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So far I like the story. I hope it stays exceptional and creative. Nevertheless, I would be happy if you could explain the character background in more detail in the course of the future chapters. Thanks for the good work.
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A good one piece fanfic with lots of potential.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
This story has potential. the mc isnt weak, and inky is following luffy Until hes strong enough to get gis own crew and become the second whitebeard. which Is a respectable goal.
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love the story so far, quality writing and intersting mc, thanks for the fast updates ....................................................................................................
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Good.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👋👍👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
people should try writing one piece fanfic with doflamingo or Blackbeard the mc because lot of people is kind of sick of being goody2x following luffy, saving ace, whitebeard. shits
is this a big harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?
This story has the potential to be one of the best on the site, but it's been all put ruined. The author has fallen into the trap that most gamer/system stories do. That is to say, they have zero restraint when it comes to the system. To the point that thing are just ridiculous. It hits all the boxes of poorly designed system fictions. Given a Devil Fruit right off the bat, despite doing nothing to earn it. The system also (apparently) makes random changes to reality to make his life easier. The system applies to his Devil Fruit, so no experimenting, creativity or training. Just adding XP to the Devil Fruit tab. Also hinted he will get another Devil Fruit. One of the worst OP tropes. The system store that has no limits, including weapons from other anime and devil fruits. Gets a "mind palace". AKA a grinding system that lets the MC become even more OP by simply sitting in a corner while they sail around. Caps on learning skills are super low. He's able to learn Rokushiki before he even gets into the Grand Line. Super specific hidden quests that the MC just so happen to do anyway. What are the chances! And so on. There's a lot to enjoy, but it's mired in constant upgrades and BS rewards that take any suspense or tension out of the story. If you want to turn your brain off and read power fantasy wanking than you'll probably enjoy it. Otherwise, meh.
EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP EXP
is this playing ine piece fan fiction?lol lololololololololo lilooliloollooolooooolklklklkkofnfjxhzbdhshshdhfhfifofosjwbhwhwkdkgnvjfjfjfjfjfj
2 stars instead of 1 because he's not directly luffy's dog but instead a guard dog, the mc's goal is only the yonko and became the allied dog of luffy, also the mc is still doesn't have a crew so he temporary became luffy's dog
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more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
Cute!!!Cute!!!cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute Cute
thanks for the chap it's a good start I'll be tuning for the upcoming updates as well and I like the setting of this novel can't wait though is just probably not gonna take long
Keep it uuup!!!! Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!! Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!! Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!Keep it uuup!!!!
more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
So far I like the story. I hope it stays exceptional and creative. Nevertheless, I would be happy if you could explain the character background in more detail in the course of the future chapters. Thanks for the good work.
Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work Good Work
A good one piece fanfic with lots of potential.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
This story has potential. the mc isnt weak, and inky is following luffy Until hes strong enough to get gis own crew and become the second whitebeard. which Is a respectable goal.
.................................. ...................................................... ..................................................... ..................
love the story so far, quality writing and intersting mc, thanks for the fast updates ....................................................................................................
Nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice nice👌👌👌😌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌
Good.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👋👍👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👋👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
people should try writing one piece fanfic with doflamingo or Blackbeard the mc because lot of people is kind of sick of being goody2x following luffy, saving ace, whitebeard. shits