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The man approached, bowing slightly. "It seems I owe you my life."
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies
drawn back to a time.
I touched the hairpin that graced my hair, drawing back to when my mother first told me the story of the pin.
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies
fell
She wasn't there with me then, so I scrapped that thought. Maybe it happened when she and another cousin were visiting. Lorne and I were roughhousing in the trailer in defiance of the rule that there would be none. For a good reason, too, seeing how the door I was pushed up against swung open. I felt out the back door, pitched forward and cracked my head on two of the three metal stairs that led out to the area where my grandmother used to toss the contents of the ten-gallon pail we used to use as a makeshift toilet. I can still recall the stench.
Thành thị · S.E. Saunders
No just.
He was chained, his skin marred with blood and fecal matter. Upon his face an unreadable expression. No anger, or suspicion. Just the face of a man who had forgotten hope.
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies
Clean up quotes, make it make sense.
"I'll sleep at night. Will you?" I shot back, gripping the pin tighter. "He'd need to pry it from my cold dead hand."
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies
clutched her... ?
Winter clutched her, feeling nervous and scared. She didn't know what people would think of her. It had been a year since she last visited the office, and she wasn't sure if anyone would recognize her.
Thành thị · ForeverPupa
I'm immediately liking where this is going.
"I said, keep addressing me as Madam. You can call me Madam Winter, but I don't want you to call me wife or darling. We're not close enough to do that."
Thành thị · ForeverPupa
Yay!
Expand for transition to next thought to move plot along.
I touched the hairpin that graced my hair, drawing back to when my mother first told me the story of the pin.
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies
Out to where my friend was, out to where my home and family were.
Breaching the veil between the temple and the dense forest, I saw that the moon hung low over its outline. I stumbled over a root, my knees hitting the ground their flesh pierced by a rock. My breath ragged. I was out. I cast a frantic glance around realizing everyone had gone home.
FATED FOLLY
Kỳ huyễn · MegMerrilies