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one of the best thing about this fanfic is MC always think before doing something, what we get is smart and cunning MC. i was hoping MC using bee as a summoned creature because bee is the most useful insect especially their honey sage bee create (like toad oil that honestly useless because I don't seem to see naruto use that to cook with that oil), but fish also have potential because how many treasure he can get from sea where ninja just focus on land!
I simply love this fanfic it’s everything I was looking for in a self insert novel pragmatic, grounded, survival oriented by staying just beneath the lamp post. (It’s darkest under the lamppost).
A good harem story comprising of kaguya, mei, tsunade and anko. The plot has no procastination points and the MC is rational throughout looking for his own answers. Ending was a little abrupt but in a way it was the culmination of all the plans MC had made. MC is basically a scientist studying chakra from the basics, using cloning and genetics. He creates his own sage mode as well. The start seems slow due to his research progressing after which the plot accelerates gradually.
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Es una historia muy buena y divertida para un rato sin embargo el hecho de que todo se solucione tan rápido la vuelve un poco repetitiva y aburrida tal vez si se hubieran detallado algunos momentos con mayor emoción hubiera sido más divertido.
Good......... Good......... Very Good...... Good.............. Good.............. .......... ........... ...................... .......................
the story i great just like author's other stories..but the romance part was bad for me ...maybe i dont understand romance..but all the women were just offering themselves to the mc..
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you know it's good when the only thing you dislike about the fic is that it's too short
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honestly the first time I've seen a fanfic end well without the author dragging it into the ground.
Good story, worth the read. its very high phased story telling with just the right amount of speed with a bit of pseudo science that seems realistic. definitely worth a try if you want some Quik good Naruto fanfic to fix your itch.
A very good read good story, good reasoning for Mizuki power and over all a satisfying story with a satisfying end and the romance was something really well managed and the relationships between characters was smooth and great.
okey mi reseña ahora que se terminó: -la calidad de la escritura, estuvo bastante bien, hay cosas que mejorar como la forma en que explicaba y argumentaba la razón de su forma de actuar, pero nada del otro mundo. -la estabilidad de las actualizaciones, bueno aqui si hubo mucho que desear pero ahora que termino no me voy a quejar solo por eso. -desarrollo de la historia, fue corto pero interesante, aunque hay para extender, pero si lo hace ya no sería lo mismo. -diseño de personajes, los personajes no se exploraron muy a profundidad pero lo que se explicó y mostro estuvo bien estructurado en su mayor parte, excepto el trasfondo y la historia pasada del MC. -antecedentes mundiales, no se usó muy a profundidad sobre el mundo shinobi pero lo que se uso estuvo bien y fue coherente.
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Great story. Love the idea and the author did a great job with it. MC seems grounded, smart, slightly cunning, and really overpowered. My only issues are firstly, that the MC seems a bit dense sometimes, reminding me of harem protagonists (despite the author stating he would make the relationships as realistic as possible). My second issue is that the MC, despite being a supposedly logically driven scientist, is a bit of a simp for Kaguya Otsutsuki. This makes no logical sense according to all the information given but whatever, I don't really care (pairings never mattered to me whether harem, single girl, or no romance at all). My final issue (which isn't much of an issue and more of a warning) is that the MC became extremely overpowered really quickly. Some people (including myself) like this but others like a slow power development (which truthfully makes a better story but meh) so I thought I would put this here as a warning.
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I'm 25 chapters in and I can without a shadow of a doubt say this is outstanding work Author-san... What I'm reading is the writing of a grown person with a shred of wisdom and it is reflected perfectly in this Fic. I just hope you maintain this level of consistency throughout the fic and do away with any thoughts of foolishness that writers tend to show out of nowhere and ruin a perfectly good work. Cheers to you big man
Just love how he breaks down nin and senjustsu to our world's parameters by backing it up with scientific evidence. It is a not story about a reincarnate spamming powerful jutsus but an intellectual journey of the mc uncovering the mysteries of the shinobi world with scientific methods. Pure genius.
Was going great until he suddenly developed a Kaguya obsession, sorry but it makes no sense, especially after the buildup with Anko.
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This is the best Naruto FanFic I have ever read, everything is perfectly reasonable and the author worked out the plotholes of the original very well with his own ideas. I personally very much like the science aspect of the story, compared to the normal mythical or system aspects with loopholes, it is very refreshing and that we got to know a lot more about the Mc in the last chapters. I hope this story will continue and wish the author the best.
from a story of a man who is isekai'd to naruto and became its first antagonist to becoming a story of derange fellow who has obsession with an alien that planned on sacrificing humanity to form an army of zetsu and known for betrayal to her own clan. the whole thing is about an obsessed man's journey into chasing an alien's skirt. the whole story went down turn with just 'kaguya is the right waifu' plot alone and the romance chapters of the mc , anko, tsunade, and mei doesn't help either like they are literally offering themselves to the mc and yet the mc did not agree or disagree with them just letting them sink or float on thier fantasy that there is a chance for them and the mc to be together. the whole thing is a messed up romance that just so happens to be in naruto. unless the author can give an acceptable reason for the mc a scientist mc that is well verse in psychology had an unreasonable obsession with kaguya a 2d manga and anime character whom is just 2nd character and partial main villainess or end boss. I can't and I won't read this for the time being unless he fix the story.
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Beautiful,the mc's actions really affect how the story goes, each of his actions leads to chains of events and consequences that change the plot amazing.
Buen desarrollo de personaje, unas justificaciones un poco sacadas de la manga pero bien implementadas, pero me encantó el personaje principal aunque tengo que admitir que la forma en la que el consiguió el modo sabio fue un poco extraña bien sacado de la manga como dije anteriormente fue un aire fresco para estas historias de Naruto, son muy pocas en las historias qué siguen el lado científico en vez de lado místico? Del chakra
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I really like both your fanfics keep up the great work! just needs more romance in both they can technically have a harem especially mizuki
okay so where do I start already at chap 15 or so and can say I'm loving it. Growing with the character can see all changes and effect he will and can have in the world of Naruto. Wonder who is better him or orochimaru
Electric Sage mode = Deus Ex Machina hacks on! A bit disappointed that no radiation or "hulk" sage mode was achieved, dude got his sage mode from normal lighting and science, barely using stuff from the narutoverse science and more our science, I expected the mc to try to make a serum or use some type of radiation. I mainly say that because on the narutoverse there is the Star chakra, that's basically ninjas using Plutonium and Uranium to generate chakra, since they were all dying of cancer, it became a "forbidden technique" with no clear explanation of why they were getting cancer, not to mention that the ninjas don't even know what radiation is! They call it "Mysterious Peacock Method" For Gods sake! Pretty cool what you did with the Summoning beast's lore, on cannon the toads did make some type of "sealing healing paper thing" that haguromo slaps on his brother after killing him to resurrect him, that "thing" is supposed to be an "Ancient" treasure of the toads, the more I read your fic, the more I start to believe that the toads manipulated haguromo into killing his mother instead of trying to heal her unstable mental state.
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At this point just add the harem tag ………………………………………………………,,,,,,,.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,…………………………………………………….…………………………………………………………
wq-3 theres much to improve on here, its also a bit annoying to read, the author uses " hello " instead of "hello", i cant really think of more of the top of my head but this is a pretty big deal breaker imo. sou-5 about a ch a day i think sd-3- too much romance and plotting, mc is a sage theres no real need to plot too hard, the start was nice tho. cd-4- its mizuki but better looking, i dont really like the weapons tho. wb-5- its naruto
The novel is very good, nothing to criticize in the 60 chapters that I read, for what you want most, do not let this story die, the truth is, I think it is one of the best Naruto fanfics that I remember
Очень неплохо пока... хочется конечно большего, буду ждать с нетерпением!!! Поэтому надеюсь что новые главы будут появляться быстро и в больших количествах!
Story will be revolving around a genius man finding himself in the world of fiction, making sense of everything nonsensical with hard science. Story itself has multiple plot threads where reading between lines would be a helpful skill to have. Enjoy!
one of the best thing about this fanfic is MC always think before doing something, what we get is smart and cunning MC. i was hoping MC using bee as a summoned creature because bee is the most useful insect especially their honey sage bee create (like toad oil that honestly useless because I don't seem to see naruto use that to cook with that oil), but fish also have potential because how many treasure he can get from sea where ninja just focus on land!
I simply love this fanfic it’s everything I was looking for in a self insert novel pragmatic, grounded, survival oriented by staying just beneath the lamp post. (It’s darkest under the lamppost).
A good harem story comprising of kaguya, mei, tsunade and anko. The plot has no procastination points and the MC is rational throughout looking for his own answers. Ending was a little abrupt but in a way it was the culmination of all the plans MC had made. MC is basically a scientist studying chakra from the basics, using cloning and genetics. He creates his own sage mode as well. The start seems slow due to his research progressing after which the plot accelerates gradually.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Es una historia muy buena y divertida para un rato sin embargo el hecho de que todo se solucione tan rápido la vuelve un poco repetitiva y aburrida tal vez si se hubieran detallado algunos momentos con mayor emoción hubiera sido más divertido.
Good......... Good......... Very Good...... Good.............. Good.............. .......... ........... ...................... .......................
the story i great just like author's other stories..but the romance part was bad for me ...maybe i dont understand romance..but all the women were just offering themselves to the mc..
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you know it's good when the only thing you dislike about the fic is that it's too short
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more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more
honestly the first time I've seen a fanfic end well without the author dragging it into the ground.
Good story, worth the read. its very high phased story telling with just the right amount of speed with a bit of pseudo science that seems realistic. definitely worth a try if you want some Quik good Naruto fanfic to fix your itch.
A very good read good story, good reasoning for Mizuki power and over all a satisfying story with a satisfying end and the romance was something really well managed and the relationships between characters was smooth and great.
okey mi reseña ahora que se terminó: -la calidad de la escritura, estuvo bastante bien, hay cosas que mejorar como la forma en que explicaba y argumentaba la razón de su forma de actuar, pero nada del otro mundo. -la estabilidad de las actualizaciones, bueno aqui si hubo mucho que desear pero ahora que termino no me voy a quejar solo por eso. -desarrollo de la historia, fue corto pero interesante, aunque hay para extender, pero si lo hace ya no sería lo mismo. -diseño de personajes, los personajes no se exploraron muy a profundidad pero lo que se explicó y mostro estuvo bien estructurado en su mayor parte, excepto el trasfondo y la historia pasada del MC. -antecedentes mundiales, no se usó muy a profundidad sobre el mundo shinobi pero lo que se uso estuvo bien y fue coherente.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Great story. Love the idea and the author did a great job with it. MC seems grounded, smart, slightly cunning, and really overpowered. My only issues are firstly, that the MC seems a bit dense sometimes, reminding me of harem protagonists (despite the author stating he would make the relationships as realistic as possible). My second issue is that the MC, despite being a supposedly logically driven scientist, is a bit of a simp for Kaguya Otsutsuki. This makes no logical sense according to all the information given but whatever, I don't really care (pairings never mattered to me whether harem, single girl, or no romance at all). My final issue (which isn't much of an issue and more of a warning) is that the MC became extremely overpowered really quickly. Some people (including myself) like this but others like a slow power development (which truthfully makes a better story but meh) so I thought I would put this here as a warning.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ I'm 25 chapters in and I can without a shadow of a doubt say this is outstanding work Author-san... What I'm reading is the writing of a grown person with a shred of wisdom and it is reflected perfectly in this Fic. I just hope you maintain this level of consistency throughout the fic and do away with any thoughts of foolishness that writers tend to show out of nowhere and ruin a perfectly good work. Cheers to you big man
Just love how he breaks down nin and senjustsu to our world's parameters by backing it up with scientific evidence. It is a not story about a reincarnate spamming powerful jutsus but an intellectual journey of the mc uncovering the mysteries of the shinobi world with scientific methods. Pure genius.
Was going great until he suddenly developed a Kaguya obsession, sorry but it makes no sense, especially after the buildup with Anko.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ This is the best Naruto FanFic I have ever read, everything is perfectly reasonable and the author worked out the plotholes of the original very well with his own ideas. I personally very much like the science aspect of the story, compared to the normal mythical or system aspects with loopholes, it is very refreshing and that we got to know a lot more about the Mc in the last chapters. I hope this story will continue and wish the author the best.
from a story of a man who is isekai'd to naruto and became its first antagonist to becoming a story of derange fellow who has obsession with an alien that planned on sacrificing humanity to form an army of zetsu and known for betrayal to her own clan. the whole thing is about an obsessed man's journey into chasing an alien's skirt. the whole story went down turn with just 'kaguya is the right waifu' plot alone and the romance chapters of the mc , anko, tsunade, and mei doesn't help either like they are literally offering themselves to the mc and yet the mc did not agree or disagree with them just letting them sink or float on thier fantasy that there is a chance for them and the mc to be together. the whole thing is a messed up romance that just so happens to be in naruto. unless the author can give an acceptable reason for the mc a scientist mc that is well verse in psychology had an unreasonable obsession with kaguya a 2d manga and anime character whom is just 2nd character and partial main villainess or end boss. I can't and I won't read this for the time being unless he fix the story.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Beautiful,the mc's actions really affect how the story goes, each of his actions leads to chains of events and consequences that change the plot amazing.
Buen desarrollo de personaje, unas justificaciones un poco sacadas de la manga pero bien implementadas, pero me encantó el personaje principal aunque tengo que admitir que la forma en la que el consiguió el modo sabio fue un poco extraña bien sacado de la manga como dije anteriormente fue un aire fresco para estas historias de Naruto, son muy pocas en las historias qué siguen el lado científico en vez de lado místico? Del chakra
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ I really like both your fanfics keep up the great work! just needs more romance in both they can technically have a harem especially mizuki
okay so where do I start already at chap 15 or so and can say I'm loving it. Growing with the character can see all changes and effect he will and can have in the world of Naruto. Wonder who is better him or orochimaru
Electric Sage mode = Deus Ex Machina hacks on! A bit disappointed that no radiation or "hulk" sage mode was achieved, dude got his sage mode from normal lighting and science, barely using stuff from the narutoverse science and more our science, I expected the mc to try to make a serum or use some type of radiation. I mainly say that because on the narutoverse there is the Star chakra, that's basically ninjas using Plutonium and Uranium to generate chakra, since they were all dying of cancer, it became a "forbidden technique" with no clear explanation of why they were getting cancer, not to mention that the ninjas don't even know what radiation is! They call it "Mysterious Peacock Method" For Gods sake! Pretty cool what you did with the Summoning beast's lore, on cannon the toads did make some type of "sealing healing paper thing" that haguromo slaps on his brother after killing him to resurrect him, that "thing" is supposed to be an "Ancient" treasure of the toads, the more I read your fic, the more I start to believe that the toads manipulated haguromo into killing his mother instead of trying to heal her unstable mental state.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ At this point just add the harem tag ………………………………………………………,,,,,,,.,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,…………………………………………………….…………………………………………………………
wq-3 theres much to improve on here, its also a bit annoying to read, the author uses " hello " instead of "hello", i cant really think of more of the top of my head but this is a pretty big deal breaker imo. sou-5 about a ch a day i think sd-3- too much romance and plotting, mc is a sage theres no real need to plot too hard, the start was nice tho. cd-4- its mizuki but better looking, i dont really like the weapons tho. wb-5- its naruto
The novel is very good, nothing to criticize in the 60 chapters that I read, for what you want most, do not let this story die, the truth is, I think it is one of the best Naruto fanfics that I remember
Очень неплохо пока... хочется конечно большего, буду ждать с нетерпением!!! Поэтому надеюсь что новые главы будут появляться быстро и в больших количествах!
Story will be revolving around a genius man finding himself in the world of fiction, making sense of everything nonsensical with hard science. Story itself has multiple plot threads where reading between lines would be a helpful skill to have. Enjoy!