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dropped. was too rushed with the powers mc was too op at like 8 also feels bland.
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เขียนรีวิวthis is incase some people didnt fully read the first chapter properly or read the synopsis but this is an AU not the original anruto world as this is a fanfiction and obviously ill be changing things. alright so for the part where the oc is talking with hanabi I had a comment telling me "shes only 1" and as I explained in the first chapter THIS IS AN AU so please read properly next time before posting feedback.
It is good, Story. We have an OP character in the Naruto World. But I kinda dislike it that you made him show his abilities a bit too early. It would have been better if he had shown his "Kekkai Genkai" when he is older. The scene where he tells them he can kill everyone in seconds kinda feels off because he is 6 years old. His speech would have been more powerful if he had been like 13/4. And for my taste, the MC is a bit too much OP with his Time stop abilities, which he will get in the future. Haki Satoru abilities were OP enough.
เปิดเผยสปอยเลอร์I can't wait for more chapters it's pretty good but author don't use shortcuts on word like u it's ruins the immersion of the story and stops the flow but that's about it for mistakes
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First time writing a story ofc I'll give it 5 stars please enjoy and give me feedback on what I could improve on. There will be some stuff that doesn't make sense, cliches and plot holes but I will try to improve as I go using the feedback provided. Enjoy