I can tell I'm not going to enjoy this. the writing is just poor. From the talking out loud as a way of conveying thoughts to the reader, to the blank personality, the lack of knowledge of asoiaf, the way your characters talk like old grandmothers from 1940's england rather than characters from planetos. it's just shit
how does she even fit
"I can see the levers," Gilika whispered next to him, as the twenty-seven or so soldiers and Demi-Humans behind them readied their weapons.
Elden Ring : Godrick The Golden
Video Games · Marine0IQ
this suffers from what most of corns fics suffer from, characters just always feel weak. He could write a character with power equivalent to the sage of 6 paths and they'd still just feel weak. character are hyped up too early, or we see their progression too closely, which makes them seem stronger than they are. character progression doesn't have to be, and honestly shouldn't be, they get strong -> they still lose -> get stronger -> beat the person they lost to -> repeat process till the end of the fic. That's just so amateurish, like I expect that from kids who first start out writing, not somebody who's done this for years. you're fairy tail/bleach crossover suffered from this too. no matter how strong the MC was, they were constantly losing to everyone except fodder. it's just annoying to read something that has so much potential fail in things that are so easy to resolve.
why would she give up that information...
"I ate the Toge Toge no Mi. I can grow spikes from every part of my body," she explained as her fingernails turned to giant fingernails, each one half a meter long, as sharp as a sword.
The Storm Pirate Luffy
Anime & Comics · Drinnor
when he goes all out, does he not ditch them🤦♂️
Fujin answered, "It'll improve the efficiency of the jutsu a lot. I carry swords in my hands, so to slam my hands on the ground, I'll have to discard my swords temporarily, which doesn't seem to be a good idea.
Naruto : The Wind Calamity
Fantasy · Devil_Hex
feels kinda cheap that some no Name dude could destroy his bones. hoping he gets the kaguya bone disintegration thing. definitely seems like it's the weaker of his kekkei genkai if an all it took was an explosion.
source for this?
he could shatter her kunai without lobbing off a chunk of her arm. his aim can't be that shit if he's considered a prodigy.
Anko gritted her teeth as she twisted her body around, landing on her feet and launching herself at me, kunai in hand. I smiled and met her attack head-on, our weapons clashing with a loud metallic ring.
Naruto: Faint Smile.
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
since when? that's literally never been a problem in canon? Don't give problems to things that don't need them. that's just plain unnecessary. it the jutsu is slow, that's on anko. Obito Uchiha was able to use it amazingly well against Kakashi. most people we've seen in canon have used it without it's speed being an issue, Itachi and Sasuke among them.
"One of the biggest weaknesses of that jutsu you just used is that it requires some level of preparation prior to using it in order to be actually useful, because of how slow it is," I said, kicking Anko in the chest, pushing her back.
Naruto: Faint Smile.
Anime & Comics · CORNBRINGER
great chapter, was super fun to read.
Destiny: The Legendary Hunter
Video Games · Writers_Ablood