I can understand Nessa or the Duchess losing their virginity to Leon, but I don’t understand why Ella just stopped at kissing her fiancé that day. Logically speaking, he’s her childhood friend and also her fiancé. Losing her virginity to someone she just met instead of him doesn’t make much sense. After all, this is a hentai novel and you may not have wanted to extend the introduction to the subject, but I think it would have been better for Ella to remain a little more loyal and stand by the hero while the others went astray, and after a while, she became the most brutal ntr character among them. (After all, this would be nice to lay the foundations for a long series)
is this revenge?
Does the mc take revenge? (frankly, I would prefer him not to take revenge or couldn't all series end with revenge) I think you can explain the description of the series a little more, I'm trying to decide whether to read it or not.
I've seen a lot of series that say system but don't tell anything about the system, but this one is not one of them, I liked it.
If I were to summarize the series now, here are my takeaways from the 60 episodes: The series is fluent, yes it's long, nice summaries, but frankly it doesn't offer what the title tells you. ntr choice based system. Throughout the 60 episodes, we only read about his mother having sexual intercourse, and we can't even call it ntr because is your mother your wife? Yes, there may be an NTR about the mother, but the author added a feature that says the system numbs the main character's feelings and there is no groundbreaking section for us to feel close to his mother. In summary, those with patience can read it.
So this is what ntr means? Did you actually start reading without reading the tags?
Frankly, I thought it would be more logical to choose one option. This is probably a ntr male character for the main character, but was there a need for men everywhere anyway? It would have been more logical to choose a woman. There is no basis for female characters right now. That's why I couldn't even feel sorry for or attached to a childhood friend. While returning from the forest, They could get intimate and it could make path for a good scene
It's a good series, you write fluently, but there are many mistake, maybe you can get advice, for example, the level of the system is 5, but there are 3 things in the shop, Or if the character becomes stronger by being degrading, why is the system still sleeping? , why does he get 5h points from the task during 15 episodes? I think this is a very unbalanced system. Every episode may not be 18+. The basis of a long series is based on long narration and abundance of stories.
Yes, you have talent in writing, but there are many things missing in this novel. For example, when you say humilation system, why did the system never appear? Was it something like a simulation? And why did you go into the subject without introducing the characters? or why was the character constantly humiliated? Yes, he lives up to his name, but he saves his mother with the power he gained from the system and mother give a reward (humiliate) to him. Wouldn't it make more sense
I think two main characters should not be considered too much in such series because people adopt the first thing they see as the main character and when I look at the series, I think you are confused. If you want to write netori, you can open a different series. It is a good thing that you try to combine netorase and netori, but if you tried this with a single character, it would be draw more attention
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