i can’t give full marks just yet but i’m sure that this will be five stars across the board in the future, the action scene could use some more discription but other than this is awesone so far, keep it up pal, and don’t lose hope like many other writers out there.
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this story has a lot of potential bit the chapters seemed like they were written in a rush. Also you need to work on your punctuation, i suggest to get a beta reader or, read the chapters over again, i would be glad to be your beta reader or someone to help with your story. [img=recommend]
this is not your book bucko. the origional is on fanfic.net under the name of On the bench
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this the naruto fan fiction i have been waiting for, finally a good chinoiki clan fan fiction thank you for blessing me with this puece of gold
in saine
one of the best one piece fan fictions i have ever read. please author keep updating this story i want to see where this story goes
I’m not poor, i’m just cheap and the proper grammar is “You’re poor” not “you are poor” dimwit - not saying mine is any better though
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great book overall but it’s trash cause they started to only post on patreon so the story cuts off and you have to pay to read it
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this is great keep up the good work
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