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เขียนรีวิว5 stars just because the author was kind enough to let us know it has been dropped.If only others were so kind.
So I just realized this was dropped but Im not here to comment about that(though i was a bit disappointed) Im here to comment on what my rating about it so far, the story was good, there is no climax thing or anything exciting but as a read it was good and i enjoyed my time here. And i read some comments down there saying author can't take criticism and she/he shouldn't just post it if she/he don't like to be criticized but here is my opinion to that. I understand not many may like a particular story and often rate it bad but i think what is irritating is that people rate it bad then comment sh** that are look just like petty and narrow minded or even st****, they dont read the Authors previous notice on how its going to be like and point out the same questions and criticize things that they should know the answer for if they just read it and understand. Also not every human is has big patience to things just as how some readers are irritable dont expect all writers to have big patience to 'insults'.
It's been 11 or 10 months where is the revamb story please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์There are lots of mistakes in this story like y6e6t87rudjcchgjry9spcyugggi and gioto6oyjvjfchlztklgfkkfidhhdhehdfjkvlbbvkvkbklghlgkjgorwei but still that was amazing
i dont have a problem with the perks he received but i hate the constant age mentions that arent realistic and make me want to punch someone with the stupidity of it all. like seriously its not going to happen that he starts doing all that shot at his age and then joining anbu. I hate anbu plots.
It's a nyc piece.especially the mc.but I felt rushing at the development of mc. Although I felt some disturbance at the pace the mc becomes strong as the first hokage but it feels nyc.but the thing that bothered me is that *the thunder God jutsu...as it needs talent space elements....I just feel a little bit wrong...but I am really looking frwd to the latest chapters
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A******************w. I just found this story and its got so much potential. A swordmaster in Naruto would be an awesome read. please don’t drop it
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์bro where the hell have you just disappeared to one day you leave the martial arts novel saying your making a naruto one we say ok we read it its good suddenly you say your doing a marvel one we are ok with that too as long as we got something but now you completely disappear without even telling us if your dropping or anything
Plot timeline is wrong and it's very forced............................ ...... .. . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . .. . . . .
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์I tried, I really tried but there’s just too many plot hole, too many inconsistencies, too many illogical story development. The story idea itself is good really.. Read at your own risk.
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Its an intresting story but the progression feels kind of forced. I mean joing anbu at what 8/9 years old and the hokage letting that happen. Im sorry i just dont see that happening until 14 or graduating the academy early. Like itachi and becoming the youngest to join anbu
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Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
I put four star for now while waiting to see more. This story has the potential to become something awesome if the author don’t screw up. please, please, don’t screw up. ————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
keep up the good work man and dont give up on the series, the way you got to test teamwork was really creative and original for that i applaud you. it would be nice if the timeline is a bit slowed down but not by much and unless they are critical plot development points, make it a little bit au like dont include the bridge mission. Then it looks like your SI is a bystander for the series which is stupid as he would have to accept that he would result in a butterfly effect. Maybe have a love interest with mei terumi and make them somewhat get together through use of flashbacks and such.maybe eliminate danzo during orichimaru's raid.
Please continue the world building is solid cause you dont really need to expand it, character wise the setup is kind of okay hope you will continue writing cause its a good naruto fanfic
love this so far and the fact that he hasn't become op, questions I have r is he going to only have the fire style as while it works in the demon slayer world in the naruto world he needs more power so maybe he learns samurai skills and wind style what will enchant his fire style. maybe a bloodline ability he gains is the healing of the demons
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5 stars just because the author was kind enough to let us know it has been dropped.If only others were so kind.
So I just realized this was dropped but Im not here to comment about that(though i was a bit disappointed) Im here to comment on what my rating about it so far, the story was good, there is no climax thing or anything exciting but as a read it was good and i enjoyed my time here. And i read some comments down there saying author can't take criticism and she/he shouldn't just post it if she/he don't like to be criticized but here is my opinion to that. I understand not many may like a particular story and often rate it bad but i think what is irritating is that people rate it bad then comment sh** that are look just like petty and narrow minded or even st****, they dont read the Authors previous notice on how its going to be like and point out the same questions and criticize things that they should know the answer for if they just read it and understand. Also not every human is has big patience to things just as how some readers are irritable dont expect all writers to have big patience to 'insults'.
It's been 11 or 10 months where is the revamb story please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์There are lots of mistakes in this story like y6e6t87rudjcchgjry9spcyugggi and gioto6oyjvjfchlztklgfkkfidhhdhehdfjkvlbbvkvkbklghlgkjgorwei but still that was amazing
i dont have a problem with the perks he received but i hate the constant age mentions that arent realistic and make me want to punch someone with the stupidity of it all. like seriously its not going to happen that he starts doing all that shot at his age and then joining anbu. I hate anbu plots.
It's a nyc piece.especially the mc.but I felt rushing at the development of mc. Although I felt some disturbance at the pace the mc becomes strong as the first hokage but it feels nyc.but the thing that bothered me is that *the thunder God jutsu...as it needs talent space elements....I just feel a little bit wrong...but I am really looking frwd to the latest chapters
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A******************w. I just found this story and its got so much potential. A swordmaster in Naruto would be an awesome read. please don’t drop it
oop**............................................................................................................... ... ....... . . . . .. . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . .. . . . . ..
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์bro where the hell have you just disappeared to one day you leave the martial arts novel saying your making a naruto one we say ok we read it its good suddenly you say your doing a marvel one we are ok with that too as long as we got something but now you completely disappear without even telling us if your dropping or anything
Plot timeline is wrong and it's very forced............................ ...... .. . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . . .. . . . .
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์I tried, I really tried but there’s just too many plot hole, too many inconsistencies, too many illogical story development. The story idea itself is good really.. Read at your own risk.
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Its an intresting story but the progression feels kind of forced. I mean joing anbu at what 8/9 years old and the hokage letting that happen. Im sorry i just dont see that happening until 14 or graduating the academy early. Like itachi and becoming the youngest to join anbu
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Damn this is a masterpiece and definitely needs to be read. And incredible job Author-san and keep up the amazing job you've done so far 😊👍
I put four star for now while waiting to see more. This story has the potential to become something awesome if the author don’t screw up. please, please, don’t screw up. ————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
keep up the good work man and dont give up on the series, the way you got to test teamwork was really creative and original for that i applaud you. it would be nice if the timeline is a bit slowed down but not by much and unless they are critical plot development points, make it a little bit au like dont include the bridge mission. Then it looks like your SI is a bystander for the series which is stupid as he would have to accept that he would result in a butterfly effect. Maybe have a love interest with mei terumi and make them somewhat get together through use of flashbacks and such.maybe eliminate danzo during orichimaru's raid.
Please continue the world building is solid cause you dont really need to expand it, character wise the setup is kind of okay hope you will continue writing cause its a good naruto fanfic
love this so far and the fact that he hasn't become op, questions I have r is he going to only have the fire style as while it works in the demon slayer world in the naruto world he needs more power so maybe he learns samurai skills and wind style what will enchant his fire style. maybe a bloodline ability he gains is the healing of the demons
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