Dark Hope

LV 2

lighting

Honestly man your story plot was interesting. I really like the joy and capri character. I think there more sereet about capri.Now i can add your story in my reading list.keep writing.

LV 4

WWFire

One question, are you writing a novel or are you screenwriting? None of the chapters you write can be said as a "novel" or a "webnovel" per se. Please, please, please do a research on how to write a proper novel from the beginning: the dialogues, how to properly world build, how to write proper description, etc. Heck, read the top novel here and you will know that you don't actually write one. Okay, let's just say that screenwriting is your intention, your syntax and grammar is plain trainwreck: punctuation, too much use of ellipses, capitalization. I don't know why people gave you such high rating, this might be one of the worse novel I ever reviewed here. How dare you even use emojis just because you can't describe things. Last but not least, fix half-as*ed synopsis. Just seeing it makes wondered if you write this seriously or when you are drunk.

LV 14

lynerparel

The story itself feels like it could be quite interesting, but since this, is a fantasy and it only has thirteen chapters there is so much more potential for the future characters making the story even more interesting. The Mc is likable which is a plus since I've been reading some questionable mc's is other stories.

LV 5

Norah_Koch

Interesting story with potential. I like the haunting tone. Mc is starting a new magical journey. I am hooked so far. Continue writing, author :)

LV 14

Kamlyn

Story is interesting. I read only few chapters yet and it got me hooked. The only thing I want to suggest to author is that, if you add the synopsis then it will get easier for readers to choose your story. Because every story need a synopsis and I can't find any. Even if to keep the story a mystery , try to add something to let the readers know about story. Otherwise story is good. 😀👍

LV 4

RandomGuy

Hai! I wanna say that your story is great! Keep up with the good work, author! 😊 Btw I make a story too and it would be kind of u if u can check it out and give some reviews and stars in there too 😊 My story : https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/14901475106138705

LV 3

Empress_Ai

I finish reading this one, the story is good but it do have a grammatical error which is not that bad. The chapter is not that much but overall it is awesome.. Keep up the good work and have a nice evening or day.. I don't know..

LV 3

dark_Vision

Story plot was too good, Waiting for the true power of capri,Just need to improve the Grammatical error. Story until last episode Simply awesome.

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LV 10

FallenButterfly

The story itself is quite interesting, it is still early stages of the story so there is still a lot of potential to grow and broaden. I don't usually read magical realism but you have a good story in mind. Just a suggestion, make your synopsis as though you are catching a fish with your hook because most readers rely on that :) Goodluck! Keep writing!