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I don't know what to say but this is a great story,........................................................................................................ ............... ..... ................................. .............
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is it possible for small snippets/ a sequel where they visit the worlds where the companions are summoned frm? [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
good harem but it needs stability, could write and release once a week or something like that would maintain some stability and could have several chapters saved
The grammar is truly atrocious and it's not a very imaginative story. Mostly just the grammar though.
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loved how it's didn't revolve around the main DXD cast and while still a harem it was limited in a way that was appropriate[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Writing Quality: Errors are few and none are jarring enough to break immersion. Stability Of Updates: Updates occurred fairly frequently, but without a set schedule, the time between updates becoming more spread out as the story progressed. Story Development: Was fairly decent, though a little narrow. Could have used some exposition occasionally. Character Design: Fairly good, but also fairly one-dimensional due to locking people into flame stereotypes which removed any uniqueness. More development would have been nice. World Background: This was supposed to be a massive crossover world, but turned into DxD with irrelevant HP world and four chapters where Bloodbourne made a brief appearance but affected nothing where only DxD plot mattered. That being said, A lot was written about Romania which in the original series was mostly irrelevant other than the fact that Valerie and Gasper came from there. So all in all, a little good - a little bad. Overall: Fairly good, but not multi-read good. Which considering the amount of horrible writing i've seen on this site, means this is in the top 10th percentile.
The ending was great, when is season 2 coming put? 🖋🖍📎🖋🔖🖋📎📎🖍📎🖋📎✂️✏️📎✒️📎✒️🔏📏🔍📎📎✏️📏📝✏️📏🔎🔏🔖🧮🔏📎🔎🔏🔎📏🔗✂️🔎🔏📎✂️🔎🔏📎🔎🔏📏🔏✂️📐🔏
One of the rare Dxd fics that doesn't come across as a retread of canon. Also the mc does not go overboard with summons or harem so it is fairly easy to keep track of all the characters.
Great ending, somehow you managed to get the story to produce a feeling of a flame that would continue burning forever with love and affection. You are a masterful writer and I look forward to getting to feel that in your next books. The ending is amazing!!! How do you do that!?!??
It was a great story, very original and fun way to make it a harem story and not be OP from the start. It was quite fun reading it and waiting for new updates. I hope you will make something similar good later on.
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hah it's very sad where I like the story but I hate the MC for being very passive, Why not make the character have more backbones. why should he make territory for his family with such difficulty just to be a place of conflict by outsiders. hahh want to continue reading but I'm really annoyed with the MC. Ah never mind.
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Hei author can make the shinto join the vongola-celtic alliance not the nordic-there faction alliance plzzz plzzz do not make the shinto join the nordic-there faction alliance plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
why is there no tag any theme if the story like kingdom building to the anime that cross over from and harem here the tag that you could put -reborn -DxD -harry potter -fate -WORM -Crossover
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---------------------------------------------------------------- Ok it get better mc got the laydeh at least not 10ch of mc fuc his harem... lucky that doesnt appear... at least mc dont fuc loli and mc got mafia big boss vibe 😂
Overall an interesting work with one major issue. The only issue is that the Author does not know how to use tenses. In other words, the author doesn't know to add "ed" to the end of verbs describing past events, or add "s" to the end of words that are plural. Overall an issue that could easily be fixed just by pasting the story into word.
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Hope that this story is not drop recently i finish watching the Anime hitman reborn and i saw this fan fic [img=update][img=update] i am so Lucky. And author this is the first time i wrote a review hehehe sorry for My English
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the story is meh at most, average nothing special, this story isn't that good but it isn't that bad either. mc did make use & exploit his power to his best unlike most retard mc, he also didn't really try manipulate his subordinate but again some people may not enjoy the crappy shounen nakama power writing style. author love to write some arrogant young master dialogue in irder to pad the word & sometime some of his opponent manage to escape from him but it doesn't so frequently happen to the point it become annoying. with some bits of kingdom building & crappy child-like plan of these Devil is boring thus I advise you to read this story with mentality of nothing else to do so I read this story.
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I don't know what to say but this is a great story,........................................................................................................ ............... ..... ................................. .............
Mengecawakan 😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐😐
is it possible for small snippets/ a sequel where they visit the worlds where the companions are summoned frm? [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
good harem but it needs stability, could write and release once a week or something like that would maintain some stability and could have several chapters saved
The grammar is truly atrocious and it's not a very imaginative story. Mostly just the grammar though.
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loved how it's didn't revolve around the main DXD cast and while still a harem it was limited in a way that was appropriate[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Writing Quality: Errors are few and none are jarring enough to break immersion. Stability Of Updates: Updates occurred fairly frequently, but without a set schedule, the time between updates becoming more spread out as the story progressed. Story Development: Was fairly decent, though a little narrow. Could have used some exposition occasionally. Character Design: Fairly good, but also fairly one-dimensional due to locking people into flame stereotypes which removed any uniqueness. More development would have been nice. World Background: This was supposed to be a massive crossover world, but turned into DxD with irrelevant HP world and four chapters where Bloodbourne made a brief appearance but affected nothing where only DxD plot mattered. That being said, A lot was written about Romania which in the original series was mostly irrelevant other than the fact that Valerie and Gasper came from there. So all in all, a little good - a little bad. Overall: Fairly good, but not multi-read good. Which considering the amount of horrible writing i've seen on this site, means this is in the top 10th percentile.
The ending was great, when is season 2 coming put? 🖋🖍📎🖋🔖🖋📎📎🖍📎🖋📎✂️✏️📎✒️📎✒️🔏📏🔍📎📎✏️📏📝✏️📏🔎🔏🔖🧮🔏📎🔎🔏🔎📏🔗✂️🔎🔏📎✂️🔎🔏📎🔎🔏📏🔏✂️📐🔏
One of the rare Dxd fics that doesn't come across as a retread of canon. Also the mc does not go overboard with summons or harem so it is fairly easy to keep track of all the characters.
Great ending, somehow you managed to get the story to produce a feeling of a flame that would continue burning forever with love and affection. You are a masterful writer and I look forward to getting to feel that in your next books. The ending is amazing!!! How do you do that!?!??
It was a great story, very original and fun way to make it a harem story and not be OP from the start. It was quite fun reading it and waiting for new updates. I hope you will make something similar good later on.
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hah it's very sad where I like the story but I hate the MC for being very passive, Why not make the character have more backbones. why should he make territory for his family with such difficulty just to be a place of conflict by outsiders. hahh want to continue reading but I'm really annoyed with the MC. Ah never mind.
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Hei author can make the shinto join the vongola-celtic alliance not the nordic-there faction alliance plzzz plzzz do not make the shinto join the nordic-there faction alliance plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
why is there no tag any theme if the story like kingdom building to the anime that cross over from and harem here the tag that you could put -reborn -DxD -harry potter -fate -WORM -Crossover
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ ---------------------------------------------------------------- Ok it get better mc got the laydeh at least not 10ch of mc fuc his harem... lucky that doesnt appear... at least mc dont fuc loli and mc got mafia big boss vibe 😂
Overall an interesting work with one major issue. The only issue is that the Author does not know how to use tenses. In other words, the author doesn't know to add "ed" to the end of verbs describing past events, or add "s" to the end of words that are plural. Overall an issue that could easily be fixed just by pasting the story into word.
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Hope that this story is not drop recently i finish watching the Anime hitman reborn and i saw this fan fic [img=update][img=update] i am so Lucky. And author this is the first time i wrote a review hehehe sorry for My English
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the story is meh at most, average nothing special, this story isn't that good but it isn't that bad either. mc did make use & exploit his power to his best unlike most retard mc, he also didn't really try manipulate his subordinate but again some people may not enjoy the crappy shounen nakama power writing style. author love to write some arrogant young master dialogue in irder to pad the word & sometime some of his opponent manage to escape from him but it doesn't so frequently happen to the point it become annoying. with some bits of kingdom building & crappy child-like plan of these Devil is boring thus I advise you to read this story with mentality of nothing else to do so I read this story.
Moarmoarm moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moarmoarm moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar moar moarmoarm moar
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a rare fanfic where the mc is not the strongest or the most op