he's actions contradict his words "I want to get strong SLOWLY, unnoticed" proceeds to speedrun a dungeon 5 times...
so she grew up with garm since childhood, and that same person she knew for a long duration of time suddenly switches personalities and habits and is also aligned with the same time a level 9 prisoner escaped, but despite all that, she does not feel suspicious at all? She just swoons over him and feels "interested"? alright author I get you want make her an ally, but come on... this is just forced at this point. Like you couldnt for once just made it a different kind of scenario where she immediately finds out and strikes a deal to see the surface? but no you just went back to the secret cool identity again, it was ok for night hound since it made sense why they wouldnt suspect vikir (in some parts) but there is just no way garm can avoid suspicion that long, especially a month AND when the guards literally were told that the "escaped prisoner" disguised as a doctor. please take some time to read your own stuff and think how other characters with their personality that you chose and wrote for them would react to garm's sudden change rather than your eagerness to turn her into an ally and just straight ul ignoring logical sense instead of another possible harem member. i apologize but this has been bothering me for so long constantly in agony wishing for kirko to realize instead of "Oh my god he has such cool torture methods, so interesting~"
the severity of punishment dont seem to be enough for the crime they committed, like genocide and only 15yrs? Endangering a country is 20 and vikir, doing exactly that, got 3k lifetimes? there's also corruption to take into account but the numbers dont line up. for a super high security prison, you'd expect to see prisoners with similar sentences as vikir but none of them in the new batch of prisoners
stg if this entire thing isnt an act caused by the plopi, i'm gonna be disappointed with how boring the twist is. like cool she's dead, move on please.
How sad would it be if he fell in the wrong way and just snaps his neck or gets a tiny sharp twig through his neck.
start of the harem route?
hey thanks man :) Maybe one day I get some motivation back, i'll try to write this story again but with better grammar and probably on a laptop.
If you don't feel like continuing to read after hearing this then I understand.
sadly, Chelsy is no longer a Virgin, our MC didn't make it in time. I know it's a bit f'd up that i wrote a 6yr old being raped. There are people thay sick in the head in real life, so what I'm doing with John is putting him in the shoes of the family members/ relatives that have had a child a victim of pedophiles. What I have planned for John is just a bunch of emotional and mental trauma
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original A Killer Can't Change
A psychotic killer with a kill count numbering in the thousands. His methods of killing that can make anyone vomit with just the sight of it. With every body found is a picture of his face with a bright smile posing with the head of his victim. And despite having his identity exposed, His killing spree continued for 33 years. Finally after decades of searching and chasing, He was now caught in the middle of decapitating his last victim. Judge: "With the amount of evidence gathered here today, this court sentences John Dweller to death! Any last words you despicable monster?" John: "...Thanks for this judge, I was getting bored here on earth anyway so a change in scenery in heaven or hell might be a good change. It was fun playing you people." those were the final words John left for the world. John Dweller, Age 56, dead on September 29, 2013. ====== Somewhere in a land of clouds... God: "Who's next on the list? Hmm let's see here.... John Dweller..." Reading through John's book of life, God's face changed from boredom to worried. God: "Oh cosmos... This one seems to have had quite the life down there... Welp on you go then little one. And with those words and a flick of his finger, God sent whatever was left of John's existence to a different world for another god to worry about. ==WARNING== This story has some screwed up stuff planned to give the MC some trauma to really ease him into being a killer. And one of those are child molestation so if yall aint into that then this might not be a story for you. =====FOR THE ARTIST===== I DO NOT OWN the art on the cover, I couldn't find the owner of this picture anywhere I looked. So if the artist sees this and want's it taken down just email me at bertingsburger@gmail.com (Yes i know the email looks like a joke but its what i actually use for anything that isnt involved in my personal life) Also my eyes are kind of screwed up and i end up pressing on "a" alot, so please be patient if you see words that just had a random "a" in it. i'll fix it when i find it.14 Chs 19 Coleções
aint no way right.
Revenge of the Iron-Blooded Sword Hound
Fantasy · Zeom