Plot is really good starting out and there is momentum into it. Read four chapters and it flows really well and the plot sticks to other elements of the story. Keep up the good work!
This is a good spin on a story where the protagonist is not so innocent or heroic like a lot of stories. The writing flow is smooth, grammar is well, and the atmosphere is breathtaking from the descriptions. Definitely keeping this in my library to read. Keep up the good work!
The story overall was really good, I started out with a few chapters feeling a little skeptical as this genre is not usually my cup of tea (I'm sort of a picky reader), but this is written well and the development is consistent to the story. I'll keep reading on, keep up the good work!
Really liked the world description and the environment surrounding the story. Writing flow was really good, and enjoyed the snarky remarks some of the characters jabbed at either a deity or another. Keep posting!
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original Sea of the Forsaken
Concluído
It was supposed to be a normal visit to her uncle's place. Everything was planned out to prevent anything from happening by her parents, but it didn't end that way in the end. After taking a dive in an underwater cave with her cousins, Lynae and Meredith, something changed within her. Ever since that day, Amelia, Lynae, and Meredith uncover more on their family's secret lineage resulting in them becoming something that they thought was not possible. Now showing their true scales, they adjust their lives into becoming more than just mermaids, but as the rightful rulers of the five water realms along with two mermen. They meet other merfolk along the way to help guide them into making each of their designated realm a better place for everyone. However, not everyone would agree with what the five rulers have in mind as for what is best. The main concern would be set on the five after they discovered that they each inherited a special power from each sibling. But with those powers come with great distress. Fearing that history may repeat itself, the mer are keeping a close eye on Amelia since she is the reincarnate of the one whom was good at heart but became corrupt to the very end resulting in her transforming into a great beast that terrorized the underwater kingdom. If you want to take a dive into an adventure that stretches around the world while witnessing the supernatural elements these mer face everyday, then you are in the right place. Come under and see why the merfolk are not just a fairytale, but a lost race that the humans have forgotten for over centuries. 2020's WATTPAD'S NOBEL PRIZE WINNER - FANTASY CATEGORY 2020's ARCANA BOOK AWARDS SECOND PLACE - FANTASY CATEGORY HONORABLY RECOGNIZED IN THE 2020 SERANIAN AWARDS 2020's HALCYON AWARDS SECOND PLACE - ADVENTURE CATEGORY40 Chs 29 Coleções
There were some punctuation issues, but other than that the plot was steady. The environment matches well with the situation that is occurring during the story. Keep up the good work!
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