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3.71
- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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He knew he was in Doulou Dalu story and remember Ning Rongrong but how could he doesn't remember other characters name? He also pretty rude and violence against Oscar... What a siscon.
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A gramática é horripilante na maioria dos capítulos. A história possui caminhos desconexos que são totalmente desnecessários. O mc fica trocando a cor dos anéis... que poha é esta? Sério? Virou um programa de pintura? Não demais, tirando as habilidades e acréscimos (que estragam a história), até que da para ler. Não é lá aquelas coisas que explodem sua imaginação. Da para aturar alguns capítulos, mas logo a leitura fica maçante.
The mc is from modern earth who has readed a lot of Mangas, light novel and fanfic -He likes Douluo dalo the most especially the first season as he does not like the mech era - his words not mine He dies and boom reincarnated as a baby He meets his mother who has pink hair a grampa bone and grampa sword A lot of clues right? especially since he liked soul land right? NO He acts like a spoiled little girl calling his parents mama and papa all the time Even Tang san did not call his father Tang Hao papa ( else....😵💫💥🔨) All In all I think 2 stars is too much for such a fanfic All these ppl who gave 5 stars are either hired or have no taste.
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The dude is supposed to know that his in soul land and then just forgets and all we get from the author is that it will be explained later....................
This is a good fanfic, I'm looking forward to the development of the story, and I hope the storyline will be more interesting in the future............ ........................I look forward to the continuation
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Cara penulisan yang buruk dan jalan cerita yang buruk. Harap diperbaiki lagi agar pembaca dapat menghayati watak tersebut dan jangn menggunakan kata-kata rumahan seperti papa,rasa geli 🙄
MC becomes a retard early on and loses memory for no reason and keeps doing mental gymnastics to create plotholes and save himself by just having different personality control the body. it doesn't make sense for a personality from old and fragmented memories to know more about his current body and control it better than the main personality.
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starting was great than in mid it get little bored but than after returning to sword training (of collecting swords fragments) it gets interesting. It's one of the best douluo dalu story that focus on swords and don't have system and its "complete" . Do give a try to the story it might not be binge read story but it's great a story . Thanks for the writing!!
I was enjoying the novel despite all the grammar errors,mess of thoughts and sentences,i also liked how the author chosed a different path for mc than shrek,but then mayi was introducted and 2 chapters later she was already clingy and annoying as hell,it was just too sudden and i just got more confused.when her background was revealed only made this seems more stupidy and unecessary(Maybe i should start throwing oreo around and see if someone will fall for me),Mc also seemed to have no special trait except brain damage,even when he grows up he still acts like a child. Some side characters except for having the same name as the original series dont act like themselves at all. I got to vol 3 and then dropped,so my rating is based on what i experienced
just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it.
well-crafted story, the ending was good but it could show a little bit of them in the kingdom of the gods it would be interesting .
MC is seriously nerfed with no proper powers is too weak and can't win again others of his same level if they are slightly genius and till now all his wins are against lower level than himself except one at his childhood. Even that guy is also become so strong now that MC won't even last few minutes against him. As for his spirits boths are spirit tools only helping debuffing others and add buffs to him self and other one is food spirit. In my although both of them are good, they are both trash in combat. And when MC becomes rank 50 he is even more nerfed as author makes a situation where MC is unable to go to heaven dou forest to kill powerful beast to get a powerful ring ability and ends up with a trash ability which cannot even harm rank 40 people. Overall MC is too weak and trash.
No voy a mentir diciendo que fue una de los mejores fan fictions de Douluo Dalu ya que varias veces me dieron ganas de botarla y no seguir leyendo por varias razones como la doble personalidad, el infantilismo e ingenuidad extrema así como el Mc "reencarnado" el cuál supuestamente se sabía toda la secuela de Douluo Dalu pero nunca se hizo uso del conocimiento por "perder la memoria". Pero aún así perseveré leyendo hasta terminar esta obra y puedo destacar dos cosas, siendo la primera que a pesar de muchas críticas que recibió el autor por los motivos que mencioné antes pero con comentarios demasiado negativos y un poco tóxicos aún así siguió con la novela hasta darle un final, que es extremadamente raro por no decir que uno de los pocos fan fictions de Douluo Dalu que esté más avanzado en la historia después de la competencia de universidades por no decir una de las pocas historias que tiene un final. La segunda razón sería que se notó que a pesar de que la obra comenzó como entretenimiento (o así vi los motivos del autor al principio) y comenzó a ganar seriedad la obra mientras que el autor comenzó a mejorar el estilo de escritura así como el desarrollo de la historia, así como la calidad de esta.
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I truly like how you develop the characters and their background. All the spirit skills were great but I would have like to know what was his 9th spirit ring in his sword. I would have also love that there were more moments with Rongrong and to know what spirit does Ning Hui got. Also I would like to have a chapter about Bai in the divine realm. And the most important of all..... WHERE IS THE CHAPTER OF S3X WITH QIAN RENXUE!?!?!?!?!?
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Good Fanfic ITS............................................. EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem.
At first the story is medium 👌, but after reading into it you'll find out that it's a pretty amazing novel, And thanks for dropping it halfway, This is the only Douluo Dalu I've ever seen that was completed
Yo!!!! When will you start update new chapters??????? If you update new chapters how many chapters will it be or you will update all chapters in one go????😅😅😅😅😅😊😊😊😊😊😊
After this novel will you publish new or not ??????????? ?????????? If you releases new one i am looking forward to it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I start reading, a question before I start, is this harem? or just have a pairing? . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
how to say, honestly I do not like it, multiple personalities, naive, and memory loss are all collected................................ . ....................................................
Here's the author doing a review of this already finished novel. I started writing this novel as my first time truly writing in English to improve it. The grammar and phrase construction is lacking at first, but as the novel advances, I improved in it, Grammarly was a great help. For the Stability of the updates, I finished writing 256 chapters after 10 months, almost a chapter for day as average. Is already finished so there's nothing much to say. About the story, at first it start with a lax and infantil writing, with a very crude English. The story being written day by day without, always changing what I had thought. This causes some plot holes over the novel that I closed maybe a little forcefully over the novel. What most people complained was about the loss of memory. Yes, there was and in chapter forty-something is explained the why. Read it thinking that he has no memories of the novel after his first ring. People also complained about his style that was control-defense, but why? With a team is a good style, being able to control the team, letting the others finish them. Then as the story advances, entering more the solo player mode, his style changes. Summarizing, I liked to write this story even facing against the hate. It starts a little poor and I am not too proud of it, only considering it as the improvement of the later parts. But, I am proud of the end, really liking how it finished. If you like OP characters that goes facepalming everyone, because it didn't matter anything because they are OP and untouchable, this isn't your novel. He grows stronger than his age, faving greater enemies but always with that might lose.
He knew he was in Doulou Dalu story and remember Ning Rongrong but how could he doesn't remember other characters name? He also pretty rude and violence against Oscar... What a siscon.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ A gramática é horripilante na maioria dos capítulos. A história possui caminhos desconexos que são totalmente desnecessários. O mc fica trocando a cor dos anéis... que poha é esta? Sério? Virou um programa de pintura? Não demais, tirando as habilidades e acréscimos (que estragam a história), até que da para ler. Não é lá aquelas coisas que explodem sua imaginação. Da para aturar alguns capítulos, mas logo a leitura fica maçante.
The mc is from modern earth who has readed a lot of Mangas, light novel and fanfic -He likes Douluo dalo the most especially the first season as he does not like the mech era - his words not mine He dies and boom reincarnated as a baby He meets his mother who has pink hair a grampa bone and grampa sword A lot of clues right? especially since he liked soul land right? NO He acts like a spoiled little girl calling his parents mama and papa all the time Even Tang san did not call his father Tang Hao papa ( else....😵💫💥🔨) All In all I think 2 stars is too much for such a fanfic All these ppl who gave 5 stars are either hired or have no taste.
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The dude is supposed to know that his in soul land and then just forgets and all we get from the author is that it will be explained later....................
This is a good fanfic, I'm looking forward to the development of the story, and I hope the storyline will be more interesting in the future............ ........................I look forward to the continuation
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Cara penulisan yang buruk dan jalan cerita yang buruk. Harap diperbaiki lagi agar pembaca dapat menghayati watak tersebut dan jangn menggunakan kata-kata rumahan seperti papa,rasa geli 🙄
MC becomes a retard early on and loses memory for no reason and keeps doing mental gymnastics to create plotholes and save himself by just having different personality control the body. it doesn't make sense for a personality from old and fragmented memories to know more about his current body and control it better than the main personality.
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ starting was great than in mid it get little bored but than after returning to sword training (of collecting swords fragments) it gets interesting. It's one of the best douluo dalu story that focus on swords and don't have system and its "complete" . Do give a try to the story it might not be binge read story but it's great a story . Thanks for the writing!!
I was enjoying the novel despite all the grammar errors,mess of thoughts and sentences,i also liked how the author chosed a different path for mc than shrek,but then mayi was introducted and 2 chapters later she was already clingy and annoying as hell,it was just too sudden and i just got more confused.when her background was revealed only made this seems more stupidy and unecessary(Maybe i should start throwing oreo around and see if someone will fall for me),Mc also seemed to have no special trait except brain damage,even when he grows up he still acts like a child. Some side characters except for having the same name as the original series dont act like themselves at all. I got to vol 3 and then dropped,so my rating is based on what i experienced
just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it. just wanted to say please rewrite it.
well-crafted story, the ending was good but it could show a little bit of them in the kingdom of the gods it would be interesting .
MC is seriously nerfed with no proper powers is too weak and can't win again others of his same level if they are slightly genius and till now all his wins are against lower level than himself except one at his childhood. Even that guy is also become so strong now that MC won't even last few minutes against him. As for his spirits boths are spirit tools only helping debuffing others and add buffs to him self and other one is food spirit. In my although both of them are good, they are both trash in combat. And when MC becomes rank 50 he is even more nerfed as author makes a situation where MC is unable to go to heaven dou forest to kill powerful beast to get a powerful ring ability and ends up with a trash ability which cannot even harm rank 40 people. Overall MC is too weak and trash.
No voy a mentir diciendo que fue una de los mejores fan fictions de Douluo Dalu ya que varias veces me dieron ganas de botarla y no seguir leyendo por varias razones como la doble personalidad, el infantilismo e ingenuidad extrema así como el Mc "reencarnado" el cuál supuestamente se sabía toda la secuela de Douluo Dalu pero nunca se hizo uso del conocimiento por "perder la memoria". Pero aún así perseveré leyendo hasta terminar esta obra y puedo destacar dos cosas, siendo la primera que a pesar de muchas críticas que recibió el autor por los motivos que mencioné antes pero con comentarios demasiado negativos y un poco tóxicos aún así siguió con la novela hasta darle un final, que es extremadamente raro por no decir que uno de los pocos fan fictions de Douluo Dalu que esté más avanzado en la historia después de la competencia de universidades por no decir una de las pocas historias que tiene un final. La segunda razón sería que se notó que a pesar de que la obra comenzó como entretenimiento (o así vi los motivos del autor al principio) y comenzó a ganar seriedad la obra mientras que el autor comenzó a mejorar el estilo de escritura así como el desarrollo de la historia, así como la calidad de esta.
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I truly like how you develop the characters and their background. All the spirit skills were great but I would have like to know what was his 9th spirit ring in his sword. I would have also love that there were more moments with Rongrong and to know what spirit does Ning Hui got. Also I would like to have a chapter about Bai in the divine realm. And the most important of all..... WHERE IS THE CHAPTER OF S3X WITH QIAN RENXUE!?!?!?!?!?
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เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์ Good Fanfic ITS............................................. EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!EPIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem. Knowing there is a problem is not a problem. Knowing there is a problem and not being proactive to resolve the problem, however, is a problem.
At first the story is medium 👌, but after reading into it you'll find out that it's a pretty amazing novel, And thanks for dropping it halfway, This is the only Douluo Dalu I've ever seen that was completed
Yo!!!! When will you start update new chapters??????? If you update new chapters how many chapters will it be or you will update all chapters in one go????😅😅😅😅😅😊😊😊😊😊😊
After this novel will you publish new or not ??????????? ?????????? If you releases new one i am looking forward to it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I start reading, a question before I start, is this harem? or just have a pairing? . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
how to say, honestly I do not like it, multiple personalities, naive, and memory loss are all collected................................ . ....................................................
Here's the author doing a review of this already finished novel. I started writing this novel as my first time truly writing in English to improve it. The grammar and phrase construction is lacking at first, but as the novel advances, I improved in it, Grammarly was a great help. For the Stability of the updates, I finished writing 256 chapters after 10 months, almost a chapter for day as average. Is already finished so there's nothing much to say. About the story, at first it start with a lax and infantil writing, with a very crude English. The story being written day by day without, always changing what I had thought. This causes some plot holes over the novel that I closed maybe a little forcefully over the novel. What most people complained was about the loss of memory. Yes, there was and in chapter forty-something is explained the why. Read it thinking that he has no memories of the novel after his first ring. People also complained about his style that was control-defense, but why? With a team is a good style, being able to control the team, letting the others finish them. Then as the story advances, entering more the solo player mode, his style changes. Summarizing, I liked to write this story even facing against the hate. It starts a little poor and I am not too proud of it, only considering it as the improvement of the later parts. But, I am proud of the end, really liking how it finished. If you like OP characters that goes facepalming everyone, because it didn't matter anything because they are OP and untouchable, this isn't your novel. He grows stronger than his age, faving greater enemies but always with that might lose.