Well, shoot. I'd easily rank the writing quality at somewhere within the top 10-20% percentile here on WN. I saw very few grammatical errors, if at all, and the narration comes across like the hero telling us what's going on and giving commentary here and there. Not sure why, but I'm reminded of those teen series that used to air on Disney and Nickelodeon back in the day. PS - it's 'body transference', not 'body transferring' :)
The writing's got room for improvement (as others here may have noticed), but as of this review's posting, whatever flaws were present don't detract from the content itself too much. Additionally, it may be best to limit allusions to existing works in pop culture to a minimum. I particularly recommend looking up comma splices, run-on sentences and sentence fragments on Google since these are the common mistakes I came across in your work. PS - if you'd like a more detailed go-over, kindly PM me over Discord or something :)
Not a bad start, all things considered. I detected the occasional sentence fragment and comma splice (on top of the punctuation issues here and there that the others mentioned), but they're tolerable and can be fixed given a good proofread and edit. PS - on the 'Doctor Strange' bit, try looking up the term 'astral projection' or 'astral form'. It may just be me, but unless it's first person perspective and I'm literally laying out a character's thoughts in the narrative, I don't really like alluding to pop culture too much.
The writing's really good - I'd say it's in the upper 20-30% of all output here on WN. It's not without hiccups here and there (things being capitalized that shouldn't, for instance - it's 'deja vu', lowercase), but those hiccups barely detract at all from the content itself, and they're nothing a thorough proofreading and editing session can't fix. PS - this wouldn't happen to have been based on the movies 'Bruce Almighty' and/or 'Oh God', would it?
Hi there - glad you liked it. For the record, I WAS inspired by Ghost Rider (specifically Robbie Reyes as he appeared in Agents of SHIELD) when I wrote this, but I also took cues from Daredevil, Batman and (to an extent) Green Arrow as he appeared in the CW series. Till next time :D
Considering English isn't your first language, you've gotten a good grasp on it so far. There's room for improvement in terms of grammar (Grammarly's got lots of articles on common writing mistakes and how to avoid them), especially where the comma splices, tense consistency and punctuation use is concerned, but it's nothing that a good proofread and rewrite can't fix. Keep at it.
It's got potential, for sure. The writing's got room for improvement, but the errors in grammar and composition that ARE present don't detract too much from the content itself. The plotline seems in line with various K-dramas I've caught wind of over the years, which does say something about the author's interests which may be influencing her writing. Keep working on your writing, and you'll go far.
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Considering English isn't your first language, you've gotten a good grasp on it so far. There's room for improvement in terms of grammar (beyond the actual grammar checker, Grammarly's got lots of articles on common writing mistakes and how to avoid them), especially where the comma splices, tense consistency and punctuation use is concerned, but it's nothing that a good proofread and rewrite can't fix. You're off to a good start, all things considered, so just keep at it.
Well done.
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original Angel of Wrath
4.77
"If you live to seek revenge, dig a grave for two." An 18-year old youth commits a good deed on the best day of his life, only for his reward to come in the form of an untimely demise. The otherworldly intervention of an interested onlooker saves his life, but not without a cost. He now struggles with what to do with his second chance, and wonders if he can shoulder the burden that was given to him. And before long, he'll have to decide whether dedicating himself to the pursuit of revenge is worth sacrificing all the other wonderful things that make life worth living.33 Chs 70 Coleções
I'd grade the writing quality anywhere from B+ to A- approximately. No major grammatical errors, and the author's more than satisfactory command of English already places him miles ahead of at least half the other writers over here on WN. As for the story itself, reading this takes me back to the .hack franchise I used to love playing through (and watching) in my teens. Lastly, with regard to points for improvement? There's really not much I have on that end, considering what's already been written is already very good. The one bit of general advice I'd say applies here is to go back to your material and proofread it at least once or twice a month for any grammatical errors you may have missed at an earlier point. Well done overall.
Xian Impact [OLD]
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