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Avron

LV 3
2022-11-05 Unido Global

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Avron
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This is way too much bullsheet in the dream like we get it he died before geting the girl on earth ,but it is just running the flow of the novel and not adding anything to the story like for the stabbing is over used and it was just 2 to 10 seconds before he lost consciousness not enough to give him a PTSD in a second ,stop overusing the supposed trauma in the story people are stronger than that, you make it seem like he was in a dungeon tortured for a month and then some,all the while that girl was getting raped i front of him.since that didn't happen don't drag this down with flashback to earth and the girl it is irrelevant to the story of now.

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