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Supreme Origin: Time King

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Join Elijah Branches, a six year old boy in his path to trinity while he slowly discovers the Supreme Origin.

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    ShadowHand

    the story focuses on the girl sticking to the main character, and its a burden to the main character, i had enough of it so i'm dropping this. 😒😒😒😒 there's even a chapter that the main charter is trying to rescue his parents but during the night the girl snuggle the main character and the author allows its.. what a joke

    4yr
    ดู 8 การตอบกลับ
    saintk

    so far everything is good but the is one small problem maybe i did not notice it but the seem to be very little information about the cultivation path, i figure moral is warrior spiritual is a mage as for divine could it be with occupation plus a divine ability or something like that? maybe i am wrong. but other that that good book, cant wait for the next update.

    5yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    ChubsC
    LV 11 Badge

    There is no pacing at all in this novel. One minute we are in a scene, the next, it jumps 4 months later or a couple weeks later. It's just not good. Time jumps are all well and good if they are done right...this..this is not done right.

    5yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    IPreferLonerMc

    The plot is interesting but I find the characters childish and gullible. The grammar is also very horrendous and this is the worst part. Although the story is interesting, the grammar is really annoying and worsens the story, even if I’m able to read it.

    5yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    HopeBones5

    Grammer is terrible idk why people said the authors english was good, this is torture just can't stand it. Story is ok if cliche but feels forced when author breaks the 4th wall all the time.

    4yr
    ดู 2 การตอบกลับ
    creatorGod

    The plot is interesting but I find the characters childish and gullible. The grammar is also very horrendous and this is the worst part. Although the story is interesting, the grammar is really annoying and worsens the story, even if I’m able to read it.View More

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    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    Ilovenovel

    Hey author, please stop skipping time. I'm getting stupid just by reading. Plus could you write the tiers or stage of cultivation in a way we can understand Thank love you

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    ScionOfDegeneracy

    Very underrated and unappreciated.. A great book. Apparently many just decided to ride on the hate train.

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    GodKingFinal

    Stupid story, terrible grammar, reading it equal to torturing yourself. Plus mix up storyline even i dont know whats happening. Overall garbage novel. I mean the point of writing a novel is to let your reader understand what you are writing, the emotion behind it but this **** is useless. I try to force myself reading it but i gave up until chapter 56.

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    ca_l
    LV 13 Badge

    A funny use of the norse mythology and the others with a fast pacing rather nice if compared with many other novels way too slow in a rather complicated world where gods, magic and cultivation are mixed Though you really need an editor to correct the mistakes because sometimes it can be hard to understand what you mean, I also saw that you repeated some sentences twice on some chapters. So an editor could help you correct what maybe you won't see when doing it yourself (don't forget that your readers will be happy to help you if you need us for that). And also it's only my opinion but 6 and 10 years old is kind of too young for what happens to them even if they are more mature or grown up. Keep going and good luck Mr/Ms Author 😁

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    Asterisk

    the author should get an editor to correct the grammar and english. overall story setting seems good And the cultivation ranking..... just love it

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    HELLkaiser

    Thnaks for the novel 😉😎😎😉😎😉😎😉😎😉😋😉☺😉😎😉😎😎😉🙂☺😊😊😎😉😎😉🙂😊😊☺😋😉☺😉😎🙂😉🙂😉😉😎😉😎😎😚😎😋😚😎😚☺☺😉☺☺😉☺😉☺☺😉🙂🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉🙂😁🙂🙂😚😎😉😎😎😉🙂😉🙂🙂😉🙂😉🙂😉😉😊😊

    5yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    SpaceTimeSovereign

    Overall it's a great theme and a great story. Seems like it has great potential to be a few hundred chapters long if the author sticks with it. So far the only thing is the grammatical errors but the author said they were working on it so in my opinion it's a great book overall and a recommended read

    5yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
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    3yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
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    3yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    Novel_Crazy

    This novel is good.Sure,it might not have good grammar and the story sometimes not making sense it still is awesome.A whole 112 chapters are free and the main charater is strong but not too strong.All in all i would recommend this novel! 😁

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
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    4yr
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    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    Jhai_alx

    Damn why you make the main character seem weak at times dude lowkey supposed to be strong as **** he used to be stupid strong in his other life’s so Why does he struggle so much against everyone

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ
    sovereingofneetlif

    Needs a few grammar corrections... getting into lecture mode explaining the levels of power and whatnot of the universe is a bit forced could be more natural with hints here and there to make us get it. But nevertheless a good story so far will continue to read it

    4yr
    ดู 0 การตอบกลับ

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