A great trial read! The premise is original and doesn't lean into tropes. The story so far is well told and progresses naturally instead of shaping into disconnected arcs. If I had a bone to pick it would be the translator, terms like "Stargate" can be a bit immersion breaking and calling star systems galaxies is downright confusing. I'd give It a full 10/10 for a trial read but the translator should brush up on their astronomy before this is greenlit, otherwise locations and the like will become confusing later down the line.
A great trial read! The premise is original and doesn't lean into tropes. The story so far is well told and progresses naturally instead of shaping into disconnected arcs. If I had a bone to pick it would be the translator, terms like "Stargate" can be a bit immersion breaking and calling star systems galaxies is downright confusing. I'd give It a full 10/10 for a trial read but the translator should brush up on their astronomy before this is greenlit, otherwise locations and the like will become confusing later down the line.
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