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life is good when you are alive but bad if you are dead. so be alive

2022-11-09 Unido India
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gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
14 hours ago
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It was fun and I laughed a lot so nice work. Hmm about the dialogue writing huh ,it can't be helped since your inspiration comes from Reverend insanity. As good as plot is in the end its a Chinese novel so if you want my advice then read some western materials they have great fluidity in terms of conversatiin. and ofcourse the direct way to improve would be to write some short stories for practice since you can't change the rhythm in this novel you have build. In my previous comments multiple times I have given names of some novel available on this platform for you which I don't remember now but they were some good ones. recently I haven't been reading much other then yours so I don't have anything for u. maybe try Haunting Adiline I guess.

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[A/N: Quite a few dialogues in the last few chapters. It used to be one of my weak points and I still think there's plenty of room for improvement, but let me know if it's fine. There will still be some discussion between the elders, but Fujin and Tsunade will move onto their task quickly here onwards.]

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
14 hours ago
Replied to I_am_truck_kun

🤣🤣🤣🤣 even characters in fanfics are doing this

Homura said, "I've always been under the assumption that you did something to set him off, Danzo. Do you want to say that you never did anything to antagonize him other than deploying spies around his house?"

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
14 hours ago
Replied to Rk6T

this pikachu feels so lusty 😂

Tsunade smirked and said, "I didn't know you had such a silver tongue."

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
14 hours ago
Commented

can this be called flirting ? finally my guy is actually exploring his youth

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Tsunade folded her arms and placed her chin on her hand as she observed Fujin. She replied, "I'm confused. Should I feel offended that you called me old, flattered because you said I look young or violated that you gazed at me in such a manner?"

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
1 days ago
Commented

electric energy isn't really stable either

Initially, Lian aimed to create a protective layer by attaching fire elemental energy to his body, but now he realized that was quite naive.

Pokemon Battle System: I Reincarnated As A Charmander

Pokemon Battle System: I Reincarnated As A Charmander

Video Games · ThatGoodStuff

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
2 days ago
Replied to Kefy0

because author is dumb nd he wants everything to go as movie

Because of Dumbledore's suspicions, Cyrus often felt that time was running out. He was unwilling to waste a single second.

I became Voldemort

I became Voldemort

Book&Literature · HornyFBI

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
2 days ago
Replied to Hugo_Macaroni

my favorite moment of fang yuan is when he defeats the northern plan wisdom GU immortal and he asked why are you not wisdom path GU immortal.

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Thoughts clashed at the speed of light in her mind as she carefully analyzed every aspect of Hiromasa's words. At the same time, the Konoha ninjas also looked at Hiromasa with surprise. Needless to say, the ones who were shocked the most were the two elders.

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Naruto : The Wind Calamity

Fantasy · Devil_Hex

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
3 days ago
Replied to kruxchifer

interesting choice .... they are kinda similar in horny part

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
3 days ago
Replied to DThorn

I feel like writing one but I don't know about this Wifu catalogue much

He still hasn't reached the peak of power with his Templates and he can buy more. With the extra years, he would be capable of easily, and effortlessly, dealing with Gojo. But he is already planning his Travel to the next world, no point in wasting time here.

Potential Man (Megumi SI/JJK/WC Fic)

Potential Man (Megumi SI/JJK/WC Fic)

Anime & Comics · Evans_The_Writer

gaurav_Kumar_1424
gaurav_Kumar_1424
3 days ago
Replied to EvilWhisp

I am starting to think that porn is overrated... its much more fun to read smut then watching porn

And she does just that, bounding her ass on his lap, her cheeks clapping every time it hits his muscled thighs. 

Potential Man (Megumi SI/JJK/WC Fic)

Potential Man (Megumi SI/JJK/WC Fic)

Anime & Comics · Evans_The_Writer

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    Itachi Uchiha The Bringer of Hope

    Anime & Comics ACTION REINCARNATION OVERPOWERED TRAGEDY NARUTO NO-HAREM

    Mc gets reborn as Itachi Uchiha, see how he lives his life and saves his clan and family.

    6 Chs 98 Coleções

  • smoker the marine original

    smoker the marine

    Anime & Comics ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION R18 ONEPIECE

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    10 Chs 67 Coleções