2รีวิว
- คุณภาพงานเขียน
- ความเสถียรของการอัปเดต
- การดำเนินเรื่อง
- กาสร้างตัวละคร
- พื้นหลังโลก
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เขียนรีวิว
I like the foundation of the story. The characters need to be fleshed out a little more, also the system seems to be a little lacking. There are a lot of system story out there yours is kind of bland. Also for English not being your first language you are doing great,but I would recommend getting a editor to correct some of the common grammar errors it kind ruins the flow of the story.
This book keeps getting better and better I can’t wait tell the next chapter comes out And I hope that you will write back to me so I can know when you’re next chapter is coming out
I like the foundation of the story. The characters need to be fleshed out a little more, also the system seems to be a little lacking. There are a lot of system story out there yours is kind of bland. Also for English not being your first language you are doing great,but I would recommend getting a editor to correct some of the common grammar errors it kind ruins the flow of the story.
This book keeps getting better and better I can’t wait tell the next chapter comes out And I hope that you will write back to me so I can know when you’re next chapter is coming out