And the most intelligent, the most subtle, and generally the most interesting among all these men is the quiet and intellectual Satoru. Bonus points for glasses. [img=recommend]
Yin's hunch was correct. Satoru had begun an internal investigation of all the group members who frequented the mansion in the period before Yin kidnapped Naomi.
Urban · Williane_M_P
Ok, now we have a dark-path cultivator on stage:) Sorry, could not hold back. I like that guy already.
And the moment the man stood in the center of the room, well below the light. Naomi stood alert to the mysterious figure of this tall, stocky man who exuded the scent of danger, with long black hair and amber eyes, white skin, and with a snake tattoo starting from his jaw and extending to his neck and disappearing under the formal clothes he wore.
Urban · Williane_M_P
That escalated quickly.....
Tatsuo smiles and suddenly kisses, breaking Naomi's defenses who didn't understand anything from the beginning, and soon pulls herself together and bites Tatsuo's tongue who stops immediately and says:
Urban · Williane_M_P
She did get in trouble, didn't she?:) For now, I am simply waiting to see how this situation resolves. I like the way you write tension.
"STOP!" Said the man wearing round glasses, who was sitting on the other side of the bench, shooting a cold, deadly glare at his companion."The boss said not to hurt her. And if you can't stand her chatter, put the gag in her mouth. But don't take the bag off her mind."
Urban · Williane_M_P
The setting is something unexpected and I am very intrigued so far. I think you could use less exposition to explain Naomi's backstory and add some hints instead: her memories of her father's misbehavior, snippets of her life in Brazil. I think that you've revealed everything a bit too quickly. Anyway, I want to know where this goes.
It is a very promising read that starts out as a familiar revenge story but surprises you with an unexpected twist. The best part of the story is its great pacing. The only aspect of this novel that I found a bit jarring was Lilian's evil family. The main antagonists are proverbial monsters with no redeeming qualities. While I understand the intention behind this portrayal of the bad guys, I hope that the author will add more nuance. I would love to know their backgrounds, their fears, and their hopes. Overall, this story is an enjoyable read for those, who like power fantasy and good old revenge stories. I think it's a promising start.
I am waiting for a slow grind and regular upgrades:)
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Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
LitRPG vibes!!!! Yes, I already love this setting.
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Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
The premise is great so far, although the protagonist is too much of a sacrificial lamb. I guess that her naivete is intentional. I hope she will become a badass in the future. Also, I hope the evil sister is not just evil, but actually has some compelling motives and inner struggles.
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Fantasy · Blue_Blitz
This is one of the rare romance stories that I would recommend even to those, who usually avoid the genre. Despite certain grammar mistakes, The Hacker Girl is easy to read and fun to follow. It will charm you with a cast of quirky characters and a vibrant setting. The main character gets kidnapped a bit too many times in the story (poor Naomi really should watch her back), but the mess she causes every time propels the narrative forward.
The Hacker Girl
Urban · Williane_M_P