Myrsha

Very well. I'm pretty sure you can delete it yourself if you want? I understanding finding mystery stupid. But I disagree with it. Questions is what drive a story forward, it what makes the reader question "what's going to happen next?" "What's behind the next hill?" "Will X character survive?" "Will X character have an happy ending?" etc... That's just my take though. When it comes to world building it's even more important to make the readers care about the characters and the world they're in, before they try to learn about the world. If you want to avoid dragging your novel over "mystery" You might want to try talking about things in the world as if they're common sense, without the whole list of information. You can both keep up the pace, and let the readers get used to the world as the action happens. Again, just my grain of salt. ^.^ Good luck with your writing! The most important thing is enjoying it!

I'll delete the comment above as soon as you see it. Just like it or reply to tell me you did, it's meant for your eyes, not to stay there. ^.^ I simply don't have a way of contacting you privately.

I am going to leave my thoughts here. let me know if you want me to move it to the review. Here are my points so far, keep in mind, it's mainly my own personal likes and dislikes, there's no right or wrong way to do things here, if enough people like your work it becomes good. _ *1. The world setting is a good start. I generally love when an author take a location that would appear in a middle of a classic fantasy story, such as "a city of angels", and turn it into the main story._ *2. The '3rd person all knowing' view point you chose to write this novel with, is pretty hard to write. I personally find it a annoying to read, since the point of focus keep moving around all the time. But that's just my personal taste, some people may like it. _ *3. You could improve your sentence structure, as I've mentioned above in a paragraph comment._ *4. I like the dynamic between the wingless angel and the world traveler. The misunderstandings between them are great and there conversation is likeable. (at least for me), it's fun, convincing, and made me smile more than once. You have a good chemistry and a good goofy banter going on between the two._ *Summing it up: The idea and content are enjoyable to read for me, it's still too early to tell with 4 chapters though. The execution and the style of writing is hard for me to read.