Dawn Of The Dark Age

I like the writing so far, keep it up! Excellent character portrayals too with a bit of goofy moments here and there. I was honestly cliffhanged! I expected more chapters xD Pls update soon 👌👌👌

LV 3

L_Asterisk

So cute and childish. Simple writing, making younger readers to relate to this story because it so easy to read. You only need to adjust how you portray every details. I like how you execute the action scene on your first chapters but the story goes nowhere following that after, mind making a good plot to go through.

LV 3

Rhod_Icyfreeze

Most of the chapters are short so it is easy to read and finish the entire chapter. It is so good for readers who don't want long blocks of text. Some part of the story is written in fast-paced while some part is well written in details and there's some written in huge elaboration making the scene(s) and chapters quite long for a simple scene. I like the way you're making the story simple and relatable to the game. Merging characters with a different timeline based on their designs and back stories are really hard. From a simple story that turns to complicated flow. I think you have to at least provide the plot to know where your story will lead and ends. =)

LV 1

SOPEDDAENG

My friend (pattatass) recommended this, I'm giving you a good review because I can feel you passion and how hardworking you are. Your writing style is good, the only problem is the updates huhu as a reader, I'm so hungry for your updates huhuhu

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LV 3

BAEPSAE

The story is great! Aside from minor typos, the plot and characters in itself have great execution. Keep it up!! Btw, team HAYAGURA forevs!😂✌️ Stay cute neko-chan!😉✌️

LV 2

g4y4jennie

pretty near my standards. sorry about the bluntness, das just how i am. anyways, i like how you based the story on depicting how their battle w hanzo wouldve ended instead of basing it on their adventure. good

So proud of you. lot of potentials knowing that this is your first. Keep going! we believe in you as always! Can't wait for the next chapter :)

its good in all but the update is the only problem so it only gets a 2 so yeah if the updates are a little more frequent than i would really enjoy this story

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