Elemental Nations: Oni of the Whirpool

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Iwalkthestars

Hello! Author here. First I want to thank everyone for reviewing my story. Even the negative reviews are welcome. This particular story of mines is an attempt to be dark and bloody. Let me add some points of this story. 1) He will be OP to an extent. He does have the Rinnegan. He has a system that allows him to exchange tokens for Jutsu. Let’s not forget he has Mokuton and the Byakugan via his first path. 2) Since He has altered the verse the power level will be altered as well. You might see a weaker Orochimaru and a stronger Sakura etc. 3) I usually don’t like harems because they are hard to pull off and I’m a rookie at best in writing. I don’t have those chops,and I barely can date one girl irl lol. So my shamless review of my own story done ✅

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ThreePlains

confusing too many POV going on ... too many things ... dunno is like the tipical FanFic that everytime something happens every second the MC can't do nothing.... no time to practice jutsu no time to think... at this pace MC is going to become too OP for the narutoverse in 30 chapter without practicing jutsu

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Lord_haden

Dark man ways too dark even i feel lole unleashing my undead minions on some characters you created and thats coming from someone with no heart god help your mind my friend cuz the demons are alredy in it.... still a good novel but for a overpowered mc with a cheat doujutsu and system you made him too weak weak on an extreme mental level and too trusting for someone that has a broken heart like him.. they way i see it u should have just made him kill her and go train by itself thats how i feel his mind would take him if i was him... but we never know it is your novel so hope you suprise us..

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Wolfboy123r

This is amazing please dont drop this

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Luna_Ranar

I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS STORYYYYYY SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUUUUCHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!

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Supreme_Leader

Need more chapters.

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Supreme_Leader

May The Darkness Ever Prevail. I'm fed up of all the fanfics where the hokage is a kind old man who helps the Mc very easily. And ***** MCs that easily trust anyone that appears as a good guy in the anime and manga. I mean we only see these characters from naruto's point of view, they were good to Naruto but does it really mean they were good guys? Besides a person in the position of the hokage no matter how old and kind he appears must be a shrewd person who does what he needs to do to keep the village safe.

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GodOfFamine

I'm enjoying this dark fan fiction,I wonder will be control the ninetails or destroy him,I also cant wait for the different worlds.

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Raven_Milles

This is awesome it's different refreshing when is the next chapter coming out I want more 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍

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Wolfsbain

This is an amazing set up so far, please keep it going and do not drop it. Love it. 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

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Crazyrider

please don't die on us author-san. please update it for the 3 power stones i contributed....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................please

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GodKingTurtle

ok i like this story has some nice potential but the grammar is killing me like at least try to prof read the chapters as for updates if its a few chapters a week im happy

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RoiRed

Really good, I look forward to the continuation! He falls into my library without hesitation 140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...140...1

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not2complex

The first, dark, intense, exciting fanfic I have read - AWESOME!!!!!! Ugh! I was on the edge of my seat and BAM! no more chapters. I truly hope the author updates soon. If the future writing is as exceptional as what I have read so far (nice, long chapters so good basis), even 10 chapters a day would not be enough!!! I realize 10 chapters a day is unrealistic unless the author is posting a past completed work - I am merely using it as a poetic expression for more. Please update date multiple times soon!

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_Crystal_

I really like this,for the first time Naruto became a 'human' that know what hate taste like.Its almost unreal how can he has no negative feeling.I can't wait to see him when he is strong enough and hlget his sweet revenge.Konaha deserve to perish from the land of fire.He suffer too much beside its not like in this fan fiction there are anybody that treat him normally like in the original one,so honestly speaking he has nobody that he must protect in this damn village,well except for cat of cause if only she didn't die though..... Good work and please keep it up....