Highly recommend this one. One of my favourite fanfics!
Absolutely amazing idea, however the execution of said idea is terrible. Also I’m assuming the writer isn’t a native English speaker because there are so many grammatical errors in this fan fic. Read up until chapter 89 and decided to give this up.
That’s fair. However there’s no reason for the writer to leave out pieces of the story like this because it comes across as lazy.
"Gaara will do all he can to take the victory." Orochimaru stated sure of this.
Naruto : Trickery
Anime & Comics · Doppins
My thoughts exactly.
The loss of his chakra was enough to stop Orochimaru from using his skin shedding jutsu. Jiraiya's rasengan hit his stomach perfectly. Orochimaru, the so called genius of the sannin died by the hands of this old sensei and his teammate whom he had thought to be an idiot all his life.
Naruto : Trickery
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Choji is supposed to have Earth, Fire and Yang release. Did the writer change it? If he did then my bad I must’ve missed it.
"Lightning release: Lightning arrow." Choji exclaimed and fired an arrow of lightning at Gaara.
Naruto : Trickery
Anime & Comics · Doppins
Should’ve included this over 2 chapters ago.
"Very impressive, Hokage Sama," Orochimaru in his Kazekage disguise said.
Naruto : Trickery
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For those wondering, Orochimaru is disguised as the Kazekage. The writer has completely left that fact out and has just inserted him here without mentioning it in this version of the story. I’m guessing the writer is assuming that only Naruto fans are reading this and isn’t taking into consideration new readers.
"Gaara will do all he can to take the victory." Orochimaru stated sure of this.
Naruto : Trickery
Anime & Comics · Doppins
In his disguise as who? You need to be more specific. How did Orochimaru get to the Hokage between this and the previous chapters? You are leaving out crucial information here.
"Interesting strategy of your student there, Hokage Sama." Orochimaru said in his disguise.
Naruto : Trickery
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How are you going to have 3 people in the finals? 🤨
"Winner by knockout: Sakura Haruno. She commences to the finals." Hayate announced to the cheers of the audience.
Naruto : Trickery
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Thanks for the chapter but I’d weird how you’re using Hiruzen and Sakumos full names this chapter.
Naruto: My Unique System
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